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Oneshot Meddlen Worms by Fission25 - T

Discussion in 'General Fics' started by Antivash, Jun 17, 2008.

  1. Antivash

    Antivash Until we meet again... DLP Supporter Retired Staff

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    Title: Meddlen Worms
    Author: Fission25
    Rating: PG-13/T
    Genre: Romance/Drama/Independence
    DLP Category: Romance or General
    Pairing: Harry/Luna
    Words: 2,737
    Published: June 17, 2008

    Status: Oneshot
    Summary: During his fifth year, Luna helps Harry get rid of a Meddlen Worm infestation while teaching him what's most important in life.
    Link: Patronus Charm Fanfiction.net

    Pretty good Luna/Harry oneshot. One or two minor spelling mistakes, mostly the wrong word in the wrong place; but nothing that detracts from the piece heavily.

    Not overly fluffy, and pretty damned good portrayal of Luna. Damn near close to canon, save the "non-standard uniform" bit. You'll understand that when you read it.



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  2. Korisovra

    Korisovra Headmaster

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    You forgot the ficwad link. This one was... different. I enjoyed it, so I suppose I'll go for a 4/5 as long as it stays a oneshot.
     
  3. Aekiel

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    You linked to the wrong Patronus Charm fic >_>.

    I liked it. The 'non-standard uniform' bit was a nice touch and it was just fluffy enough to make me smile without it turning into a grimace. A good 4/5 for me, because the Meddlen worms have been exorcised for now :D.
     
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  4. Antivash

    Antivash Until we meet again... DLP Supporter Retired Staff

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    so I did. They were one number off though. Fixed.
     
  5. Jearom

    Jearom Sixth Year

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    Neat one-shot. Definitely a must read for Luna fans, the author does a very good job of characterizing her.

    4.5/5 because of a few spelling/word choice errors.
     
  6. LogrusMage

    LogrusMage Supreme Mugwump

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    well done Luna. Didn't over stay its welcome. Nice.

    4/5
     
  7. ParseltonguePhoenix

    ParseltonguePhoenix Unspeakable

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    Nice piece. Not too fluffy, but not too serious. I liked the way Luna was done. 3.75/5
     
  8. silverlasso

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    It was enjoyable, especially the bit near the end. For a fluffy one-shot, 4/5
     
  9. Goddessa39

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    Well, it's not bad, and I think there would be more of a call for fics with atleast mentions of wizarding narcotics and things. The idea is sound however kinda pointless and boring some may think it.

    For a oneshot fic that doesnt follow or stand as a prerequisite to a larger fic, i give it a 4/5
     
  10. hchan1

    hchan1 Sixth Year

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    Didn't really do much for me, it was pretty much the same thing as all the dozen other H/Luna oneshots out there. Would be nice to see a fic of decent length with that pairing that's actually complete.
     
  11. No Earthly Clue

    No Earthly Clue Third Year DLP Supporter

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    That was brilliantly well done. I liked the mood throughout the story. Great oneshot. 4/5
     
  12. mbond98

    mbond98 Seventh Year

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    ...WTF is with Druggy!Harry?

    4/5, for all the Luna stuff. Alas, I forgot to vote.
     
  13. Dark Syaoran

    Dark Syaoran No. 4 Admin

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    It was okay. Nothing special.
     
  14. DarthBill

    DarthBill The Chosen One

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    Didn't anyone else notice the reference to Contemplating Clouds?

    Good enough one-shot by the way.
     
  15. Jeram

    Jeram Elder of Zion ~ Prestige ~ DLP Supporter

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    This was pretty decent - maybe I'm spoiled, but I just didn't think this quite met its potential. I was faintly disappointed after I read it - not really sure why. I did like Luna's characterization, and I think the writing is technically quite sound. I think I'll give it a:

    3.5/5

    -J
     
  16. Antivash

    Antivash Until we meet again... DLP Supporter Retired Staff

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    Indeed I did. I actually WTF-ed when I saw it the first time and read over that twice. Wasn't really mention-worthy though.
     
  17. della_couer

    della_couer Second Year

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    Really, not bad. The ending hit me as a tad forced, 'He had his Luna' etc. Someone needs to tell Harry that any relationship built on a night of alcohol or, in this case a day of magical mushrooms, may not be the most lasting...but hey he's fifteen. I suppose chapter two can teach Harry that lesson.

    Still it was a nice read. Sweet without venturing into fluff, at least not too much. The 'magic mushrooms' made me happy. Nice inclusion of drug reference into HP world. Also explains Luna a bit, although made her seem more like a drugged out hippie than a free spirit, but it's a fun interpretation.

    Not bad, well written, on the whole not a waste to read.
     
  18. Poytin

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    There's a Harry Potter/Mario crossover there somewhere...

    Anyway I like it. I'll give it a 3.9/5
     
  19. Glernaj

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    I quite enjoyed it, always good to see more H/Luna.
    4/5.

    Now if only Tehan would write more of Contemplating Clouds...
     
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