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Memento Mori by Greed720 - M

Discussion in 'Almost Recommended' started by Taure, Mar 22, 2019.

  1. Taure

    Taure Magical Core Enthusiast Prestige DLP Supporter

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    Title: Memento Mori
    Author: Greed720
    Rating: M
    Genre: Dimension Travel
    Status: In-Progress
    Library Category: Alternates
    Pairings: Unknown
    Summary: Sometimes your life doesn't go the way you want it too. This very much reflected the way Harry's life had gone up until this point. Honestly, he had thought himself destined for greatness. After all, he had been born with magic and talent, surely that meant something? But in the end his life and fate turned out less than glamorous. If only he had another chance...
    Link: https://www.fanfiction.net/s/13231294/1/Memento-Mori

    Somewhat original premise: we are presented with a version of Harry from a world where Neville was the Boy Who Lived. This Harry was sorted into Ravenclaw, joined the Order of the Phoenix then betrayed them to side with the Death Eaters (out of self-preservation). After the war, he ends up in Azkaban after Neville pulls victory out of his ass.

    This Harry then wakes up in the canon world in Harry's body at the start of OotP.

    It's not executed terribly well, in terms of technical writing prowess (in particular, the tone is overly chatty) but it's recently published and (so far) regularly updated. The novel premise and the tolerable writing land it solidly in almost recommended, I think.
     
  2. Heather_Sinclair

    Heather_Sinclair Minister of Magic

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    The fourth chapter will make or break it, I think. Depends on how the trial goes.
     
  3. Xion

    Xion Robot Overlord Admin

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    Memento Mori has been updated with a new chapter.

    Story Stats
    Chapters: 4
    Words: 28,134
    Updated: 2019-03-29 17:39:05 UTC
    Published: 2019-03-11 17:27:13 UTC
    Previously updated: 8 days ago

    Brought to you by Scryer story thread updates.
     
  4. KGB

    KGB Death Eater

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    I rather like the premise. A conniving and self serving nonBWL!Harry having to fit into OOTP canon is a good set up.

    Other than that the story is rather disappointing. Ignoring character development opportunities through interaction with Ron, Hermione and Ginny just to skip forward to the courtroom scene was a complete waste. Especially as the scene ended up being the indiest of indy!Harry monologues.

    It kinda reads like someones first ever fic.
     
  5. Xion

    Xion Robot Overlord Admin

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    Memento Mori has been updated with a new chapter.

    Story Stats
    Chapters: 5
    Words: 36,026
    Updated: 2019-04-15 16:36:30 UTC
    Published: 2019-03-11 17:27:13 UTC
    Previously updated: 17 days ago

    Brought to you by Scryer story thread updates.
     
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