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WIP Take It Back by f1onagher - T - (DA/LoZ Dynasty Quest)

Discussion in 'Anime, Cartoons, and Comics' started by Nemrut, Jun 20, 2018.

  1. Nemrut

    Nemrut The Black Mage ~ Prestige ~

    Aug 9, 2009
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    Title: Take it Back
    Author: f1onagher
    Rating: T
    Genre: Adventure/kingdom runner
    Status: In-Progress
    Words: ca 400k words for the main story and 100k in sidestory stuff so around 500k combined
    Summary: You have inherited a kingdom in the midst of its final fall. Enemies surround your people on all sides and your foes already plan their portions of the spoils. Disappoint them. Bring Hyrule back from the brink and remind the world of Thedas why your people have weathered the Tests of Time.
    Link: spacebattles

    Credit goes to @EsperJones for mentioning this quest in this post here but also shame on him for not at all selling how great it is and for keeping it to himself for all this time. Thin ice, my friend.

    The quest is half kingdom runner and half personal adventure.

    So yeah, interesting crossover premise right from the start. Hyrule and all the Legend of Zelda elements are set within the world of Dragon Age. Hyrule is placed to the left of Orlais and in times past, it was once one of the great powers in the world but those days are long gone. Mismanagement, scheming, losses and enemies seeking to bring in low has brought the once mighty empire to the brink of destruction. The story and quest starts with Zelda's father, the king, having died, leaving the ruling of Hyrule to Zelda, only the nobility has taken over and formed a regency council, refusing to crown you queen just yet.

    The goal is simple but not easy. Take control of Hyrule, bring back the lost provinces back into the fold and restore Hyrule to its old glory.

    You don't really need to know all that much about Dragon Age or the Legend of Zelda, really.

    If you're unfamiliar with the former, click on the spoiler

    it's a fantasy medieval setting in which periodically the
    Darkspawn attack, a kinda race of tainted creatures which seek to contaminate all untainted life. Blights are massive attacks in which an Archdemon leads a giant horde to a raid against the surface and only end when the Archdemon is slain, until the next one surfaces centuries later. Opposing them are the Grey Wardens, an organization that recruits no matter the race, gender, nation, religion or station, who are seemingly immune to the taint of the Darkspawn and are great warriors.

    The rest of the kingdoms are mainly human, although you can find dwarves and elves also within the system. The elves were also once a mighty empire but theirs was shattered long ago and the remaining elves are either slaves/lowly discriminated and exploited servants in human cities, kept in slums or ghettos or xenophobic, isolationist nomads in forests.

    Another big factor is religion. Nearly all the humans believe in the religion of the Chant of Light, overseen by the religious organization of the chantry.

    Mages are tightly controlled by the Chantry and the templars (basically an anti mage organization which is also controlled by the Chantry) and mages can be possessed by demons, which are also a thing there.

    That should cover all the important information on that front. What should be immediately obvious is that the setting alone makes for an immensely interesting crossover. By placing Hyrule in Thedas, there are immediately points of conflict. The rest of the world kinda hates elves or at least really dislikes them and Hyrule is all elves. The rest of the world believes in one religion which severely dislikes other religions and the religion of Hyrule is also different.

    Hyrule just makes a lot of sense here, it's neither too strong nor to weak and it has a lot of promise either way on a geopolitical level. Sure, being elves and adhering to another religion makes everyone dislike them, Orlais in particular but then again, same religion and race doesn't mean the other nations don't hate each other as well.

    As to the Legend of Zelda side, that I can explain less and you should have at least some grounding from having played any one of the games, but I don't think it's absolutely necessary and you will get enough information as the story goes along although you will certainly appreciate some things more.

    Overall, the worldbuilding has been outstanding. Hyrule was altered enough to fit into the setting and emerge as a coherent, interesting kingdom with many interesting spins on its institutions, places and inhabitants.

    The story itself is deeply compelling. Zelda is a great protagonist and her journey to queenship and later on her struggle to keep the ship afloat is both, fun and engaging.

    The other characters are explored enough to be distinct from each other while never forgetting that people have their own agendas as well.

