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WIP Paper Cranes by Spontaneite - T - Hikaru no Go

Discussion in 'Other Review Board' started by illya_, Nov 11, 2017.

  1. illya_

    illya_ First Year

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    Title: Paper Cranes
    Author: Spontaneite
    Rating: T
    Fandom: Hikaru no Go
    Category: Supernatural
    Status: WIP, 21 chapters, 190k words
    Links: FF (first 3 chapters), AO3(All but the most recent chapter), Tumblr (All chapters)
    (When a new chapter is added to tumblr, the old one is tweaked and added to AO3. They are tweaked further before being added to FF)
    Summary: Two years passed before Hikaru admitted, reluctantly, that possession by a spirit seemed to have long-lasting side effects which probably wouldn't go away on their own.

    The story takes place place after the end of the series. Hikaru are dealing with emotional issues because of things that happened at the later part of the series (volume 16 in the manga, episode 60 of the anime).

    I personally think that you won't really enjoy the series unless you've seen/read the series, since part of the charm is the personality of the old cast being intact. Another reason is that the reader is assumed to know a thing or two about the world and the people in it.

    One of the more interesting aspects of the story is that, for me at least, it doesn't do what you are expecting of it (at least after reading the first chapter). I'm being vague on purpose to avoid spoiling the experience. I recommend people giving it three chapters (The better parts of the story comes later, but by that chapter you will start to get an idea about things to come).

    The strength of the story does not lay only in the plot, but also in how it is presented. Hikaru feels like his normal self, making bullshit excuses for everything out of habit and amusement. The support characters also feel like their canon self (with some notable exceptions, Akari is presented way more... assertive? The relationship with Yashiro seems stronger etc.. but it can all be explained with the cast being teenagers, which are prone to changing, as well as over a year ( ? ) having gone by since the end of the story).

    Also, while Go is ever present in the story, it is reduced to background noise when the plot calls for it (but the story is still about Hikaru, so he will managed to sneak games in, no matter what).

    I'm not gonna write any more, since I really don't wanna spoil the story. Good HnG stories are impossible to find, especially ones that are being actively written.

    For me it is a clear 5/5.
     
    Last edited: Nov 11, 2017
  2. Plotless

    Plotless Groundskeeper

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    Wait I was just about to post this for review.

    Fantastic fic, 5/5. I'll write a proper review when I'm not on my phone.
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    The thing that I like the most about this story is how natural the writing and the tone of the story is - Hikaru feels like a sixteen year old boy and at no point do I read his narration and think that this is out of character for Hikaru to say. The side characters are also well defined - Touya and Yashiro especially shine, but characters who in the manga felt less interesting like Hikaru's mum and to a certain extent Akari get to be fully fledged.

    The plot is good and the different subplots are clearly defined easy to follow - Hikaru's growing skill at Go, the Kisei tournament, his learning about Shinto, and the main plot which I won't spoil.

    This is easily the best story in the Hikaru no Go fandom, and not just because of the lack of material - It's just good.
     
  3. Republic

    Republic The Snow Queen Prestige DLP Supporter

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    Is familiarity with source necessary to read this?
     
  4. EsperJones

    EsperJones Order Member

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    It's pretty accessible if you only know the major strokes, but complete unfamiliarity with the source material would probably lead to confusion. I watched HnG a long time ago and didn't remember much but had no issues jumping in.

    A wiki read of the main characters might be sufficient.
     
  5. Plotless

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    You might need to read the wiki entries on some characters and you'll have no clue who Sai is who's pretty important but doesn't appear, but I'm pretty sure it's easy enough to grasp the story from the text.
     
  6. Vira

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    Just a really excellent fic. It took the Hikaru no Go story into a direction I like seeing, while keeping up the original go-centered storyline. I'm also glad that while an arc has just ended and technically, the fic could end here, looks like this was only the first arc and the story will be continuing.

    Can't wait to see where it goes.

    5/5.
     
  7. Celestin

    Celestin Half-Blood Prince

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    I really like it for all the reasons mentioned above. It certainly has an unusual premise where the go is kind of a secondary yet very important theme, but it works very well.

    My only minor complain would be that I would expect a little less blunt behaviour from Akari considering what happened to Hikaru, but maybe it's how she handles this.

    As good as this fic is, I would argue that The Neverending Road is better.
     
  8. throwaawy

    throwaawy Second Year

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    havng read through about 15 chapters so far i think this does have its own charm.

    as most people have pointed out, troll!hikaru really does feel like mid-canon and more importantly, a teenager. the spirituality angle is a bit jarring to start with but it's slowly growing on me

    TNR is a better straight continuation imo, with a better feeling to the matches that take place and a larger focus on go itself. but even that said, even if Paper Cranes is a bit more casual with the matches i like how here hikaru is not nearly so dominant in his games since it feels like a more natural progression.

    continuing to read but a tentative 3-4/5 so far
     
  9. Koalas

    Koalas Dark Lord DLP Supporter

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    I think it's far to say this and TNR are the best continuations in the fandom. Now HnG has two plot lines. Hikaru's development as a Go player and Hikaru and Sai's relationship.

    TNR focuses far more on Hikaru's development and the techical aspect of Go. PC takes the Sai relationship and runs with it's implacations.

    They both have their strong suits but PC is excellent for its flow and recency. It's the first fanfic I can remember in a long time that I read obsessively. 5/5 would experience again.