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Oneshot Harry Potter and the Evil Summer Vacation by Meteoricshipyards - T - OneShot - HP/LL

Discussion in 'Almost Recommended' started by PsyckoSama, Aug 10, 2007.

  1. PsyckoSama

    PsyckoSama Groundskeeper

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  2. The Mysterious Nobody

    The Mysterious Nobody Auror

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    Awesome. Pure win. I laughed almost all the time, and the Bellatrix moment was funny as hell. Original idea and excellent execution.

    Also, as a fan of the loon and the pairing, I can only give this one-shot a 5/5
     
  3. Kardikek

    Kardikek Groundskeeper

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    It didn't have that spark that makes comedy funny and frankly whatever punchline he tried to go for went past my head. Like someone trying to rehash someone else's jokes but failing.

    3/5
     
  4. ip82

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    Heh, not bad. Good idea, but the actual story could be better. Like this, it's sort of... bland.
     
  5. Dark Minion

    Dark Minion Bright Henchman DLP Supporter Retired Staff

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    Like his/her other stuff it is quite nice, but not that brilliant.

    Compared with "Honestly Headmaster" this story was better written as it wasn't entirely based on a retelling dialogue, but the jokes in this part were not as good as in the other one.

    So again 3.8/5
     
  6. Kyp's Avenger

    Kyp's Avenger Fourth Year

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    It was all right. Good main ideas, just didn't like the writing very much. Didn't seem funny enough. 3/5
     
  7. Antivash

    Antivash Until we meet again... DLP Supporter Retired Staff

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    4/5.

    I thought it was pretty good, honestly. I was amused, at least. ^_^

    Nice characterization of luna. Not too normal, not too out there. Could have done without Mr. Lovegood, and the whole Dr. and Scott Evil thing ... meh.. but good, aside.
     
  8. Dark Minion

    Dark Minion Bright Henchman DLP Supporter Retired Staff

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    Well, yeah, it would have been funnier if the author had included Mini-Me instead of Scott - or as Scott's rival.
     
  9. PsyckoSama

    PsyckoSama Groundskeeper

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    What would have been the best is if somehow he managed to slip in a fist fight between Prof. Fitwick and Mini-Me.

    Bare Knuckled Midget Boxing FTW! :D
     
  10. Richard

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    It didn't hold my attention for very long. 3/5 for me.

    Richard.
     
  11. The Dark Monarch

    The Dark Monarch Backtraced

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    I liked it. 4/5
     
  12. deathinapinkboa

    deathinapinkboa Minister of Magic

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    "Hermione! What are you doing with that magazine? They're very careful about who can get it, you know." He pointed at the issue of Evil Monthly.

    "Oh, that. I'm sure you know that both my parents are dentists," she replied.

    It was worth reading of that.
     
  13. Solomon

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    Hrm...I liked this story; it kept my attention well, and kept a smile on my face, even if I didn't laugh (though, I think a chuckle or two may have escaped). 4/5
     
  14. rj_stone2

    rj_stone2 Seventh Year

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    Enjoyable, but underachieving. Meteoricshipyards' stories always have great premises, but they rarely have anything humorous (or noticeable) that doesn't flow directly from the premise.
     
  15. Manatheron

    Manatheron Headmaster

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    Amusing at the least. Not solid gold, but a solid stable 4/5 for sure.

    Then again I'm a sucker for comedy's...
     
  16. Nemrut

    Nemrut The Black Mage ~ Prestige ~

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    I really liked the conversations between Scott and Harry the best and Luna was well written but the part with Dumbledore knowing about the quill and such and letting those things happen "for the greater good" really killed it for me. Even if it's a parody, but that just destroyed the mood.

    But I did like everything else in this story so 3/5
     
  17. Korisovra

    Korisovra Headmaster

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    I was bored. Bored as hell. 3/5 for technique and flow.
     
  18. Xiph0

    Xiph0 Counter-Revolutionary Other Guy Admin

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    This just wasn't funny. 1/5
     
  19. Alive and Free

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    It's not a brilliant fic but I got some laughs out of it. 3.5/5
     
  20. Meneldur

    Meneldur Third Year

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    Amusing, but too long winded. The end especially was overblown, with the Albus- bashing, Snape and Madam Bones. The revelation of him being part of the Rotfang conspiracy and the epilogue kinda made up for it, but not for the general level of writing. The references and jokes were enjoyable, though, so 3/5.
     
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