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Mind Magic by Boggart Returns - M

Discussion in 'Trash Bin' started by That_Boy, Jan 20, 2006.

  1. That_Boy

    That_Boy DLP Elite DLP Supporter

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    Title: Mind Magic
    Author: Boggart Returns
    Rating: M
    Category: Action/Adventure
    Summary: Pre HBP. Slightly dark. I'm the same Boggart from Mugglenet Fanfiction The Battle of DoM changed Harry more than he realized. His powers are increasing, but how long can he last, faced with the temptation to abuse it? This is a story about power, insanity
    Link: http://www.fanfiction.net/s/2747985/1/

    You guys might not like the first few chapters but at least check out the second half of chapter 9. It's got a lot of potential if it can move a bit away from the shippyness.
     
  2. DarkPhoenix2500

    DarkPhoenix2500 Second Year

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    <_< Take out the Harry/Ginny its bound to have, and it be a ok story

    *You ARE aware that nearly everyone cept a few hate Ginny.....right?*
     
  3. That_Boy

    That_Boy DLP Elite DLP Supporter

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    if you are worried about h/g you really want to check out the second half of chapter 9 (it's the bit where she dies)
     
  4. DarkPhoenix2500

    DarkPhoenix2500 Second Year

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    -_- She doesnt die though Its a H/G Why would he kill her?
     
  5. ip82

    ip82 Prisoner

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    I tried reading this yesterday and these are my results:

    Chapter 1 - Boooring. Angst, angst, Sirius please come back etc... Standard Harry pining after Sirius shit.

    Chapter 2 - Cool asian chick approaches; Harry is acting like an asshole; She starts crying on mention of Lily; Harry huggs her; She promises to teach him WANDLESS MAGIC, which she uses all the time...

    This is where I stopped. Seemed like a clished piece of crap to me...
     
  6. Avitus

    Avitus Groundskeeper

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    Considering his summary says "The Battle of DoM" I'll skip this one.
     
  7. Dark Syaoran

    Dark Syaoran No. 4 Admin

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    I really hate it when they use shit like that. DoM, RoR, MoM, DADA... if they cant even be arsed to actually spell the words out then the story isnt worth reading most of the time.
     
  8. Avitus

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    And thus, why i've skipped reading this one. It utterly ruins a story when they use half assed abbreviations.
     
  9. cmuylistoooo

    cmuylistoooo Fourth Year

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    well the chapter 10 ending says its h/g....
     
  10. Giovanni

    Giovanni God of Scotch

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    Ch 10 Wrote:

    "She's alive, only unconscious."

    Author places entirely to much emphasis on "love", even when harry is casting the killing curse it is lost love that fuels the fire of his hatred.
     
  11. Dark Syaoran

    Dark Syaoran No. 4 Admin

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    Always thought it was about intent... unless I got that from fanon which I probably did. Love powering the Killing Curse is really screwy... I mean, is it alright if he powers it with love and not intent to kill? Still get the same fucking outcome...
     
  12. That_Boy

    That_Boy DLP Elite DLP Supporter

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    damn
     
  13. ChuckDaTruck

    ChuckDaTruck Overlord

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    Story sucks. Its heavy-handed Harry/Ginny.
     
  14. darklordmike

    darklordmike Headmaster

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    I have to agree. I just skimmed it, but it's got buttloads of sappy H/G and overpowered OCs ('Silvia,' 'Vivien,' and vampires who train Harry in martial arts).

    It's over 100k words, but looks to be abandoned. 2/5
     
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