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Emancipation by AtrumUnas - T

Discussion in 'Almost Recommended' started by carvell, Dec 29, 2008.

2.777777671814/5, 9 votes
  1. carvell

    carvell Professor DLP Supporter

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    Dec 29, 2008 #1
    Title: Emancipation
    Author: AtrumUnas
    Rating: T
    Genre: Adventure/Sci-Fi
    DLP Category: Alternate's
    Pairing: None
    Status: Work in Progress
    Summary: Harry Potter/Stargate crossover. Full details inside. Harry joins SG1 as a separate entity story. Covers Season 1,3 of Stargate SG1
    Link: http://www.fanfiction.net/s/4043861/1/Emancipation

    I have been reading this for a while and it is not a bad crossover with 48 chapter's and over 100'000 word's it's a decent read.

    4/5

    I spent 10min's looking for this, if it has already been posted my bad
     
  2. Vir

    Vir Centauri Ambassador ~ Prestige ~ DLP Supporter

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    Dec 29, 2008 #2
    The writing lacks flow and there are issues with the plot as well. So far it just seems as if it's an OC with the name Harry Potter who is an ancient. This ancient is of course 17 and is a super-awesome special forces guy.
     
  3. Oz

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    Dec 29, 2008 #3
    Title has to include author name and the rating (T in this case). Not gonna comment on the story as I'm fucking sick of Stargate crossovers at this point.
     
  4. Mercenary

    Mercenary Snake Eater

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    Jan 5, 2009 #4
    First chapter: Goes from a child to using "Please continue." I know of no 11 year old that would use the phrase please continue...


    Im reading it but so far... I say Recycle it.
     
  5. Illution

    Illution Seventh Year

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    Conversations felt unnatural and forced. The characterization seemed off to me for some reason. Oh right this.
    “Shut it, you despicable excuse for a man,” Dumbledore said. “I am far above you.”
     
  6. Richard

    Richard Supreme Mugwump

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    Jan 5, 2009 #6
    Ya, the Dumbledore thing pretty much put it off for me. I quit reading after that. It gets a 2/5 from me.
     
  7. Novera

    Novera Seventh Year

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    Jan 8, 2009 #7
    Cha, I can totally see Dumbledore saying that. The title reminds me of a certain genre of fanfic that was popular for a bit, but I will try it anyway...

    WTF? Dumbledore... um, shall we say gets a little crazy. If I knew how to do I spoiler box I would post the little bit that takes place after what Illution posted.

    Also, the line "For some odd reason, this place screamed of peace and calm." made me lol.

    2/5
     
  8. Tarnum

    Tarnum Muggle

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    Feb 14, 2009 #8
    This chapter's what?
    That word's what?
     
  9. Randeemy

    Randeemy Headmaster DLP Supporter

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    Feb 14, 2009 #9
    Happy getting that off your chest? You must have been having cold sweats over the accidental misuse of two apostrophes for you to waste time posting such pointless shit.

    At least contribute something to the thread. Christ.
     
  10. Oz

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    Feb 14, 2009 #10
    You rang?

    /me buahahah's

    Or is that buahahs? ;)
     
  11. Aekiel

    Aekiel Angle of Mispeling ~ Prestige ~ DLP Supporter

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    Feb 15, 2009 #11
    Don't be silly Oz, you're more like Buddha than Christ >_>.
     
  12. Antix_Shadows

    Antix_Shadows First Year

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    Feb 16, 2009 #12
    Ya know, I'll be honest, I'm also sick of Stargate crossovers and I haven't even read one yet. I just can't comprehend a way to truly crossover the two things, they have nothing in common with which to even create a foundation. My brain gets a runtime error trying to make the two compatible in any way at all.