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WIP Wolf by Damon Blade - M

Discussion in 'Trash Bin' started by Matian, May 6, 2009.

  1. Matian

    Matian Seventh Year DLP Supporter

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    Title: Wolf
    Author: Damon Blade
    Rating: M mature
    Genre: General/adventure
    Pairing: Harry/Tonks
    Status: Work in Progress
    Summary: Before Harry entered Hogwarts he accidently turned into his animagus form and was stuck. Living in the woods afterwards, a young Auror, Tonks, finds him.
    Link: Story

    I really enjoy this story (obviously or I would not have put it up for review) and find the idea of Harry stuck in his animagus form interesting. Damon Blade is also the author of The Rise of the Dragon Lords. It easy to see he has improved from some his earlier work.

    Enjoy
     
  2. Kai Shek

    Kai Shek Supreme Mugwump

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    Author isn't very good at structuring sentences... and doesn't seem to know when to put a comma in. I couldn't get past the first page.

    1/5 unreadable

    Those are the first three sections.

    Author loves his runon sentences.
     
    Last edited: May 6, 2009
  3. Koalas

    Koalas First Year ~ Prestige ~ DLP Supporter

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    ...Um how to put this. This is his improved work? It's somewhat coherent, but the number of basic spelling and grammar mistakes is atrocious. Added together with the sheer stupid that is the opening chapter, I don't think I'll be reading this anytime soon.
     
  4. ZeroTheDestroyer

    ZeroTheDestroyer Auror

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    It looks like the author is a Legend of Zelda Twilight Princess Fan, why didn't he just make a cross over with Wolf Link and HP and save the time of explaining all these wolf powers?

    I wouldn't have minded so much if the story was kept more simple. Magical wolf my arse.
     
  5. Matian

    Matian Seventh Year DLP Supporter

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    Well in Damon Blade's defense, Harry/Tonks stories are rather slim pickings (given the awesomeness that is Harry/Ginny and slash still dominates the various sites) so I thought this might be something.

    My thoughts were wrong, I take it?

    Meh, I tried.
     
  6. Psychotic Cat

    Psychotic Cat Chief Warlock

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    No matter what the ship, bad fics are bad.

    Understanding this is what seperates us from the masses who'll read anything so long as it follows their rules about who are and aren't 'Soulmates of Lovedestinymagic'
     
  7. Koalas

    Koalas First Year ~ Prestige ~ DLP Supporter

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    A good pairing is like a cherry on top of the fanfiction sundae. You can add all the cherries you want but bad is still bad and shit is still shit.
     
  8. Matian

    Matian Seventh Year DLP Supporter

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    Okay, okay, I got it now. :)
     
  9. Koalas

    Koalas First Year ~ Prestige ~ DLP Supporter

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    It's no big problem, everyone's recommended at least one bad fic. Just enjoy the jewels the Library has to offer.
     
  10. Myduraz

    Myduraz Headmaster DLP Supporter

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    Since you mentioned that this was an improval from his earlier works, I checked those out. My eyes will never recover.

    Edit: 1/5
     
  11. Hashasheen

    Hashasheen Half-Blood Prince

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    This was crap, and frankly doesn't deserve the 1 star. You meant well though, and its the thought that counts. Try looking through the library for what DLP usually accepts as good quality.:)
     
  12. Captain Trips

    Captain Trips High Inquisitor

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    Read this fic some time ago and I did not like it then, I do not like it now either. Lowest rating from me 1/5
     
  13. deathinapinkboa

    deathinapinkboa Minister of Magic

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    I don't have time to read it, but will someone please tell me what stupid animmal he turns into. I'm almost interested.

    Edit: Read the title...me thinks this might be a bit of forshadowing. Never mind about my request.
     
  14. DamienIon

    DamienIon Second Year

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    He turns into some shadow wolf thing, its the wolf from Zelda The Twilight Princess, moves through shadows, controls shadows, that sort of thing, it's unoriginal
     
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