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Complete Unknown Relations: The Philosopher's Stone by ksomm814 - K+

Discussion in 'Almost Recommended' started by Shade Emrys, Jun 22, 2006.

  1. Shade Emrys

    Shade Emrys Third Year

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    Title:Unknown Relations: The Philosopher's Stone
    Author: ksomm814
    Rating: K+
    Genre: General/Action/Adventure
    Pairing: ???
    Chapters: 12
    Words: 65,441
    Updated: March 1, 2007
    Published: June 3, 2006
    Status: Complete

    Summary: Follow Orion Black as he enters his first year at Hogwarts and learns more than he ever imagined about his mysterious past, the scar on his forehead shaped like a lighting bolt and the boy who lived, Hayden Potter.
    Link: http://www.fanfiction.net/s/2970733/1/

    This looks like it is going to be a pretty good fic. Harry starts learning magic before he goes to Hogwarts, but he isn't too advanced like in most stories where he begins to learn magic before school starts. I really like the fact that, as of right now, Harry doesn't know that Hayden is his brother that is a definite plus, and it is the first time I have read a story where Harry's brother is the bwl and Harry doesn't know about it before Hogwarts. Overall, the story is well written and has some original ideas in it. I would rate it as a high EE.


    Sequels:


    Title: Unknown Relations: The Chamber of Secrets
    Rating: K+
    Genre: Drama/Adventure
    Chapters: 15
    Words: 69,756
    Updated: June 2, 2008
    Published: July 26, 2007
    Status: Complete
    Summary: Complete. Orion Black is back for another year at Hogwarts but his hope for a peaceful year is quickly pushed aside by a pompous Defense teacher, mysterious voices in the walls and the heir of Slytherin.
    Link: http://www.fanfiction.net/s/3682293/1/Unknown-Relations-The-Chamber-of-Secrets


    Title: Unknown Relations: The Dementors of Azkaban
    Rating: K+
    Genre: Adventure/Drama
    Chapters: 15
    Words: 72,631
    Updated: September 7, 2009
    Published: August 2, 2008
    Status: Complete
    Summary: Complete. Third year is here with another challenge:a breakout at Azkaban Prison.Orion Black must now help defend his friends, Hayden and Rose, from those who seek revenge.If only he could sort out the strange voices that come whenever Dementors are near.
    Link: http://www.fanfiction.net/s/4442327/1/Unknown-Relations-The-Dementors-of-Azkaban


    Title: Unknown Relations: The Goblet of Fire
    Rating: K+
    Genre: Adventure/Drama
    Chapters: 24
    Words: 122,806
    Updated: July 7, 2012
    Published: October 1, 2009
    Status: Complete
    Summary: With the knowledge of the family secret, Orion Black is hoping for a peaceful 4th year with no more complications. Unfortunately, it wasn't meant to be. The Triwizard Tournament has been resurrected with an invisible force set on destroying everything.
    Link: http://www.fanfiction.net/s/5414718/1/Unknown-Relations-The-Goblet-of-Fire


    Title: Unknown Relations: Order of the Phoenix
    Rating: K+
    Genre: Adventure/Drama
    Chapters: 2
    Words: 6,967
    Updated: December 17, 2012
    Published: November 1, 2012
    Status: Work in Progress
    Summary: The secret is out. Orion Black must now face that everything he's ever known is a lie but how can he when he's not ready to let go of the lie and embrace what awaites him? O.W.L. year has arrived and that suddenly seems to be the least of Orion's worries.
    Link: http://www.fanfiction.net/s/8664266/1/Unknown-Relations-Order-of-the-Phoenix



    Sidestory:

    Title: From the Journal of Hayden Potter
    Rating: K+
    Chapters: 23
    Words: 18,186
    Updated: September 22, 2011
    Published: August 28, 2006
    Status: Abandoned (?)
    Summary: From the Unknown Relations Series:Everyone knows about the boy who lived but how many actually know Hayden Potter? Here's your chance to catch a peek. What does he think about his family, school and the popular Orion Black?
    Link: http://www.fanfiction.net/s/3173990/1/From-the-Journal-of-Hayden-Potter




    Checked by Minion, March 24, 2013
    Added the rest of the series.
     
