Title: The Only One He Ever Feared
Author: jjtaylor
Rating: PG-13
Genre: Dark
Pairing: None
Words: 2,078
Published: June 4, 2005
Status: Complete, One-Shot
Summary: You've got it all wrong. We're not the bad guys...

Link: http://hp-au-ficathon.livejournal.com/4460.html?nojs=1

I loved this, but I don't want to spoil it for everybody. 9/10

Edit: DLP Genre: Er, I guess either Dark Arts or General.


Checked by Minion, February. 5, 2013
Fixed the link. Thx to Henry Persico for the info.

 

Not up to O'Henry standards, but a nice short fic.

 

Not a bad story

3/5

Would be better with like one more chapter or something like that.

EDIT:
Guess I don't like cliffhangers.

 

Excellent one shot! The way the author leaves it hanging, never to be resolved...masterful.

4/5

 

That's why I love it, the cliffhanger ending makes you think for a bit. It haunts you a little after you read it.

 

I don't think I've ever seen a story written in present-tense before.

I liked the overall idea, but the writing seemed very rushed. If this was slowed down and stretched out, it would be even better.

 

I loved it. Thought the last few letters between Harry and Peter were awesome. It's quite good. 4/5

 

I really enjoyed this story. I dont normally read one shot stories especially if they are in first person but this story was a different case. Loved the cliff hanger thanks for the link. 4.5/5.

 

I loved it.

Definitely one of my favorite one-shots.

4.5/5

 

A really interesting version of the mind game theme. For a one-shot with deliberately open end it is really good. The rushed plot is an element of style

As a livejournal one-shot I say 4/5.

On the Wings of a Phoenix is an attempt to use nearly the same plot bunny in a chaptered story with a definite ending. But it has severe plot holes. These will never occur in a short one-shot which doesn't waste its space for background explanations.

 

Damnation. I hate unresolved cliffhangers. Are there any authors here willing to take this plot bunny and do it justice? I give this a 4/5.

 

Personally, I thought this was subpar.

Wasn't believable in the least.

1/5

 

Thought it was alright, pretty good writing style and all but like spacks couldn't quite find it all that believable 3/5

 

This wasn't believable at all. A few letters from Pettigrew saying Dumbledore is evil, Voldemort is good, Dumbledore is the dark lord and Harry turns on Dumbledore. It will take more than that for Harry to turn on Dumbledore. With that said the fic was interesting enough. 3/5

 

Gah. I wish you'd stop reviving 7 year old threads.

Because now I have to read the story and rate it, which is not something I want to do on a 7 year old story.

Story is pretty terrible, yo. 1/5

 

He's doing exactly what he's supposed to.

The story itself is clearly dated. It's lacking in depth or detail, placing style over substsance, and I'm not even a particular fan of the style. Present tense narration has to be done very well (e.g. The Hunger Games) to even equal past tense narration.

It has decent spelling and grammar and there's nothing overtly offensive here, but it just feels like more of an outline of a story than a complete one. 2/5.

 

The idea isn't bad. But the author didn't do the necessary work for the reader to believe in his story. He's using canon in a strange way to justify Harry's and Pettigrew actions, etc.

Like I said, the idea isn't bad. But it can't possibly be developed in a little one-shot.


2/5

 

Yes, it can be done in a oneshot. Nowadays I am inclined to say it isn't as good as I thought it was, but I still judge it 3/5.

The author should have taken a bit more time to explain Harry's increasing doubts about the world surrounding him, but it doesn't need to be rolled out that much.

 

It just wasn't convincing at all. In fact I had to reread some of it so that it would make sense. It was far too short. Harry didn't even bother to cross-check anything Pettigrew said to him before deciding to just blow Dumbledore up. I can't believe Harry has lost his mind either just from those letters. 1/5