Title:Sympathetic magic
Author:Is269
Genre:Romance/(not sure)
Status:Complete
Pairings:Severus/Lily and all the other canon pairings
Link https://www.devianta******/ls269/journal/Published-Stories-789163131(full version deviant art)
https://archiveofourown.org/works/7953760/chapters/18189718(incomplete version on AO3)
Summary:
"The story follows Severus and Lily through their last two years at Hogwarts, but it's also focused on the Marauders, Narcissa and Lucius, Regulus Black, Poppy Pomfrey, and lots of OCs. No characters are really hated, except, I guess, for Bellatrix. It's AU, but I think quite respectful towards J.K Rowling's plots and characters. It gets extremely caught up in the emotional world of the characters, and can spend whole chapters in symbolic landscapes representing their souls (I'm not sure if that's really selling it, but it's the truth!) "-----from the author's note on AO3

This is an fairly interesting AU.Some things deviate from the canon. However,it's still a very decent read. All of our canon characters are likeable in their own way and fleshed-out. In spite of being an AU,their personalities stick quite closely to the canon. For example,Snape hates to see James get Lily as much as or more than he wants Lily himself. This Lily is surprisingly likeable instead of being a saint or a cheap whore or two-dimensioned.It also has amazing ocs like a muggles nicknamed bruiser who was owned by Rosier for the muggle ring.

The plot is decent as well. Many events and action happened in the duration of two years.There're also many alternate futures presenting there. One of this futures is the canon. This future is told by a woman who is obsessed with dementors and knows Snape's possible future through them.

(I am probably committing suicide again.But life will be dull without committing suicide every now and then.)

 

fixed it.

 

Eclectic comments:

Spoiler

• You never travel by floo in pairs.... okay, then why did they just do that? It would've only taken a second longer to go one at a time.
• Why doesn't Lily have her apparation license if she's seventeen already?
• There are sombreros in Britain?
• Malfoy's at least like 20 years older than Lily. Why would he be talking to her? Would she really have heard of him, even?
• Describing someone on first glance as a muggle seems weird. It's like 'vegan' or something; of course there are going to be some people who would say 'well of course you can tell that on first glance', but it makes more sense to say man or woman
• Weird tense shifts
• That's a long time to be holding tea before you're aware of it. Maybe it was lukewarm already.
• I don't think I like Madam Pomfrey calling Lily 'little girl', not as an insult.
• Is white hunter a term like white knight?
• You can lose your scholarship to Hogwarts?
• Lily's words and actions seem to contradict what she's thinking.
• They stand around in front of Snape a long time for people with no time on their hands.
• Fuck, now Lily's calling Madam Pomfrey by her first name.
• Why do we switch between capitalizing and not capitalizing healer?
• Why is Lily getting injured frequently?
• How did James even know she was in the Hospital Wing?
• 'frustration was etched in every syllable' Really? All two of them?
• You're having Snape talk about literal fashion statements of all things.

Okay, so the grammatical errors weren't terrible, nor were the things that generally clash with good written communication, so it was quite legible. It was of a bearable length for something that isn't interesting.

There seemed to be consistent hints that at some point, Lily would give up on Snape, so this takes place... before that? Doesn't she canonically give up on him before this? Whatever; I suppose it could be stretched and squeezed into the canon. She and James are acting the same as they did in fifth year, so that's not what happened, but this all goes under the monothematic dumb decision of pairing Lily with Snape, a jerk who hangs out with Death Eaters.

I actually liked the OC. She seems like a realistic take on the situation; someone who doesn't really care about how the war ends because it's more than her job's worth.

What I don't get is the point of introducing her. Is this version of Lily just going to go out and be a Healer in the war? I guess she doesn't have to worry about marrying James and having a kid. That said, I don't get the point of the story at all, so that's another point off.

2/5.

Halt: Edited for spacing and readability. Do better next time.

 

I apologize for causing the waste of time.
(´;︵;`)
Still thanks for the reviews.

 

Defending is too tiring. I would rather apologize. (^_^)

Maybe apologizing is still too tiring so I probably should keep quiet.
╮（╯＿╰）╭

It is indeed a bit too slow-paced. The meat part scattered across latter chapters. As someone who love how long it takes harry to find out he was in another dimension in Stranger in an unholy land,maybe it's not surprising that I enjoyed this as well. However,I wonder why I don't like soap operas like I am supposed to.