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Complete Victory Day by karatemaster101 - T - HP/Hunger Games

Discussion in 'Almost Recommended' started by Nerdman3000, Mar 30, 2015.

  1. Nerdman3000

    Nerdman3000 Seventh Year

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    Title: Victory Day (Harry Potter/Hunger Games)
    Author: karatemaster101
    Rating: T
    Genre: Adventure/Suspense
    DLP-Category: The Alternates
    Chapters: 1
    Words: 6,210
    Summary: Tom Marvolo Riddle is reaped. The Capitol doesn't stand a chance.

    https://www.fanfiction.net/s/10531157/1/Victory-Day

    I stumbled on this oneshot crossover today, and immediately put it up for review in the library. It follows Tom Riddle if he had been born with all his powers in the Hunger Games universe, and tells his rise to power.
     
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  2. Poly

    Poly First Year

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    Riddle is OP, thus all suspense is lost. The prose is simplistic and tries too hard to come off as dramatic. The fic is therefore ridiculous. 1/5
     
  3. T3t

    T3t Purple Beast of DLP ~ Prestige ~ DLP Supporter

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    This passes the minimum standard of not making numerous serious spelling/grammar mistakes, but that's about it.
     
  4. noura62442

    noura62442 First Year

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    This fic is kind of pointless. I suppose it's supposed to show Riddle being a mastermind and taking over the Capitol and all but the way he does it is kind of riddiculous. Also, it just feels cartoonish as fuck the way anyone so much as looks at him dies stupidly. He's just this all powerful god who is also apparently charming and intelligent although I can't actually see any of that myself. So yeah my rating would be 2/5 I suppose.
     
  5. Hachi

    Hachi Death Eater

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    Utterly predictable plot, and the writing is far from fluid.

    2/5, and I'm being nice.
     
  6. Bramastra

    Bramastra Groundskeeper

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    The actual definition of a time waster is this 3/5
     
  7. crimson sun06

    crimson sun06 Order Member

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    Magic has no place in the Hunger Games Universe and that is reason enough to stay away from it.
     
  8. Newcomb

    Newcomb Minister of Magic

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    Seeing the comments, I was prepared for this to be a lot worse than it actually was. The writing is actually pretty solid. A nice opening line, for example:
    And a nice bit here:
    The writing has a kind of simplicity and directness that appeals to me.

    However, as others have noted, making Riddle that powerful makes it completely predictable and devoid of suspense. I realize the way he won the games was supposed to be an anticlimax, but I wasn't laughing. The narrative called it stupid, and it was stupid, but not in an enjoyable way.

    2/5 - Writer has chops, but this was stuck in no-man's land between a crackfic and something serious, and that killed it.
     
  9. Republic

    Republic The Snow Queen –§ Prestigious §– DLP Supporter

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    There are several OP!Riddle one-shots that are well received on DLP. I myself enjoy a skewed fic if the premise makes sense. And here it does.

    The first part of the fic was magnificent. The middle part, with the games themselves, was okay. The ending, not very good.

    3/5
     
  10. Drunken dark lord

    Drunken dark lord First Year

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    Really?
    Any links would be very appreciated
     
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