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WIP The Rise of One by checkerboard.paint - Worm

Discussion in 'Almost Recommended' started by Oz, Apr 17, 2016.

  1. Oz

    Oz Heir to Hogwarts Moderator DLP Supporter

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    Title: The Rise of One
    Author: checkerboard.paint
    Rating: T
    Genre: Alternate Universe
    Status: In-Progress
    Fandom: Worm
    Pairings: None
    Summary: Things don't go as planned after the Echidna fight. Hell, they don't even try to follow the script after Taylor's identity was revealed. But everything truly falls apart when the Simurgh comes to Brockton Bay. Canon divergence/AU
    Link: FFN

    I've been enjoying this the last few weeks. Pacing might be a bit slow for some people, but update rate is pretty steady and I'm liking the interactions between Taylor and the others.

    4/5 atm, but I'll probably raise that to a 5/5 if the quality stays this good.
     
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  2. Vira

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    Definitely well written, but time will tell how good this will get. I still don't know where it's going, but I hope to know soon.

    4/5.
     
  3. Jarik

    Jarik Chief Warlock

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    Too early to really rate it, but I'm loving it so far. Interaction between the characters has been good. Looking forward to seeing where it goes.
     
  4. Halt

    Halt 1/3 of the Note Bros.

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    Taylor gets aged up with an additional year of bullying (and torture). For reasons. This plot point just really grates on my nerves, like aging HP up grating or villager-torture child Naruto grating.

    Other than that, well-written and character interaction has been a joy to read, but feels too early to rate. Tentative 3.5/5, rounding up to 4/5.
     
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  5. Ferdiad

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    Yeah the fics alright if a bit boring but tbh I find the additional torture she went though to be a bit weird. I mean I already thought the bullying in canon was ridiculous but the extra stuff the author does to her is beyond reason. Like people said, I don't see the reason for it, it's seemed to have no impact on taylor besides a bit of body horror.
    3/5
     
  6. Oz

    Oz Heir to Hogwarts Moderator DLP Supporter

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    New chapter dropped. Nice mix of action and dialogue between Taylor and Weld.
     
  7. Nemrut

    Nemrut The Black Mage Prestige

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    Read this today and wow, I loved this so much. The atmosphere and tone, especially the way fights are structured make this feel so much like Worm, save with character interactions and dialog.

    What is pulling this down, however, is the, as of now, seemingly arbitrary changes to things that happened in the past, Taylor's suffering and what happened with Purity and so on.

    I don't know, it felt really unnecessary to me. Having Miss Militia, Clockblocker, Kid Win, Vista, Weld and Skitter fight for their survival on this strange earth whilst having to interact is plenty of exiting already, I don't see how these changes make it more interesting. if anything, they confuse the reader in a bad way, in an irritating way.

    So, docking points for that but still

    4/5
     
  8. Vira

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    This updated a couple days ago and boy, what a chapter.

    The lead up as Taylor and Weld search the village was creepy and only made it more horrifying when the chaos started. Miss Militia and Kid Win are MIA, and judging by the exploding gore trees, might have been killed. It was a great moment when Weld chose to leave Vista and save Taylor instead, and I’m sure a lot of conflict will occur due to this choice.

    But Jesus, those gore trees.
    I just noticed that this story is labelled Adventure/Romance in the FFnet summary. I wish more Romances were like this.
     
  9. Oz

    Oz Heir to Hogwarts Moderator DLP Supporter

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    Hoooooly moly that was tense. I reread what's there today and I think this might be my favourite worm fic. Not cliched, good atmosphere and character interactions, engaging mystery, and solidly written.