1. Hi there, Guest

    Only registered users can really experience what DLP has to offer. Many forums are only accessible if you have an account. Why don't you register?
    Dismiss Notice
  2. Q4 2019 Story Competition is kicking off!

    Foreign Magical Regions (Setting outside of Britain)
    Get writing Folks!
    Dismiss Notice

The Sorrows of Lucifer - Dzeytoun - K

Discussion in 'Trash Bin' started by iamnotreal, Jun 25, 2018.

  1. iamnotreal

    iamnotreal Second Year

    Jan 4, 2016
    High Score:
    Title: The Sorrows Of Lucifer
    Author: Dzeytoun
    Rating: K
    Genre: Angst/Drama
    Status: Complete
    Library Category: General
    Pairings: -
    Summary: Severus Snape reflects on Albus Dumbledore's attitude towards Harry Potter. A companion story to my fic HERE BE MONSTERS.

    Link: https://www.fanfiction.net/s/1480604/1/The-Sorrows-of-Lucifer

    Probably one of my favorite short stories. A companion piece to the authors series of one-shots which all revolve around the somewhat novel concept where Dumbledore actually considers/wishes Harry to be more like a son. I really like the religious parallels drawn out here and the writing is really solid, little error from what I can see. It's done from Snape's POV and in my opinion encapsulates his persona from canon quite well. His anecdote about Lucifer and God was rather heartbreaking; it really hit all the notes I thought in how callous, uncaring and terrifying something Almighty could be to those without their favor.
  2. Blorcyn

    Blorcyn Order Member DLP Supporter DLP Silver Supporter

    Oct 16, 2010
    I really enjoyed this and would recommend the read. However I haven't read the accompanying one shots.

    I really enjoyed the allegory of lucifer, and I liked the angle of how Snape views Harry. It's not often people catch all the malice and poison in him, which is often excused and explained by his love for Lily. I liked that that barely figured in the motivations discussed.

    I can't figure out how to rate on mobile, so when I get home I'll edit and rephrase this review but probably going to say it's a high four out of five.
  3. Republic

    Republic The Snow Queen ~ Prestige ~ DLP Supporter

    Sep 1, 2010
    Germany occupied Greece
    High Score:
    Holy fuck but I could not stand the way the author chose to write that. It read awkwardly as all hell and bashed me over the head with the intended effect. If I could physically reach over and slap them, I would.
  4. pbluekan

    pbluekan Headmaster DLP Supporter

    Jan 24, 2014
    Dancing in the Mindfield
    Exactly. It reads like some edgelord teen’s confession of love and personal manifesto all rolled into one steaming pile.

    That anecdote about Lucifer and god is not only way over used (especially in edgelord brand fiction) but the author was practically beating us over the head with it. It isn’t a clever anecdote if it’s bloody fucking obvious.
  5. Otters

    Otters The Chosen One DLP Supporter

    Jun 8, 2010
    Exactly as bad as the title suggested. While it has his immaturity and petty venom, it completely misses Snape's voice and just reads like inane prattle. The combination of a dark wizard and a Christian motif is a fairly vulgar clash in this setting.
  6. RottedKarma

    RottedKarma First Year

    Jun 22, 2017
    Planet Earth
    High Score:
    This. I felt like I was reading a list of the author's ideas and interpretations molded into a narration, instead of the experiences of a fleshed-out character with a distinct personality. That's also a minor issue I had when reading the book Fahrenheit 451.

    On the other hand, I actually liked the anecdote in theory, even if it could've been a little more, ah, subtle. I almost would have preferred a few hints about the parallels with maybe a short description of the story of Lucifer in the beginning, separate from the narration.

    Basically, it was a mildly interesting concept that failed in execution. 2.5/5 rounded to 3/5 because my standards aren't as high as you guys'.
  7. Scott

    Scott Professor DLP Supporter

    Apr 25, 2008
    I have to agree with CareOtter. The bit about Lucifer was interesting but man this just made Snapes character come off as an annoying whiney little bitch.

    Like if a 13-15 year old teen got their phone taken from them and it's just the end of the world and they're just the worst parents ever and it's just so unfair! That is how Snape' s character read to me but instead of being a teen he's a 40-50(?) Year old man.
    Last edited: Jun 29, 2018