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Oneshot You Meet in Paris by enembee - T

Discussion in 'Romance' started by enembee, Jul 4, 2019.

  1. enembee

    enembee The Nicromancer DLP Supporter

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    Title: You Meet in Paris
    Author: enembee
    Rating: T
    Genre: Romance
    Status: Complete
    Library Category: Romance
    Pairings: Harry Potter / Gabrielle Delacour
    Summary: ...and she eclipses the sun. A short story.
    Link: FFNet

    I'll write a bit of a longer summary here for the DLP mandem than I provided on the old FFNet. Essentially this was my attempt at writing a canonical post-DH romance (ignoring, of course, the epilogue). Harry, in second person, meets Gabrielle at a party in Paris, and begins a love story that spans decades. Honestly, it's a bit artsy, and you're probably better off reading it than I am trying to explain it to you.

    Reviews on FFNet make my tiny, blackened heart swell ever so slightly.
    Checked by Sorrows 05/08/2019
     
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  2. Sorrows

    Sorrows Queen of the Flamingos Moderator DLP Gold Supporter

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    It seems our own personal troll has farted out a few more reviews.
     
  3. enembee

    enembee The Nicromancer DLP Supporter

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    Can't say they don't have my measure.
     
  4. Hawkin

    Hawkin Minister of Magic

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    Done, 5/5
     
  5. Only Darkness

    Only Darkness Squib

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    The second person POV took some getting used to, but the story is excellently written with a hazy feel to it that is utterly enchanting!
     
  6. The-Hyphenated-One

    The-Hyphenated-One Chief Warlock DLP Supporter

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    Thoroughly enjoyed it, well done.
     
  7. TMD

    TMD Professor DLP Supporter

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    Beautiful prose, tightly and concisely written and yet the imagery is still noticeably evocative. 5/5.
     
  8. Barzûl

    Barzûl Third Year DLP Supporter DLP Silver Supporter

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    Tightly written, very few issues with the writing, I was entranced throughout.
    5/5
     
  9. KyleisI

    KyleisI Muggle

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    Love it. Brilliantly written, great characterisation, the 2nd person POV adds something really amazing to it, no weird spelling or grammar mistakes, a pairing I'm not used to but why the hell not. Bottom line, it's a masterpiec
     
  10. Miner

    Miner Auror

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    It's an excellent love story, filled with elegant prose and a very unique style that screams aristocratic. And in that, it was very much an enjoyable piece.

    I just couldn't help but find fault with its status as a Harry Potter fanfic. Harry never really felt like Harry, and the world upon which the story was built, aside from brief mentions of familiar names, didn't really feel like Harry Potter. It was almost as if I was reading a sort of star-crossed lovers tragedy that never really meshed well with the magic side of things. The magic can enable scenes, such as Harry's constant, near instantaneous travel or his eternal youth, but ultimately, I didn't feel as if magic played quite the part that I thought it would play in a Harry Potter story.
     
  11. Bobika

    Bobika Second Year

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    A beauty, truly.

    I love the idea of letting us walk through an entire (or not that entire) life story in a one-shot. It makes you feel the everyday monotony of the years passing in the background, and makes the defining moments shine against it brightly.

    Excellently and beautifully executed. An easy 5/5.
     
  12. Limetrix

    Limetrix Squib

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    Amazing work. The second person pov really worked out. The constant repetition of certain phrases highlighted the differences perfectly. The prose was beautiful to read through. I've read this piece of work at least five times.


    5/5 Real quality content.