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Dead Link Progressing Abilities by JagedlyJaded - M

Discussion in 'Almost Recommended' started by Inferi, Jun 23, 2006.

  1. Inferi

    Inferi Third Year

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    Title: Progressing Abilities
    Author: JagedlyJaded
    Rating: M
    Genre: General/Action/Adventure
    Pairing: none as of yet
    Status: WIP
    Summery: Even before school, Harry Potter has possessed strange and unique powers, these gifts seemed to change him into something he would never have been before.
    Link: http://www.fanfiction.net/s/3002617/1/

    Its alright, more of the same. Harry uses his powers before Hogwarts to get the Dursleys afraid of him. Three chapters up in two days, don't know if he can keep it up. And by the second chapter he has become a ward of the state and is at a orphanage


    Edit by Minion, Dec. 10, 2012
    Dead link is dead. If you know where to find another copy of the story, please inform the library staff.
     
    Last edited by a moderator: Dec 11, 2012
  2. Lord Apophis

    Lord Apophis Professor

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    Its ok, not great but ok. Of course hardly anything has happened yet...
     
  3. Myst

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    Nothing really has happened yet. Seriously needs to increase chapter word lenngth.
     
  4. Duke of Rothwood

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    Yeah I agree with the others, not much has happened yet so it is hard to judge. But so far it is alright, I wonder if he will become more like Tom
     
  5. Amerision

    Amerision Galactic Sheep Emperor DLP Supporter

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    Fix your goddamn Avatar, this old iranian Hyundai montior is giving me shit over it.

    It's not a bad story.
     
  6. arkeus

    arkeus Seventh Year

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    The chapter lentgh is a bit small, but i haven never seen wardofstate!Harry before.
     
  7. Kai Shek

    Kai Shek Supreme Mugwump

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    If you continued reading, 'ward of the state' did not last long with Dumbledores ways of intervening :)
     
  8. Myst

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    Your plan is a chapter every day, according to your fic. I must say thats a bit fast and causes for really short reading spurts.

    Really try to lengthen your chapters.
     
  9. Kai Shek

    Kai Shek Supreme Mugwump

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    Yea, the thing is, I can't seem to be able to change from scene to scene without loosing the current mood of that scene. Like, I don't think I'd be able to change from the argument between the three to a trip to Diagon Alley without suffering through the whole thing. I would need to take a break. So, short writing spurts is the best way for me to write a story. Even if it may be more confeniant for the readers for me to create longer chapters.

    I am hoping that the stress to create longer chapters doesn't make me want to stop writing all together.

    If you understood that at all...

    I hope you don't stop reading it because of that.
     
    Last edited: Jun 26, 2006
  10. Shade Emrys

    Shade Emrys Third Year

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    The small chapters are fine as long as the updates are quick (like every two or three days). You update fast so I don't see it as a problem.
     
  11. Myst

    Myst Headmaster

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    Hum. Like you Jaged, I write in short little spurts as well, around 1.5-2k words a day. But I don't have the problem with scene transition.

    Its a skill that you will eventually learn if you practice it.
     
  12. Jheph

    Jheph Groundskeeper

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    It’s too premature to give proper judgment, but it shows promise.
     
  13. Dragon Watcher

    Dragon Watcher Third Year

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    It shows promise but who will his friends be? The Griffs, Puffs, Ravens, or the Snakes? And will be some Evil Dark Lord or a Gray Lord or something?
     
  14. Kai Shek

    Kai Shek Supreme Mugwump

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    I am not sure if he is going to have any 'real' friends but the people that he will hang around will be in the house that he is sorted next chapter.

    Eventually, it will be Harry struggling to not let the Dark Arts consume him. So, Harry may kill a couple people before the story is over. This has been done before, so I am hoping that I can put some decent twists on it to make it more interesting.
     
  15. Xantam

    Xantam Denarii Host

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    Reminds me of Riddle as a child.
     
  16. MrINBN

    MrINBN Unspeakable

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    I got the same impression. But I also get the impression that he won't turn out like Tom did because the orphanage owner isn't as cruel as the one Tom went to. What a shame.
     
  17. Athenia

    Athenia Groundskeeper

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    Fanfiction aside, the HBP orphanage owner didn't seem too bad.
     
  18. Olfrik

    Olfrik Seventh Year

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    I hope you don't turn this into a guilt trip. I like it so far and I hate when Harry is doubting himself too much. I can't see a decent plotline developed if you are concentrating too much on these guilt trips and angst. But maybe you will show me wrong. Keep it going.
     
  19. Kai Shek

    Kai Shek Supreme Mugwump

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    Well, Harry will suffer some guilt, for its inhumane if he suffers none in the beginning.

    But the first person that he may kill, will be one that he hates, so the guilt will not show, the feel of power however...

    EDIT: Of course, don't expect him to become a mass murderer at the age of eleven.
     
  20. darklordmike

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    Link no longer works, and Kai Shek says the fic is 'very much abandoned and deleted.'

    Bumped so the powers that be can decide what to do about it.