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Abandoned Next by Amael the Chosen - M - Naruto/Next

Discussion in 'Almost Recommended' started by Janus, Dec 4, 2008.

  1. Janus

    Janus Groundskeeper

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    Title: Next
    Author: Amael the Chosen
    Rating: M
    Pairings: Naruto U. & Hinata H.

    Fandom: Naruto / Next (Movie)
    Chapters: 25
    Words: 69,547
    Updated: Apr 8, 2009
    Published: Apr 17, 2008
    Status: Abandoned

    Link: http://www.fanfiction.net/s/4202377/1/Next
    Summary: After an attack, the Yondaime's seal is unintentionally altered. Naruto can now see the future, but only 2 minutes ahead, and only when it directly concerns him. How will things progress, with this one small change? Crossover with the film "Next".

    Well, I usually read all the way through a story before posting it, but this one wouldn't stop heckling me until I put it up.

    I'm about halfway through chapter 5. The fic is well done, with few noticeable flaws, and just damn amusing to boot. It doesn't start that way, but has steadily gotten funnier as it goes on.

    Best of all, imo, the plot has a pretty quick pace. He doesn't spend brain-grinding amounts of time on canon events or on the cliched Naruto-trains-up-his-new-powers stage.

    Having seen Next is not necessary (I haven't, though I suspect I will now >>), though you may want to read the wiki entry (s'short) to get a better grip on things. (Interesting, but still not necessary)

    More, and a review/rating, once I've finished.

    One of the more amusing lines so far...

    It was rather depressing, he thought, to wake up every morning and see yourself die from being stupid.

    EDIT: And, uh, wow. He's definately not super!Naruto with this power. >>


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  2. Rehio

    Rehio Bad Dragon ~ Prestige ~ DLP Supporter

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    The movie Next sucked. However... this captures my attention for some reason. It's not horrible, and it's interesting. Still reading, will give a score later.

    3/5, I guess. It's not bad, but it's not great. It's more for the "Almost Recommended" thread than anything else.
     
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  3. Janus

    Janus Groundskeeper

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    O_O The Chuunin exams end... interestingly.

    To say the least.

    Yes, a fic that gets past the Exams, gasp. I'm on chapter 14/22 at the moment.
     
  4. Gizmore

    Gizmore Minister of Swedish Affairs DLP Supporter

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    The first few chapters was Okay, buy after a while it started to go downhill, I'd rate it 2/5 atm.
     
  5. Ksai

    Ksai Third Year

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    It was ok till the end of Chuunin exams. After that it started to degrade rapidly.
    Not a waste of time, due to some nice ideas of this fic, but not the greatest either.
    3 out of 5.
     
  6. Lokesin

    Lokesin Slug Club Member

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    This fic seems to have extreme difficulty in deciding what tone it's trying to set, as it seems to jump from angst and the like to jokes in the space of a couple paragraphs. It's rather jarring.


    If that was fixed, the story would be a lot better for it.
     
  7. Janus

    Janus Groundskeeper

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    Yeah, I'm stalled out at chapter 18 myself. -,- Guess jumping the gun was what it was in this case.
     
  8. Zombie

    Zombie Tegridy Moderator DLP Supporter

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    This, then...

    This. Amazing what a day can do?

    As far as Nicolas Cage movies go, I thought Next sucked on so many levels. It had decent potential, what with the future site thing, but they didn't go anywhere with it, other than the traditional plot.

    This story is much the same. Had potential. Yet, I can't push myself to go no further.
     
  9. Cxjenious

    Cxjenious Dark Lord

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    I just don't know what's going on anymore. He jumps perspectives too much and it interupts the flow... and Sasuke decent into madness wasn't handled well. It just popped up. And the whole missing-ring-finger-so-I-take-off-my-shoe-thing? Bleh.
     
  10. Oversoul

    Oversoul Muggle

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    I actually thought this fic was pretty good, parts of it could have been better certainly but the concept was good. Kakashi annoyed me a bit though
     
  11. AntiChrist

    AntiChrist Professor

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    Eh. I recall it was a nice enough read but nothing spectacular. 3/5
     
  12. SmileOfTheKill

    SmileOfTheKill Magical Amber

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    I stopped reading on the 13 chapter myself.
    Great start but it just went downhill to fast.