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Harry Potter Return of The First Ones by wolfwalkerron - R

Discussion in 'Trash Bin' started by nightangel960, May 11, 2005.

  1. nightangel960

    nightangel960 Fifth Year

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    Title: Harry Potter Return of The First Ones
    Author: wolfwalkerron
    Rating: M
    Genre: General/Action Adventure
    Summary: Lost after the death of his godfather Harry no longer knows who to trust and decides it is past time to take his destiny in his own hands (Post-OoTP)
    Link: http://www.fanfiction.net/s/2253569/1/

    even tho this isn't my story this is possible one of my favorite Harry takes control of his life story that is out there right now. tell me what you think
     
  2. IndoGhost

    IndoGhost Dark Lord

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    it good
     
  3. nightangel960

    nightangel960 Fifth Year

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    I know.. but I'm wondering if they are going to actually kill Dumbledore
     
  4. Levi

    Levi Sent Back to India

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    Its nice. Pity though its going to be a slash fic. Just mild one on FF.net, but after all, slash is slash.
     
  5. nightangel960

    nightangel960 Fifth Year

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    *blinks* where did it say that.. I must've missed it somewhere
     
  6. Levi

    Levi Sent Back to India

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    Its written on the author page. Most ppl don't have a look there, but that is the space where an author tells more about his/her stories. Its written that the story on FF.net will have mild slash, just minor huggings and stuff, but the one on his website will be heavy duty slash.

    This is written there. You can read more Here
     
  7. nightangel960

    nightangel960 Fifth Year

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    damn.. oh well at least it's not gonna be too blatant
     
  8. Levi

    Levi Sent Back to India

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    Yeah, thank God for that. Else I surely wouldn't have been able to handle it.
     
  9. nightangel960

    nightangel960 Fifth Year

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    I know what you mean.
     
  10. Nytmare

    Nytmare Fourth Year

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    I didn't read the autor page either,so when it said that he was getting a hard on for a male elf i was like "arg, what the hell!"

    blech
     
  11. Rahkesh Asmodaeus

    Rahkesh Asmodaeus THUNDAH Bawd Admin DLP Supporter

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    I didn't like this story, it was way too full of grammar mistakes for me to actually take it seriously. I mean, the author spells "Hermione," "Hermoine." And the author also puts spaces between quotation marks and the first word after it, which is incorrect.
     
  12. bornagainpenguin

    bornagainpenguin DLP Archivist

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    Gone.

    An old copy can be found in the DLP.net Archives.

    --bornagainpenguin
     
  13. Nytmare

    Nytmare Fourth Year

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    damn dude, talk about a necro!
     
  14. Xantam

    Xantam Denarii Host

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    As there are no necros in the Library it hardly matters, especially considering it was BAP posting to tell us about the archive. Next time think before you post.
     
  15. Nytmare

    Nytmare Fourth Year

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    read my sig!
     
  16. jt795286

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    i tried to find this story on fanfiction.net and they could not find it could it be that the author deleted it?:confused:
     
  17. Mordecai

    Mordecai Drunken Scotsman –§ Prestigious §– DLP Supporter

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  18. DeathFlames

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    God this fic sucked hairy donkey balls. Who the fuck posts a slash fic reference here. Go have your boyfriend plunder you ass again homeboy.
     
  19. Mordecai

    Mordecai Drunken Scotsman –§ Prestigious §– DLP Supporter

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    DeathFlames, STFU. No one asked your opinion, no one wanted your opinion. You've just joined, this is the only post to your name. Your first couple of posts are all your given to make a good impression here, then its very difficult to get out the shit pit you've dug yourself.

    As a first post, that sucked badly, why don't you head over to the Introduction section?

    And the general rule of the Archives is, it isn't necro if you contribute something decent to the thread. You didn't. Last post was nearly a month ago...why bother?
     
  20. Memory King

    Memory King Order Member DLP Supporter

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    This has to be one of the more over-powered locking spells I've seen, certainly doesn't resemble Colloportus much. The explanation we get later on doesn't make this sequence fail less at all.

    It's quite obvious now that the author didn't pay much attention to spell descriptions. Those inconsistencies with canon feel really jarring to me.

    I though't I'd already seen most of the worst Gringots scenes, looks like I was wrong.

    What the fuck?

    Any sane reader would've stopped long before this point, now it's quite hard to get away from that train wreck.

    Considering the fact that this story hits all the Independent!Harry clichés, it's not a surprise that the author decided to replace the Prophecy with some drivel, introducing another fail concept in the process.

    I sincerely hope that this sequence hadn't been posted when the OP made this thread.

    And I'm done.

    Dialogue and obvious spelling mistakes don't help this story's readability at all either.

    In closing: This story was absolute shit long before Harry turned gay without any prior development.

    1/5
     
    Last edited: Jul 5, 2010
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