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WIP Worlds Frozen by FirstSelector - M - Dresden Files/Frozen

Discussion in 'Almost Recommended' started by Aekiel, Apr 12, 2015.

  1. Aekiel

    Aekiel Angle of Mispeling ~ Prestige ~ DLP Supporter

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    Title: Worlds Frozen
    Author: FirstSelector
    Rating: M
    Genre: Adventure/Fantasy
    Fandom: Dresden Files/Frozen
    Pairings: Harry/Elsa
    Summary: Harry Dresden knows a thing or two about Winter and its Queens, but his expertise is put to the test when Mab sends him into an alternate reality and he meets Elsa, Queen of Arendelle. When her peaceful nation becomes the backdrop for kidnappings and murder, Harry and Elsa will have to solve the mystery surrounded by people who don't know the meaning of "private investigator."
    Link: https://www.fanfiction.net/s/10531923/1/Worlds-Frozen

    This was recced in the Almost Recommended thread a while back, but I think it's got to the point where it deserves its own thread.

    There are a few problems with the fic, such as the wooden manner of Harry's speech and the overly formal language at times, the author has pegged Elsa's character pretty damn well. There's also the fairly rushed method of moving Harry to a new universe and the distinctly un-Unseelie faeries.

    But for all the faults it does a great job of mixing Elsa's magic into the Dresden Files system, has an interesting plot and the characterisation of the Frozen characters are spot on. It also has some realistic complications for the characters, including Harry not being universally liked by the main Frozen cast.

    All in all I'd give it a 4/5.
     
  2. DemonicInfluence

    DemonicInfluence Fourth Year

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    This was pretty good. The first few chapters made no sense. The writing was just bad there. However the story seems to have gotten its stride in the last few chapters. Like Aekiel said, the way they merged the magic is pretty cool.

    4/5
     
  3. Rhys

    Rhys High Inquisitor

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    In my opinion, the magic merge was a really unpleasant mix. A system that encourages a lot of responsibility and guilt is not the sort of thing I like to see Elsa sucked into. I pushed through for a while, but eventually it just became unreadably ugh. 2/5.
     
  4. joshuafaramir

    joshuafaramir Banned

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    I like this. The merge was interesting and I wonder who Elsa actually is in relation to Mab. Is she who Mab was when she was human? Is Arendelle in Nevernever?

    As for romance, I could see Elsa getting interested in Harry as well as a possible romantic interest. Loneliness is a great motivator after all. 3.5/5 rounded to 4/5
     
  5. Zeelthor

    Zeelthor Scissor Me Timbers

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    I read it before and didn't really like it. I think it was the dialogue that didn't quite click for me. It felt stiff and lifeless.

    Edit: Dresden's character doesn't sound right four chapters in nothing's happened to interest me even a little bit.

    3/5 for functional but dull writing.
     
    Last edited: Apr 20, 2015
  6. Russano

    Russano Disappeared

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    Doesn't capture Dresden's voice but I liked it. 4/5
     
    Last edited: Apr 22, 2015
  7. Kensington

    Kensington Denarii Host DLP Supporter

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    I found this story interesting and fun to follow, although I'll agree with everyone else and state that Dresden dialogue didn't feel natural.

    However, the flow of the writing itself felt stilted to me. There were poor POV changes and sentences that did not read correctly to me.

    3/5 - I like the story but don't love it.
     
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