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Oneshot Steps Far From Paradise by Lady Salazar - M

Discussion in 'The Alternates' started by Amerision, Aug 21, 2008.

  1. Amerision

    Amerision Galactic Sheep Emperor DLP Supporter

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    Title: Steps Far From Paradise
    Author: Lady Salazar

    Rating: M
    Genre: Drama/Horror
    Pairing: Female Harry/Salazar S.
    Words: 19,174
    Published: August 20, 2008

    Status: Complete/One-Shot


    http://www.fanfiction.net/s/4488250/1/

    This story sounds like it fails majorly... but it doesn't. The relationship between Harry and Salazar is NOT explicit or described in any romantic way. The story is deeper than that.

    Some of you may enjoy this. Others may hate it.

    I give it a 4/5. A 5/5 would be given if the story had continued further.


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  2. LuxDragon

    LuxDragon Fourth Year

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    Fem!Harry? Pass. This doesn't really look like the fare DLP dabbles in. Why not just make an OC or a alternate character? Just... no.
     
  3. Tinn Tam

    Tinn Tam Review Goddess Retired Staff

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    DLP dabbles in quality stories. That's the only immutable criterium. Even slash or Harry/Ginny stories might be accepted in the Library if they're really, really good (Through the Grapevine, Queens of Darkness, Ladies of Light, Malignant Objects come to mind); plus, you never know what an author might do with an idea.

    Avoid prejudiced opinions please. Read the story first.
     
  4. Goddessa39

    Goddessa39 DA Member

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    Fem

    I don't usually like Female Harry either but the author I am familiar with so I went with it. There were of course parts of the story that were darker than some stuff and the Female side of our hero, err, heroine, worked with the story.

    Lady Salazar is a great authoress with a taste for some of the darker bloods. This is among them.

    ...though I wish it was more than just the oneshot.

    9/10
     
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  5. Kensington

    Kensington Denarii Host DLP Supporter

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    5/5 for me.

    This was a damn impressive story. I had no expectations due to the pairings...but the characterizations were great and the plot was spot on.

    I really liked how Salazar gradually changed Harry's perspective on morals as the story went on.
     
  6. Anya

    Anya Harley Quinn DLP Supporter

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    Great story. Loved the characterization of Slytherin. I'm not sure it even needs a sequel though it would be nice. I'm giving it a 5/5. The best Fem!Harry I've read.
     
  7. Vorpal

    Vorpal Third Year

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    Lady Sal apparent has a penchant for gender-bender fics, but unlike most, hers seem to actually work. I'm rather impressed.
     
  8. Anya

    Anya Harley Quinn DLP Supporter

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    I noticed that, seeing as how she is a staff member of a C2 dedicated to it. I had a look but it's mostley Naruto stories and MarySue!Fem!Harry.
     
  9. Andro

    Andro Master of Death DLP Supporter

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    This is the second best fem!Harry. I think you know what I consider the first, Amerision. :D

    Found it strange that the fem!Harry was still named Harry.
     
  10. Anya

    Anya Harley Quinn DLP Supporter

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    I'm afraid to ask.. what the first?

    Harry can be a girls name too... well not normally. But it could be short for Harriet, though I don't get that impression in this story.
     
  11. Tinn Tam

    Tinn Tam Review Goddess Retired Staff

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    If I had to venture a guess... Equal and Opposite, by Amerision.
     
  12. Aekiel

    Aekiel Angle of Mispeling Prestige DLP Supporter

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    4/5 because it ends with a few lines that have me expecting more, instead of just wanting it. If it had a proper ending I would definitely give this a 5/5.

    Otherwise it was brilliant. One of the best fem!Harry fics I've ever read, not that there's an overwhelming amount of good fem!Harry fics >_>.
     
  13. Cxjenious

    Cxjenious Dark Lord

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    It's good, but it annoyed me that they still called her Harry. 4/5
     
  14. Novera

    Novera Seventh Year

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    Hmmmm... I hadn't noticed it was a one-shot.

    Lady Salazar seems to like pairing Fem!Harry with Salazar, but I have to say that this particular story was far better then the other one I recall reading. It was darker, and even though it was only one chapter (or was it?) there was character development.

    I also liked that Fem!Harry's name was still Harry.

    A 4/5, and a 5/5 if it continues with the same quality of writting. If it continues.
     
  15. Richard

    Richard Supreme Mugwump

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    I thought it was pretty good too. Slytherin's personality seemed realistic. 4.5/5 from me.
     
  16. Viper

    Viper Fourth Year

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    Read it. But couldn't quite enjoy it.

    Guess Female!Harry ain't just my cup of tea.
     
  17. Dirk Diggory

    Dirk Diggory Seventh Year

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    I think it's way overrated thus far. Many characters are retardedly OOC, most notably Dumbledore (who, if there were a sequel, would probably resort to rubbing his hands together gleefully as he cackles about TEH GREETAR GOOD). DADA class where Slytherin regularly demonstrates unforgivable pain curses on her. Yeah, okay, that's the definition of plausibility.

    Furthermore, I'm just not very interested in rooting for a protagonist who displays a Stockholm syndrome-type mental disorder in worshipping her owner and not resisting. Sorry.

    2.5/5
     
  18. Korisovra

    Korisovra Headmaster

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    Fem!Harry brought it to a screeching halt all by itself. I'll pass...
     
  19. Amerision

    Amerision Galactic Sheep Emperor DLP Supporter

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    This section is called For Review for a reason. You review stories. A movie critic does not review movies without seeing. Why do you think you're entitled to leave a review without first reading the story?

    If you're not open minded enough to give a short story a chance for such a mundane reason, you have no business leaving a message here at all. Nobody cares if you'll 'pass'. A simple X of your window would have sufficed.
     
  20. Red Aviary

    Red Aviary Hogdorinclawpuff Prestige DLP Supporter

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    Definitely worth the time. I actually kind of like Fem!Harry, if done right...

    My only real complaints are that it was only a one-shot. 4.5/5.