Title: The Deception Series Year 1: Discovery
Author: Zenatha
Rating: T
Category: General / Dark Arts
Genre: Adventure/Fantasy
Chapters: 14
Words: 58,861
Updated: May 16
Published: Aug 25, 2013
Pairings: none yet
Status: Work in Progress
Magic. It was fantastical, complex, and the only part of his heritage that he could be certain of. An AU to Harry Potter and the Philosopher's Stone, where Neville Longbottom is the Boy-Who-Lived and Harry Potter was thought to have died Halloween 1981. No Slash. Later parts of the series to be rated M.
https://www.fanfiction.net/s/9627828/1/The-Deception-Series-Year-1-Discovery

I did search for a review on this fic here and I couldn't find it so I thought I'd post it. I believe its a very rich layered AU for a first year rewrite and worthy of consideration. The only drawbacks are that it hasn't been updated since May and Harry has an OC name which I forgive because the author actually explained the reasons for giving him an OC name. It's also a Harry in Ravenclaw which is not something you see very often.


Edit by Minion, Dec. 23, 2014

 

What?
/10char

EDIT:

Read through it. Like Halt says, the technical writing is good and there is an interesting premise, but it is honestly just filled with boring idiocy. I, personally, am tired of reading about some guy named Cole (who will soon be named something like Actrolus or something equally idiotic).

I also am coming to dislike Harry's characterization. He just seems to be pissed off all the time, and I really dislike his attitude. I believe I called him an 'edgelord' in my review. There seems to also be, as Halt said, trying to make Harry more important through Titles and Names. I told the author as such during my review.

Good parts... well Harry and his stooges are kind of like the Marauders, that was a little refreshing. Harry is talented, but not a super prodigy. Decent writing. Interesting premise. That's about it, really.

2/5, for me.

 

Started off slowly but picked up by the end. I feel like this has potential as the start of a good series. As a stand alone fic I would rate it a 2 but since the author clearly intends it to be the start of a larger story, I'll gice it a 3/5 for now

 

People who aren't able to tell the difference between Your and You're need to be put to death.

 

I remember you bitching at me about my usage of those words years ago Oz. I think it was actually my motivation to learn the difference between the two

 

Its very canon. Thats not such a big issue in smaller fics, but as a 14 chapter "part 1" Its pretty dodgy and uninteresting. I've slogged through a million canon rehashes that were supposedly going to diverge in later years, and never did. Also Harry's name is Cole, thats awful.

However, reading the final chapter on its own is a good story set up. Interesting premise.