Title: Salt-Breaker [PJO/ASOIAF] Author: Team Otters (@CareOtters) Rating: T Genre: Action/Adventure/Fantasy Pairing: None as yet Fandom: Percy Jackson and the Olympians crossover with A Song of Ice and Fire (AKA: Game of Thrones) Status: Work in Progress Link: https://m.fanfiction.net/s/13330432/1/Salt-Breaker (Also available on SB) So this has reached fifty thousand words and is in need of recommendation and review. Firstly it’s been a pleasure to watch this develop in the WbA, and it has become increasingly strong with every entry and edit until the present day. That said I was hooked by the promise from the very start. Hook: It’s a cold open - into the new world - during the mechanism of entry. This may cause some frustration for readers who prefer to have their ducks in a row in a crossover; to have a good understanding of the time and story-position at the point of crossover. However, this is quickly shown to be a deliberate choice rather than a lazy one and the ten years between our last view of Percy as a teenager and the early-to-mid twenties he is today forms a mystery subplot that is slowly being revealed as we progress. For myself, this actually has me quite interested and I’m curious to find out what’s happened to drive Percy away from Olympus and Annabeth. Percy finds himself in the iron islands and is immediately revealed to be a Demi-god in a world where the mist does not exist. He’s accepted into iron-born culture in the most part, and this has an immediate effect on the iron-born but on Percy also. The Drowned God is believed to be an aspect of Poseidon by Percy and the inactivity of the God has left a void into which Percy finds himself apotheosising. This leads to big effects on Percy and is the developing line of the story as we begin to investigate the concrete natures of Westerosi gods, old and new, while Percy assimilates and tries to steer iron born culture towards some sort of middle ground between an Iron Islands and a modern sort of morality (I believe). The second possible area of controversy is in the culture clash itself. The practices of the iron born are faithful to the iron born glimpses we see in the series (myself having only watched the show). It’s not as simple as just saying stop, when their society - at present - hasn’t a desire or scope for alternatives. Line: Characterisation of Percy is strong and improving as we gambol along. The voice was never particularly weak, and certainly there might be some culture shock regarding his infrequently sweary adult self - but it doesn’t challenge my suspension of disbelief, understanding this is a Percy who is older than I have seen before. For an essentially OC bunch of Ironborn, headed by the few Greyjoys we’ve encountered, each has the flair and personality we’ve come to expect from an Otters adventure. They provide convincing opposition to Percy and each other, and I found myself quickly endeared to his crew. For a first person narrative, Otters has worked in description that feels germane to a modern demigod - knowledgeable in classical/historical culture - exposed to the ironborn. I’ve been quite impressed by the way I’m not finding it difficult to get an ASOIAF feel from a prose peppered with modern images and references - without a Starbucks cup to be found, even. That said, in the first couple of chapters, this is a little weaker - with sometimes GoTisms finding their way into Percy’s voice in a way that doesn’t feel appropriate. But this does quickly settle. The story is moving at a very good clip, and it’s one of the only stories I click on the moment I see an update. Sinker: It’s still early days, and there’s a lot of story that’s yet to come. It’s always difficult to give a fair rating to a WIP fic. There’s a lot of promise here and if this continues to progress the way it has and create a cohesive and satisfying whole I think it could be a five. At present 4/5 and definitely room to grow.