Title: Sistat Inter Bitu pe Marvos
Author: Cervus
Rating: M
DLP-Category: Independant (I think)
Genre: Adventure/Drama
Chapters: 7
Words: 34,693
Updated: February 3, 2007
Published: July 25, 2006
Status: Abandoned
Pairings: No idea

Summary: The storm clouds loom ever closer. The war is steadily rising to its full height. A shattered soul must be hunted and destroyed. A hero must learn his trade to ensure victory. The line is drawn in the sand and soon battle will commence; violent and bloody, death shall reign supreme. A prophecy dictates an end; the final battle will come. Power and knowledge are forces to be reckoned with... and yet one without the other is useless. Our hero must go on a journey to master both. This is the story of the Wizarding World's War on Terror. Follow the footsteps of Harry Potter as he follows his path to its destined end. Will the Wizarding World be plunged into an age of terrible darkness, or can Harry prevail in ensuring victory for the light? Learn, along with him, the meaning of the fateful words unknown to any living person of this age. Those words - Sistat Inter Bitu pe Marvos - could change the world as it is known.

Link: http://www.fanfiction.net/s/3065273/1/

Read it! After all the hype it's finally here. Not much else to say. Only one chapter so far, but it's top quality.



Checked by Minion, March 24, 2013

 

Bravo for the first chapter its excellent. I like the idea. It can be the best post HBP fic if its kept at this level of pure grandness. THANK GOD the friends are getting left.

I give it 9.5 outta 10. 9.5 cause no one is perfect.


But it is a little soon to make judgements. So I shall wait some time.

 

I think it's a good start. Since it's only one chapter it's a bit early to judge, but it seems to be promising

 

It's off to a great start so far, but it's way too short to be making judgements already. The best part, IMO, is the summary, though. It immediately hooked me.

 

I definitely think it's a good fic, with a lot of potential. At the minute i'm hoping that Ron and Hermione won't be doing much with harry in the story, and i thought it was a good idea of the author to not make them get into a random fight just in order to get them out of the story, but there was an actual understandable reason.

For now i'll give it a 5 out of 5, but it could change if the future chapters aren't as good.

Is the story going to be entered in the horcrux challenge?

 

You do know that once you rate a thread, you can't change your mind?

 

I know, but i can change my own mind, even if i can't vote again. Besides, i doubt it will go downhill so i have nothing to worry about anyway.

 

Thanks, though part of the credit there must be given to both Taure and Rain who helped me get everything right.

Ron and Hermione will be in the fic but not in some overly important role. I prefer to watch the trio slowly drift apart than to end their friendship in one huge bust up.

The answer to that is no. Only for the reason that in its completed state the story will be well over the allotted word count for the challenge. I am working on something separate for the contest, though, it's just a matter of getting it completed before the deadline passes.

Thanks to everyone else who's expressed an opinion, they're all greatly welcomed.

 

Great start, Love it but you had one really stupid reviewer

what a dipshit

 

This is a wonderful start and I'll tell you why.

There's no unecessary, childish character-bashing ("zOMG i sooo h8 ron lllolll", par exemple). Almost all the characters have been written accurately. I say almost because Dumbledore would always want Harry to go with Ron and Hermione (but not being a big fan of the trio, so I can't fault you there - and it's clearly necessary to the plot). The dialogue is great, apart from a fewlapses of expression (for example Harry saying "wee" - that's a northern thing, bish! ) And is your Beta/Word processor American because there were a couple of things like 'color' instead of 'colour' (usually I wouldn't point this out but you're from Manchester!)

I hope this doesn't become training-heavy. By that I mean every single day is mapped out with intricate detail in an entirely RossWrock way and nothing else happens for 100,000 words. I hope something actually happens while he's training to do with the plot - but I'm sure it will. I have faith in you (I hope that puts enough pressure on ).

Great start. I look forward to the next chapter. Update when you feel like it.

(BTW you spelt Dumbledore wrong in the summary.)

Oh and I added this to Order of Stories so expect a relatively high influx of hits if your summary is enticing enough

 

I thought it was alright. Harry 'vowing to defeat Voldemort/Kill Snape/Avenge his parents at any cost', letting Hermione scold him, letter from Dumbledore from beyond the died, etc were parts/plot ideas I really didn't think much of, I'll save judgement for later though.

 

The chapters been bounced around a few different applications. Plus my beta reader is, indeed, an American. I don't think there's anything too bad in there but I'll go through it tomorrow and take out all the American spelling that worked it's way in there.

The chapter was first written in Microsoft Works and then shifted over to OpenOffice so I could use the track and replace function. OpenOffice is always an arse about changing the spellcheck language for me, no matter how many darn times I do it.

It won't be training heavy for the reason that detailed, overly descriptive, wordy recollections of Harry's every day schedule bore the living shit right out of me quit frankly.

I'm also making an effort to cut down on my own over description. One of my main problems with the stuff I written before is that it was overly descriptive and wordy. I want to cut that out.

In the same vein I've attempted to rid the story of most of the filler. The majority of the things that happen either have to do with the main plot or a side plot. For there is indeed a plot.

LOL. Didn't even notice that, I'll blame... erm... Taure, just for the simple fact that I can. I've changed it now. Thanks for pointing it out.

That's cool. The highest number of reviews I've got for a single chapter of RoaW is nineteen, in the few hours that this story has been up I've already received fifteenth.

 

I was ok with the vow thing, but I agree with TheIllusiveOne that Herman should've been bitch slapped.

If he didn't take crap from the Dursley's, he shouldn't have taken the same from Herman.

Also I didn't like how he showed them the letter, he should've told them it was private. Unless it's part of your plot to let them know valuable information.

The writing was superbly done and I liked the style.
I look forward to reading more and seeing where you go with it.

Litha

 

You have to remember that this is Post-HBP. He's obviously going to share with his friends, and he's not going to hurt his friend.

 

I only have one word for this.

Nice.

 

Well Done, just simply well done.

 

Cervus...there is nothing to say other then I will keep reading this fic, as long as you keep posting it. Well Done.

 

This fic sucks!! J/k

Great chapter. You seemed to have captured the essense of the characters beautifully. I hope you aren't done with the Dursley thought. I would like to hear a bit more on the 'problems' they might have in the future.

Anyway 5/5

 

Promising start, will this be a part of the summer challenge?