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Complete Sanitarium by Greensl33ves - M

Discussion in 'Almost Recommended' started by fatthom, Feb 14, 2007.

  1. fatthom

    fatthom Squib

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    Title: Sanitarium
    Author: Greensl33ves
    Rating: M
    Genre: Drama/Humor
    DLP Category: General Fics - but please move if something is more suitable.
    Pairing: None
    Chapters: 16
    Words: 61,572
    Status: Complete

    Summary: How can you be part of a world where the only thing you are is a weapon to be used and discarded? Darkfic.
    Link: http://www.fanfiction.net/s/3308258/1/



    This is what I consider to be a Dark Fic. It is a story about what happens to the main characters after they have done the job they were set. The story contains some parts that made me uncomfortable, but I think most people here will really like it.

    You will have to set aside the twins being a bit OOC, but maybe that is what the war did to them.

    The grammar seems ok to me and the typos etc. seem to be minimal.

    4/5


    Checked by Minion, July 17, 2017
    The story is no longer hosted on ff.net. Instead I attached a zipped textfile of the story.
    If you know where to find another copy of the story, please inform the library staff.
     

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    Last edited by a moderator: Jul 17, 2017
  2. KenderCleric

    KenderCleric Lord of Plot Bunnies

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    Meh.

    2.5/5
     
  3. deathinapinkboa

    deathinapinkboa Minister of Magic

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    This isn't dark, my deary. This is utter angst.

    It isn't terrible. I won't fallow it, but I deffinatly don't hate it.

    3/5
     
  4. fatthom

    fatthom Squib

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    You may be right. The thing is I usualy don't like angst at all. I just want to slap somebody into doing something. I didn't get that feeling with this. Although the twins do bother me slightly. I am still looking forward to the next chapter though.
     
  5. Krull

    Krull Denarii Host

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    I'll just say it out front that I personally think that this story those not, and I pray that it will never have a place in the DLP library.

    The level of angst in this fic is way beyond anything tolerable, and when the angst those subside you get to read about the characters organising on a puppet show....how's that for a dark fic. The only thing half decent about this fic is:

    My rating is 2/5, because at least there are no severe grammatical errors.

    EDIT: 1/5. Ignoring my better judgement I went ahead and read the second half of the final chapter only to find crappy dialogues, unreadable centeses and characters repeating the same fucking idee 5 times in 50 words.

    My recommendation: DELETE IT
     
    Last edited: Feb 14, 2007
  6. darklordmike

    darklordmike Auror

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    Good god. I'll be really impressed if anyone here has the stomach to finish this fic. As noted above, it's so overflowing with angst that there isn't room for anything else. 'The Ministry Six' are so fucked up after the war that they lose themselves in alcohol, drugs, prostitution, depression, etc.

    Finally fed up with them destroying their lives, Fred and George capture them all and lock them up in a makeshift 'sanitarium.' What follows is the single largest collection of misery, whining, bitching, angst, and despair I've ever seen.

    This isn't Harry Potter. These characters bear no relationship whatsoever to their canon counterparts. This is a supremely fucked up author trying to work through some issues. I hope he/she was successful, but I don't understand why anyone would ever want to read this.

    1/5
     
  7. Scrittore

    Scrittore Groundskeeper

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    Well 16 chapters, and it's completed! Let's see how this goes!

    Well this is certainly off to a depressing start.

    Jeez, this isn't getting any happier.

    Nobodyyyy knowsss what it's like to be the sad mannnnnn.

    What the fuck? :eek:

    So Neville's an alcoholic, and Hermione's a pill popper/druggie.

    This is less depressing: http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=Vz9ZYVQlfMQ

    Hopefully Fred and George will knock some sense into them.

    OHWAI, Hermione has a breakdown. Luna's nine months pregnant.

    Ginny's a cutter. O.O

    Folks, this is only two chapters in. I'll stop here, as I'm drowning in the amount of angst. I salute you if you want to try and read this story. I seriously hope the author found help for his/herself, because this story is definitely some sort of cry for help or the thoughts of a twisted mind.

    1/5.
     
    Last edited: Aug 21, 2009
  8. Xiph0

    Xiph0 Administrator Admin

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    Source links are dead.
     
  9. wordhammer

    wordhammer Chief Warlock DLP Supporter

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  10. Dark Minion

    Dark Minion Bright Henchman Moderator DLP Supporter

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    I attached a zipped file to the first post