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Abandoned The Taste of Blood is Sweet by Heather Sinclair (R)

Discussion in 'Dark Arts' started by Antivash, Aug 6, 2008.

  1. Antivash

    Antivash Until we meet again... DLP Supporter Retired Staff

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    Title: The Taste of Blood is Sweet
    Author: Heather Sinclair
    Rating: R
    Genre: Horror
    DLP Category: Dark Arts
    Pairing: Yellow Fever (Harry/Cho. You must use that now. I command it. >_>)
    Published: August 02, 2008
    Updated: August 05, 2008
    Chapters: 2
    Words: 6,260
    Status: Abandoned

    Summary: Driven over the edge, Cho Chang enters into a world of death and depravity, where Harry is more than happy to escort her through.

    Of all the creatures that were made he [man] is the most detestable. Of the entire brood he is the only one — the solitary one — that possesses malice. That is the basest of all instincts, passions, vices — the most hateful...He is the only creature that inflicts pain for sport, knowing it to be pain...Also — in all the list he is the only creature that has a nasty mind. (Patronus Charm)


    An awesome series starting up. Considering all I know of what may perhaps come, and the format Heather chose, I expect much from this. The potential is high.

    I expect there to be lots of death, gore, and possibly some smut.

    For now, too short for a rating, but if I had foresight, Id say 4 to 5 out of 5.


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  2. Fuegodefuerza

    Fuegodefuerza Minister of Magic

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    Very sexy. I cannot wait to see how this one goes. Fantastic job, Heather, keep up the good work. :D
     
  3. Knox

    Knox The Last Remnant DLP Supporter

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    Good god Heather, I love this story so far. Here's to hoping the rest is as good as the first two chapters.
     
  4. Memory King

    Memory King Order Member DLP Supporter

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    4.5/5 at the moment with a definite, very likely possibility of an increase. Highly recommended.
     
  5. KrzaQ

    KrzaQ Denarii Host DLP Supporter

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    Nice start, but it's way too soon to rate it imho.
     
  6. Mirkwood

    Mirkwood Seventh Year

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    MORE! More I tell you.
     
  7. Cy Block

    Cy Block Second Year

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    I happened to be on IRC when you and Vash discussed this story, and am astonished how quickly you started to write it. I liked the first chapter a lot, but the second one was simply epic. I await further updates with bated breath.
     
  8. The Deadman

    The Deadman Slug Club Member DLP Supporter

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    Read the first two chapters and loved them. Can't wait for the next chapter :p.
     
  9. vlad

    vlad Banned Prestige

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    Wow... I don't think I've seen an evil, fucked up Harry with as much potential in years. Very nice start, and having an dark and twisted Cho is a very, very nice bonus.
     
  10. Cxjenious

    Cxjenious Dark Lord

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    Hmmm, very good, but I'd rather wait for more chapter's before delivering my verdict.
     
  11. Drake

    Drake Seventh Year

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    The Harry from chapter one seems somewhat far away from the Harry in chapter two. I'm going to enjoy seeing how you get him from just being over angry and wanting vengence into the fucked up masterpiece you can make him into. This story has a lot of potential, especially with pscho!Cho.
     
  12. Dirk Diggory

    Dirk Diggory Seventh Year

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    The rationale for Harry suddenly becoming un-Harry is very well done. I actually liked the second chapter more than the first - psycho is all well and good but I have difficulty seeing Cho going psycho in any way that doesn't involve stalking and bursting into tears. Hopefully the next chapters will be more of Harry flipping the bird to canon events.
     
  13. Cathal

    Cathal Sir Nils' Right Hand

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    I'm too busy cleaning the saliva off my keyboard to write a full-fledged review, so "GIMME MOAR" should suffice.
     
  14. Cxjenious

    Cxjenious Dark Lord

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    On a completely unrelated note, I've been watching Vash's avatar for the past five minutes. It's awesum.
     
  15. Novamute

    Novamute Third Year

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    Very interesting start. I can't wait to see more.
     
  16. Scott

    Scott Professor DLP Supporter

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    Dark and twisted Harry/Cho was awesome.

    5/5 from me, story has much potential. Can't wait for more.
     
  17. Element

    Element Seventh Year

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    First off, very awesome.
    Though I do suspect you've made Cho a mute, judging by her lack of dialogue in the first chapter. That might turn out to be pretty cool and add a little something to her character, but at the moment, it makes the scene feel a little threadbare.

    I really like this, but it feels a little to me like the perspective you've chosen makes it hard to get into. The second chapter is neater in that you get the inner thoughts and the feelings of Cho and Harry. The first chapter is telling us what Cho and Harry are doing. It's a matter of opinion, I guess, but when you have Harry showing Cho his wounded hand, and her turning around and kissing him, I think it would either be better having some of Cho's angry/vengeful thoughts, or Harry being amused at (presumably) manipulating her so easily.

    Perhaps not, its certainly very good as it is, I just wanted to add something more than 'moar plz'. Moar plz.
     
  18. Mors

    Mors Denarii Host DLP Supporter

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    Since I don't know what's coming, I'd rather wait and watch for further developments. For now, though, it's on the better side of average. Although the Cho scenes were well handled, I have this unease about using dementors to provide the cause for insanity in a fic. Especially when dead dementors (for the first time!) and other assorted cliches are involved. And the reverse dementor thing you've set up conflicts with my own thoughts on how they work, so. :p

    I hope you have some good ideas for your protagonists to step towards the edge. Honestly I'm tired of "Ohsnap! Shit happened, and he/she/they/it snapped!" type of stories.

    I wtf'd throughout the first chapter, since I personally frown on making characters behave in such extremely OOC ways at the start of a fic and providing the explanations afterward. I understand how for some it only increases the thrill of following the explanations, but speaking for myself - I feel the story would've been better served if you'd started with the starting point itself. Coming back to it just in the second chapter... I just didn't see the point. Chapter 2 could've easily taken the place of chapter 1, and vice versa. The first chapter simply bored me.

    Ah well. Spelling/grammar is good, and it's not terrible with a big chance of improving. You are hereby given my benefit of doubt until three more chapters, for what it's worth.
     
    Last edited: Aug 9, 2008
  19. Goddessa39

    Goddessa39 DA Member

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    Just read the two chapters that are out. It really is something. I don't usually read Harry/Cho because she is such a bitch (I believe) but this has real promise. In this fic her own character hasn't been bitched up a whole lot yet and this has my interest.

    Chewing out Ron and Hermione? That was cool though the max CAPS are annoying, though informative.

    No Sirius yet though. Blows. Need more for a good rating though.
     
  20. shadownin

    shadownin Fourth Year

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    Excellent start, this fic has a lot of potential. It's a bit too early to rate but great stuff so far. Keep up the good work!
     
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