    The kingdom running elements are surprisingly fun as well. As a Legend of Zelda fan, of course one cares a lot more about Hyrule than some random kingdom, so taking steps to make Hyrule great again is oddly satisfying. The dice rolling is quite fun as well and I am quite fond of it in general as it allows for the author to explore the story in directions they may not have thought of otherwise and introduces stakes in a way that only games really can. One fun example is that Link, at some point, had to fight two lizardmen but the diceroll was bad so he was unable to kill them which in reverse meant that those two had to be people that Link, who until this point was, like the Link in the games, an unstoppable murder machine, so anyone who can hold out against him needs to be suitably badass as well.

    There is around 100k in side stories and omakes and while admittedly not all of them are homeruns, there are still quite a few good ones. Lavanya Six wrote a few ones and they are all worth a read, shining some light on side characters and the like. I also find the practice of rewarding fanart and omakes with bonuses for the rolls of the main character to be quite the interesting concept.

    So I dunno, it's all around quite the package. There is a lot to read, it balances kingdom running and the more personal aspects quite well and while there are quite a few errors, spelling mistakes and a few missing words here and there, it's not enough to take you out of the story. The setting and characters are interesting and I pretty much blew through all of this in one day and was immersed from beginning to end.

    One somber note is that the author is considering stopping the quest since real life is throwing a wench into things but it's unlcear what that will mean outside of the fact that the next update may take a few weeks, unless a good co-QM is chosen. Such is life, I suppose.

    So yeah, if you like quests, Zelda, Dragon Age or just a good time reading, this quest is definitely worth checking out.

  2. Zombie

    Zombie Black Philip Moderator DLP Supporter

    Apr 28, 2007
    I see 5 votes and no reviews. Can you please, please take the time to give some additional feedback. Nemrut's review is elementary, but not indicative of the same level of feedback that you have to give. Just tell us what you liked and didn't like, and why you're rating it so high. Its that simple. First part of posting to review is having a good story to read, the second part is to review and actually commentate on the story. These threads are meant to inspire discussion about a topic as well as to serve as an organizational method.

    You can argue whichever is most important, but I'd counter that both are equally important. I can't support a nearly 5 star rating on the basis of 5 people that said nothing about it.

    Thanks Nemurt for the effort you're taking in reviewing your stories that you post and thanks for the interesting finds.

    Anyone else wanna try and take a crack at this?
  3. Nemrut

    Nemrut The Black Mage ~ Prestige ~

    Aug 9, 2009
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    There was just a new vote chapter posted, so for anyone wanting to get into this, it's a good time since you can vote right now on the next immediate actions of the kingdom.
  4. Shouldabeenadog

    Shouldabeenadog Death Eater

    Sep 3, 2010
    I'm really liking this.
    I have to give credit to the community, they seem to be doing a very good job with voting (as I'm approaching the end of the prologue.)

    The first issue I have is that the typos are plentiful, and are not corrected when the GM reposts previous quests.

    The second is the excess of repetition that inflates the word count. A good third of the official count is copypasta from the previous post. A good editor would clean this up and take it from good to great.
  5. Nazgoose

    Nazgoose The Honky-tonk ~ Prestige ~ DLP Supporter DLP Gold Supporter

    Mar 16, 2011
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    Blitzed through it in the last few days and I'm a big fan. Don't think I'll have time to keep up with the discussions and vote on every turn, but I'll be looking forward to the updates very much.

    Found it kind of funny that we technically had options beyond Hyrule for our factions, there was no way any of the other ones could win with Hyrule in play.

    It does feel like our scaling is a little too strong sometimes, but we've had some really lucky rolls that made things go better than they had any right to. The GM has also started buffing other factions in ways that I hope mean we're not the only ones making great strides forward, and we've yet to tangle with any of the real powers of the world so far so I'm willing to wait there.

    There's also fantastic use of write-ins, so that's a big plus.

    5/5 for me.

    Agree on the first, disagree on the second. You can skim past it without issue while catching up, and having all of it makes it a an easier read when it's a new post since you don't have to go back to the previous one to get any sort of context.