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Complete The Girl Series - LotRxBtVS

Discussion in 'Trash Bin' started by ReverseSide, Dec 5, 2009.

  1. ReverseSide

    ReverseSide Slug Club Member

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    Title: The Girl
    Fandoms: Buffy the Vampire Slayer :: Middle Earth (Lord of the Rings)
    Rating: Hard to figure out. It feels mature, but there's no graphic scenes of... anything.
    Genre: ???
    Summary:And I, who looked into her eyes and was lost, then, perhaps, I, too, could find my way back.
    Link: Twisting the Hellmouth

    More Complete Synopsis: Buffy falls into the Tolkien's world. There's not much more I can say about this - but it is truly spectacular. Tolkien's voice is preserved, but there's an element of Jennifer's writing that pervades the story - actually adding to the narrative rather than distracting from it. I love it. Men love it. Women love it. Even Tehan loves it.

    Jennifer has a beautiful writing style, emotional and powerful. The scenes vibrate with intensity. Also, the way Jennifer writes from other characters' view instead of Buffy is remarkable, because the story doesn't get confusing or become lacking because of it. In this case, I think it just makes it stronger and unique. The slow build-up of the plot is amazing because the pace is just right and had me on the edge of my seat for the entire ride. The only warning is this: you may not enjoy the ultimate ending - if it truly is the end (many reviewers have asked for more).

    5/5.

    Edit: She also writes crazily epic TroyxBtVS, Kingdom_of_HeavenxBtVS
     
  2. Andro

    Andro Master of Death DLP Supporter

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    Thanks for the actual summary. Hate it when writers don't actually provide one.

    Forgive me, but a Buffy/Elrohir/Ellandan love triangle? What are the chances Buffy shacked up with Orlando Bloom and Brad Pitt in the other crossovers?

    There's no exposition as to how Buffy ended up in the LoTR universe. Why is this a crossover exactly?
    The translations and the Buffy/Elrohir/Elladan love triangle make me a little skeptical.

    Chapter 2

    Mmhmm.

    Feels like the inner monologue of Edward Cullen toward Bella Swan.

    Edit: Her Troy crossover is pretty epic. I retract what I said about it.
     
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  3. ZeroTheDestroyer

    ZeroTheDestroyer Auror

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    Gangbang? or Gang rape?
     
  4. ReverseSide

    ReverseSide Slug Club Member

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    She doesn't actually end up with Elrohir or Ellandan. The first part is more of establishing Buffy's presence in Middle Earth; and how the people there would view a Slayer. Consider: the Slayer is part magic, and we all know how LoTR people view magic... The 9th in the series is where the "actual" story begins.

    @ Zero: did you actually read the story?
     
  5. Tehan

    Tehan Avatar of Khorne DLP Supporter

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    As much as I loved this, it features the same problem I see all to often - people completely omitting 'threesome' from their list of options, and angst resulting.

    Seriously, it was emphasized very strongly in the story that those twins do everything together. Why can't they do Buffy together?
     
  6. Andro

    Andro Master of Death DLP Supporter

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    No. "Establishing Buffy's presence" is how the hell she ended up there, not plunging the reader into a love triangle without explanation. It's like she took a properly structured story and deleted everything leading up to that point.

    Thus story depends very much on the generosity of the reader.

    ma nat which one

    yuuyo both
     
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  7. Taure

    Taure Magical Core Enthusiast ~ Prestige ~ DLP Supporter

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    The story sacrifices coherence of plot to style far too much.

    It almost doesn't even have a plot. Each entry feels like we've walked into a story midway with no explanation. Most of the story is made up of descriptions of emotions and melodramatic angsty internal monologue.

    Needs far more narration.

    Buffy also needs to act far more like the slayer.

    Finally, the whole succubus-esque quality of Buffy's eyes is completely random and a clumsy plot device to get literally everyone to fall for her.

    2/5

    Edit: Completely agree with Andro about how the story feels like Twilight.
     
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  8. Tehan

    Tehan Avatar of Khorne DLP Supporter

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    That's exactly my point. They both love her. She loves both of them. They then proceed to angst like fuck over the situation instead of making Buffy the meat in an elf twin sandwich.
     
  9. Scott

    Scott Professor DLP Supporter

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    But it's just fucking fail, I agree with everything Andro said. I read chapters 1-2 and skimmed over chapters 3-4 and let me tell you, there is nothing there.

    We get Buffy captured by orcs in chapter 3 and then in 4 she is escaped or whatever but no explanation on how. How the hell did she get in middle earth to begin with? and BTW Love Triangles = auto fucking fail imo.
     
  10. ZeroTheDestroyer

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    Which one? The Girl series consists of several stories, within stories, which pretty much just revolves around a new guy wanting to bang the living shit out of Buffy.

    I am not trying to insult you, but, seriously, What is there to read?
     
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