    Last edited by a moderator: Mar 24, 2013
  2. Myst

    Myst Headmaster

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    Its not a bad start. I enjoyed it. Although I hope it doesnt turn into a Pussy Harry or a Harry who lets his friends do everything.
     
  3. ip82

    ip82 Prisoner

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    Not a bad start, we'll see how it develops.
     
  4. Cell

    Cell Gunner of The Black Poison DLP Supporter

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    He's already friends with Herman,so likely it will happen.

    He likes Dumbledore and McGonagal, likewise, so there's gonna be some favoritism going on probably.
     
  5. Chilli

    Chilli Seventh Year DLP Supporter

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    Yeah, it's a good start, but the author tends to repeat whole chunks out of the PS book. I hope this doesn't last because the story has potential.
     
  6. razz

    razz Seventh Year

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    I thought it was kinda ... bland. It should pick up though.

    Griphook too makes the obligatory appearance. From then I just skimmed all the regurgitated canon. Orion seems to me a little bit perfect. And I got sick of all the many, many unneeded explanations.

    Still, it's good.
     
  7. coupdmain

    coupdmain First Year

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    Who is Herman? an OC? Why would Harry's friendship with him affect how he would behave in the future (later chapters).

    Now I have to read this fic just to satiate my inane curiosity about Herman.
     
  8. Shade Emrys

    Shade Emrys Third Year

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    It is Hermione. I doubt she will be a big influence on him as the sorting hat seemed to indicate that Harry would be independent in this fic.
     
  9. Lord Apophis

    Lord Apophis Professor

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    Its a good start, I cant really say anymore as not much has happened.
     
  10. Mordecai

    Mordecai Drunken Scotsman –§ Prestigious §– DLP Supporter

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    liking it so far
     
  11. coupdmain

    coupdmain First Year

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    Err... that was obvious, I guess my arcane sense of humor is too weird to be understood by normal human beings... :D...
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    Yes TYPOS are a part of the online world... [is a self proclaimed typo king]
     
  12. TheIllusiveOne

    TheIllusiveOne Raptured to Hell

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    This has to be the corniest characterzation of Harry I've ever seen in my entire life.

    *Bitch slaps Harry*
     
    Last edited: Jun 23, 2006
  13. Vir

    Vir Centauri Ambassador ~ Prestige ~ DLP Supporter

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    Perhaps it would be interesting to have placed Harry not in Gryffindor...
     
  14. Athenia

    Athenia Groundskeeper

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    This looks like it might very well turn out to be just a copy of SS with a different name for Harry and Neville instead of Ron.
     
  15. KANE

    KANE Groundskeeper

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    I think it has potential at the minute, but if the author keeps going the way they are at the minute then the story is going to go downhill quickly. So far, there doesn't seem to be any severe twist in plot-line, just in characters.
     
  16. zblueblur0

    zblueblur0 Raptured to Hell

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    good story it had great potential i like it mite be able to become big.
     
  17. Sanctimonius

    Sanctimonius Guest

    i like the story but the writing is lacking... it's more of a narative then anything. Like my dear English teacher always used to say... "Show, Don't Tell!"

    Although spit usually flew from her mouth when she said it... maybe the reason I didn't pick up on it till the end of that year.
     
  18. Memory King

    Memory King Order Member DLP Supporter

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    I like this story quite a lot. It's somewhat of a canon copy through the first few chapters, up until the Dragon sequence. The end of the first story is quite interesting, however. The author's take on CoS is pretty good, and I think it will only get better.

    4.5/5, if only because it's the only story in this genre I'm actively following.
     
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