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WIP The Legend of Randidly Ghosthound by puddles4263 - M - Original Fiction

Discussion in 'Almost Recommended' started by Dryops, Jun 16, 2020.

  1. Dryops

    Dryops Second Year DLP Supporter

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    Title: The Legend of Randidly Ghosthound
    Author: puddles4263
    Rating: M
    Genre: Adventure, Comedy, Cultivation & LitRPG
    Fandom: Original Universe
    Pairings:
    Summary: As the system initializes, the world shifts. Geography is rearranged and mixed, and levels and stats are instituted across the globe. On that night, one young man was walking through an underground tunnel, his mind on the small problems of his easy life. Because of his location during the shift, he starts in a dungeon far above his level, with no knowledge or teacher, or Newbie Village to guide him. Without a class, he struggles simply to survive in this world changed by its new connection to the Nexus. But struggle he will, for he is Randidly Ghosthound, and this is only how his legend begins...

    Link: Royal Road

    If you like the genre, and are willing to overlook / look past some flaws, this is a long, very enjoyable story (over 1200 chapters at time of posting, around 2.2 million words). I've read all of the ones that are publicly posted, to date.

    Let's address the elephant in the room first. The name "Randidly" is terrible. The author and character both acknowledge this, and there is some provided in-story explanation for this. With that being said, Randidly is known for most of the story by his last name, "Ghosthound", which makes this much more readable. I know a few readers have either used Chrome extensions to change his name, or downloaded as a text file and edited it. I was able to overlook this once I started, although the name is what put me off from reading this initially.

    What this Story Does Well:

    - I like the initial setup. Although I haven't read a lot of LitRPGs yet, I like the idea of the system trying to force him to conform. The consequences of being non-conformant continue to escalate, as the story progresses, including the latest public arc. Without getting into spoilers, it is not something that is just brushed off.

    - I like the character progression. Although Ghosthound is pretty overpowered at first, you do see a nice balance of opponents and adversaries who keep him in check. The power growth is fairly consistent, but I like the idea early on that versatility is the largest power. This does go by the wayside a bit as the story continues.

    - The later plot is one I really enjoy, as you dig deeper into what "The System" actually is.

    - Nice mix of action and other types of challenges.

    What this Story Could Do Better:

    - There's an arc where this story tends to lose readers. Unfortunately, this is fairly early on in the story, relatively speaking (I think late 200's), where he is removed from Earth. This arc is abruptly introduced, and doesn't seem to fit the big picture well. I know there are some readers from here that have dropped out around this point. If you do make it past that arc, it does get a lot better, and the events from the arc are woven into the story in a way that actually improves the story later on. It just does not seem that way at the time.

    - The name, which we've already addressed.

    - Some of the writing could be tightened up. It's pretty well written, from a grammar standpoint. However, we could do with less, on some pieces.

    Overall Thoughts:

    This is not a perfect story, by any means. This is an enjoyable and long story, which is rare enough that I went ahead and recommended it. I would give this story a 3.5 / 5, rounded up to a 4.
     
  2. valrie

    valrie Third Year

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    Man, I tried reading this twice already but I didn't even make it to chapter 100 in either try. I like the general idea of the story (world integration into a RPG setting) and there's other stories that do it very well.

    But the main character is just so edgy and annoying. I actually wondered for a while whether the MC was supposed to have some sort of mental disability but I think it's just that the author wants his main character to be this edgy. I mean the MC's name is Randidly Ghosthound. His actual name. That was the first red flag for me.

    I always wonder what people think when they write characters like this because IIRC the other characters seem fairly normal. It's just the MC who is super weird.

    2/5 from me because I think I would really like the story if the MC was written like a normal person.
     
  3. Dryops

    Dryops Second Year DLP Supporter

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    Definitely understandable. For what it's worth, the main character does get a lot better over time. That being said, I can see why 100 chapters in and still disliking the characterization is enough to put anyone off. And yeah, the name sucks, no disagreement about that.
     
  4. thattin

    thattin Second Year

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    I've been reading this over the last week or so and it's ok? It's well written enough that I'm not put off by the writing style itself, but it has some major issues.

    Things I liked though were the ideas involved. It hits lots of things I like to see with worldbuilding. I've seen most of them in other works true, but I'm pretty sure this predates them so points for that. Some of the side characters are great and I can appreciate the scale of the whole thing - it's stupidly long and has kept enough of a plot to keep me invested so far. The action is well done as well.

    The issues with the story I'll divide into minor and major.

    Minor
    -Firstly the name. Randidly Ghosthound is the stupidest name I've ever heard. Randidly I can sort of see and I'm fine with the explanation for it (his mum being crazy) but Ghosthound? It doesn't help that 90% of the time he goes by "the Ghosthound" which makes my eyes bleed from the sheer teenage edge every time I see it.
    -The author is a bit too scattered? It's maybe just because of the scope but I've read up to 700ish and there are 5 only vaguely connected stories going on right now? It wasn't as bad earlier but it's getting worse.
    -Randidly gets maybe a bit too lucky? I guess it's part of the whole appeal of progression fantasy but for all he complains about slow grinding he actually levels absurdly fast compared to anyone else.
    -Randidly's skillsheet gets printed out in full frequently. It's normally at the bottom of the chapter so you can just skip it and I can't see why you wouldn't. It's an unreadable mess of numbers. He has trimmed it back a couple of times but it's still pretty ridiculous.
    -The main character complains constantly although I suppose this is a facet of my Major issues.

    Major
    -Randidly is a horrible and unlikable person. Like just the worst. He started out as an angry guy who rages against everyone and evolves into an angrier guy who rages against everything. He's incredibly hypocritical and I've skipped over large bits where he's just complaining about anything and everything. His whole purpose seems to be to rage at the system because it told tried to make him get a class? Didn't give him good enough rewards for a path?
    -Everyone is a horrible person. Like literally everyone. It's impressive how despicable everyone is portrayed. There's like 5 people out of hundreds who I can think of that aren't outright horrible people. It gets a bit tiresome?
    -The main antagonist seems to be the system itself. Which gets a bit annoying because it almost goes out to justify the edginess of the main character? He has to be a loner (except when it's more convenient for him to not).

    Overall I'd say 2/5. It's readable and has good ideas but has deepseated problems. I think with a different more likeable lead it'd be much better.
     
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