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WIP The World Without by Lunaludus Scribex - M - Fate/Stay Night

Discussion in 'Fate/Stay Night' started by Oxy, Oct 13, 2010.

  1. Oxy

    Oxy Third Year

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    Title: The World Without
    Author: Lunaludus Scribex
    Rating: M
    Genre: Fantasy
    DLP Category: Alternates
    Pairing: none known
    Chapters: 13
    Words: 127,641
    Updated: May 23, 2012
    Published: August 7, 2009

    Status: Work in progress
    Summary: Tiger Dojo 1 AU/continuation. One refusal does not end the story...nor one casualty, the battles. Even without Emiya Shirou, the Grail War goes on. -IN PROGRESS-
    Link: http://www.fanfiction.net/s/5282769/1/The_World_Without

    After googling around at TV tropes I came across this fic. An AU where Shirou Emiya refused to participate in the Holy Grail War. Without Saber he got killed (well not exactly dead, but he is as good as dead). Saber in turn became the servant of Sakura. A FSN with Sakura as the main heroine.

    I will tell you in advance that my knowledge of FSN Heaven's Feel is not as great as I would wish it to be. I have only watched the anime. As such I can't criticize a story if I have little knowledge of it, beside the obvious like grammar or vocab ofcourse. Which are all well done. Anyways so far the story has been very entertaining for me. It might, or might not, be a pleasant story for people who know the FSN Heaven's Feel story thoroughly. Regardless I would recommend people to give it a try.

    4.5/5


    Checked by Minion, Nov. 25, 2012
     
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  2. SmileOfTheKill

    SmileOfTheKill Magical Amber

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    The hell is this story doing in the recycling bin? This story along with Chaos Theory is the best stories in all of Fate/Stay night that I currently know of, and this is in the Bin.
     
  3. iLost

    iLost Minister of Magic

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    ^Completely agree. I read that through a few months ago and was pretty entertained. An easy 5/5 if I've read one. I think I had meant to post it here For Review, but I guess I forgot.

    For those that are Sakura fans, this fic is definitely not for you. For those others, its interesting. The tension with Saber in Sakura's family is very well done, though at times it lends vaguely towards drama, but it wasn't off putting.

    I liked the style of writing done, they've got experience and know pretty much what they are doing. The story was engaging, since I really had no idea what was going to happen next. And nothing is made easy for the two main heroines. Due to Saber's unique position, and Sakura's, well, personality, they have to struggle through.

    Also, the pairing is Sakura/Saber, since OP didn't list one.

    One thing I didn't really like or get into was Shirou's fate. Basically, what the author continues to do to him, though I think he plays some role later on in the story.

    Ilya is pretty fucked up in this.

    So final, 5/5.
     
  4. DemonicInfluence

    DemonicInfluence Fourth Year

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    I'll third the opinions in those two posts. This story is quite entertaining, especially since it doesn't have Shirou play much of a role. This last chapter was a good change in that it had some action. However, I feel Sakura was a bit too inactive and just a passive observer, especially since
    she basically watched Shinji get killed
    .
     
  5. KaiDASH

    KaiDASH High Inquisitor DLP Supporter

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    Yeah but she just watched
    shinji be a complete monster to everyone
    so I think it's pretty understandable.

    Like the others, no idea what this is doing in recycling.
     
  6. Hashasheen

    Hashasheen Totally Sirius

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    Mods don't really look at this section. They probably saw an early 1-star from some douche and just put it here and never checked again.
     
  7. Jarik

    Jarik Chief Warlock

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    Another fan of here.

    My favorite FSN fic apart from In Flight (which is a crossover, only half counts). Such a good update too, after the nothing dream sequence that was last update.

    A good concept overall. A lot of scenes I've wanted to see in FSN fics appear here

    Including Shinji getting brutally fucked in front of everyone.


    I think the little background interludes from Shirou's point of view are awesome. It'll be pretty epic when he does eventually trace his whole body and go nuts.

    Overall a 4.5/5. Definitely not recycling bin material!

    Shame we'll have to wait for so long for the next one given this author's update rate.
     
  8. Dark Syaoran

    Dark Syaoran Persona 4 Admin

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    I have mixed feelings about this story. While the writing is undoubtedly good and the premise is original, I find myself struggling to care about the main characters used. People who don't mind reading stories about side characters taking the lead won't have any trouble, though, and certain bits of the story I love.

    The parts involving Shirou and Ilya - first the torture, then the strange bond that develops later on - are my favourite scenes of the story. They are the main reason I follow it.

    Edit: Moved thread from bin. Didn't even know it was there.
     
  9. Tehlaziboi

    Tehlaziboi Ninja Meido

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    ^That's the only reason I follow it. I've taken to skipping much of the chapters to read those parts so I can't give a solid review. But what I can say is that the author keeps Shirou and Ilya generally in-character. Pyschopathic loli and all.
     
  10. SmileOfTheKill

    SmileOfTheKill Magical Amber

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    It updated. Anyone else more amused by what happened with Rin than anything else?
     
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  11. Jarik

    Jarik Chief Warlock

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    I liked the chapter. The thing with Rin and Ayako was a bit cheesy - but in a good way. And somewhat believable given Rin's character - she tries to be the perfect magus, and yet is still quite sentimental.

    Still remains my favorite non-crossover FSN fic. I think unlike a lot of people, I don't have an aversion to reading fics where side characters take a main role.
     
  12. KaiDASH

    KaiDASH High Inquisitor DLP Supporter

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    I lol'd when

    Lancer got masterjacked again

    Good update!
     
  13. DemonicInfluence

    DemonicInfluence Fourth Year

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    That was pretty funny. I was hoping for more info on the Shirou and Illya sideplot, but alas.
     
  14. yak

    yak Moderator Moderator DLP Supporter

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    I just read this. I agree with Jarik, this is my favourite FSN fic. The writing is masterful, the characters are brought to life, I can't tell where canon ends and poetic licence begins, and even this fic's weakest chapter brings much insight into the motives of established canon characters who I had thought I already knew.

    5/5. Good work from Lunaludus Scribex.
     
  15. Nemrut

    Nemrut The Black Mage Prestige

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    Weird but I seem to have enjoyed this significantly less than you guys. The story focuses too much on Sakura and her misery to be truly enjoyable, especially since Sakura doesn't really do anything against it and in fact tries to keep it that way.

    However, Rider, Saber and the thing between Ilya and Shirou is certainly interesting.

    3/5 from me.
     
  16. Banta

    Banta The Chosen One DLP Supporter

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    Updated.

    Archer fucks Sakura. Independent Action indeed.
     
  17. Jarik

    Jarik Chief Warlock

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    The interaction between Illya and Archer was pretty cool too.

    Interesting to learn that the memory/dream connection between Shirou and Illya works both ways. Though instead of fostering understanding, seems to just create more resentment in Illya.

    Was funny to see Rin trying to make a variety of excuses as to why she couldn't help Sakura with her prana problems.
     
  18. KaiDASH

    KaiDASH High Inquisitor DLP Supporter

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    Fun update, I had a huge grin most of the way through.
     
  19. DemonicInfluence

    DemonicInfluence Fourth Year

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    Uh wow, this was updated. It was an infodump chapter, but I still liked it.
     
  20. SmileOfTheKill

    SmileOfTheKill Magical Amber

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    Infodump chapter? God damn. I hate how any chapter that isn't pure action is considered infodump.

    On a more serious reaction to this update.

    IT UPDATED YAY YAYAYAYAYAYA!