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Detention....or a reason to join the Dark Lord by Barkeeper - M - OneShot

Discussion in 'Almost Recommended' started by Barkeeper, Jan 26, 2007.

  1. Barkeeper

    Barkeeper Squib

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  2. MrINBN

    MrINBN Unspeakable

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    Follow the posting format. Did you not read the stickies?

    EDIT: Funny story. Got a chuckle out of me. And I can honestly say I've never seen that particular plot line before. 4/5
     
    Last edited: Jan 26, 2007
  3. Barkeeper

    Barkeeper Squib

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    Just found them....

    sorry!

    did i forget something?
     
  4. MrINBN

    MrINBN Unspeakable

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    Looks good to me. I don't think anyone will mind if it's out of order a little bit.
     
  5. mcatrage

    mcatrage Raptured to Hell

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    Kind of funny. Nothing really special.

    2.5/5
     
  6. Mage

    Mage Chief Warlock DLP Supporter

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    Very creative, and gave me a good laugh or two. 3.5/5
     
  7. Scarty

    Scarty Denarii Host DLP Supporter

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    Just my type of Humor so 5/5
     
  8. invisdible

    invisdible Second Year

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    I like it, it made me giggle a bit (in a manly way of course)

    4/5
     
  9. Antivash

    Antivash Until we meet again... DLP Supporter Retired Staff

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    read it ages ago. think it might be somewhere in the library already.
     
  10. yojorocks

    yojorocks Seventh Year

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    A little bit on the weird side as far as humor goes for my tastes, but it was decently written. Amusing, yes, but nothing astounding or amazingly funny. The whole concept was original, but it didn't seem to have a point, and I swear the motorcycle joke isn't that funny...

    3/5- nothing overly special about it, but otherwise decent oneshot
     
  11. Crazy1

    Crazy1 Groundskeeper DLP Supporter

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    Not bad, but it could have been better. 3.5/5
     
  12. Richard

    Richard Supreme Mugwump

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    LOL Funny shit man...funny shit. 3.5/5 for me.

    Richard.
     
  13. ip82

    ip82 Prisoner

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    That was pretty dumb. 2.5/5
     
  14. For ESL, it was written pretty well. As far as plot, it was all right, nothing fabulous. I give it 3/5.
     
  15. [KS18]Raziel44

    [KS18]Raziel44 Card Captored and buttsecksed

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    Can't complain 3/5
     
  16. The Doctor

    The Doctor Unspeakable

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    Big fucking whoop. Use your wand or grow some balls.

    Obviously Harry has never had to change nappies.

    1/5.
     
  17. Srichapan

    Srichapan Disappeared

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    A stupid fanfiction. No, forget that. Stupid can be funny. This is just terrible.

    I don't know if it's me... maybe I have a weird sense of humor or maybe I'm in a serious mood right now, but this one shot left me expressionless first and incredulous in the end.

    At first I thought: 'oh, I get it. Maybe this is one of those fanfictions that condense all the humor in the last sentence.'
    I was right. It really was one of those fanfictions that condense all the humor in the last sentence. But unfortunately, 'all the humor' wasn't enough to make a niffler laugh. Well, maybe if the niffler was stoned... maybe...

    Everything, and I mean EVERYTHING, was intuitable just after the laundry was mentioned. And even if someone hadn't been immediately able to grasp that, what the fuck was 'I had to do Snape's laundry......'? That was the lamest key-sentence I ever read! The level of humor was already low, but with another key-sentence, the stoned niffler could have smiled slightly! Maybe...
    There were a lot of exclamation marks where they didn't make sense. Harry is 'out-of-this-world' and 'looking into space', and all he does is 'exclaim'. It just doesn't suit.

    Terrible. Just terrible.
     
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  18. Voice of the Nephilim

    Voice of the Nephilim Death Eater DLP Supporter

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    Wow, he had to do Snape's laundry. Really, horrible, on an unparalleled level.

    Just terrible.

    0/5
     
  19. Anya

    Anya Harley Quinn DLP Supporter

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    I agree, that was horrible.
    1/5
     
  20. Blaise

    Blaise Golden Patronus

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    Leaving Harry alone with Snape's laundry will always be a chance for revenge and experimentation with the most painful of charms/spells - never a traumatic experience.

    No score for lack of lol'z