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Janus
11-14-2008, 04:04 AM
Title: Reload
Author: Case13
Rating: M
Fandom: Naruto
Chapters: 11
Words: 155,413
Updated: September 22, 2009
Published: April 27, 2008

Summary: They've been there. They've done that. And they didn't even get a shirt to prove it. Reload - because sometimes things are just as they seem to be, and at times they are even more.
Link: http://www.fanfiction.net/s/4203131/1/Reload

Probably the best Time Travel fic I've come across, simply by the fact that it is being attacked from a refreshingly new angle by an excellent author. Some of the later chapters fall a bit flat, but the others more than make up for them. The characterization is excellent.

There's more to say about this fic, but I'll let others do the talking.

5/5


Checked: June 11, 2012

AntiChrist
11-14-2008, 04:09 AM
Like many of Fosfor's stories, they start off excellent with fresh and brilliant ideas, but as it goes on, it seems to run out of steam somewhat. The later chapters have grown a bit too disjointed for my liking, but it is nevertheless an excellent story.

Janus
11-14-2008, 04:11 AM
Fosfor?

I agree about the previous chapter or so, but the newest one seems to be back on track. xD What a fight scene!

AntiChrist
11-14-2008, 04:17 AM
Fosfor is Case13's forum name on The Fanfiction Forum, and it's what he prefers to be called I think. Not positive on that though.

I do agree that the fight scene was nice, but there were some spots where I thought there were some issues with the flow.

Lhefriel_Medies
11-16-2008, 04:30 PM
I think that this is a excellent idea, and a fairly good execution, but after reading through the first 5 chapters, I have yet to see a point. The sandbox is interesting, and while it is entertaining to see the two play around in it, in the middle of the first arc, the reader still has on idea as to the reasoning behind the whole thing. I realize that there's still a sizable portion left for me to finish, but it just doesn't seem to me like the author is even bothering to establish even a skeleton of a plot. And this is a massive amount of text for purely exposition.

The only compliment I really have for it, though, is that Naruto and Sasuke's behavior is much more as to what should be expect of two adults thrown back in time with their minds intact, with the world as their oyster; no angst necessary as a motivational measure. And while this comprises the bulk of the story, for the most part, with just this, thew whole story just strikes me as cheap entertainment.

Why did they go back in time? How did they go back in time? Are they actually here to do something? Or is this just going to be a continuous passage of their lives? The perspective is certainly refreshing, but I'd like to have more to go on than just character dynamics. That much respect to the reader, at least?

Immolo
11-16-2008, 05:35 PM
I think that this is a excellent idea, and a fairly good execution, but after reading through the first 5 chapters, I have yet to see a point. The sandbox is interesting, and while it is entertaining to see the two play around in it, in the middle of the first arc, the reader still has on idea as to the reasoning behind the whole thing. I realize that there's still a sizable portion left for me to finish, but it just doesn't seem to me like the author is even bothering to establish even a skeleton of a plot. And this is a massive amount of text for purely exposition.

The only compliment I really have for it, though, is that Naruto and Sasuke's behavior is much more as to what should be expect of two adults thrown back in time with their minds intact, with the world as their oyster; no angst necessary as a motivational measure. And while this comprises the bulk of the story, for the most part, with just this, thew whole story just strikes me as cheap entertainment.

Why did they go back in time? How did they go back in time? Are they actually here to do something? Or is this just going to be a continuous passage of their lives? The perspective is certainly refreshing, but I'd like to have more to go on than just character dynamics. That much respect to the reader, at least?
This story is Fosfor's stress relief.

Howdy
11-16-2008, 06:23 PM
I started reading this, but gender-confused!Sasuke is a little too much for me.

And I have no idea what is going on.

Hadoren
11-16-2008, 07:09 PM
And I have no idea what is going on.
This.

My main gripe about Fosfor's stories. I never understand what's happening.

For example. Itachi's battle with Sasuke. First this "bee" girl comes out and leads him to Sasuke, before disappearing. Weird.

Then Sasuke throws an illusion.

That I get.

Then
"You are, indeed, Uchiha." She leaned back with a sigh, looking out the window at the full moon. "Looking but not seeing anything."

Itachi blinked as the woman on the throne seemed to simple shimmer and dissolve into moonlight.

Itachi's eyes widened a fraction.

'Another illusion? But-' He blinked, before nodding slowly.

"I see." He murmured thoughtfully, looking at the empty throne for along moment, before finally turning to the silhouette standing behind him. "To mistake the reflection of the moon for the real thing..." The corner of his lisp twitched a bit as the wheels of the sharingan spun faster, and the woman beside him fell apart into swirling petals that vanished a moment later. "I am not so immature as to bark at the reflection either." He turned to the throne, looking at the pale silhouette.What the fuck. An illusion created by the moon? Or an illusion of the moon? I don't know.

Then apparently Itachi's an illusion.

Then Sasuke throws another illusion. Hard to tell, but I can get that.

Then there's some dialogue, I think about Madara. Except it's all metaphor and allusion and I'm reading fanfiction here not "The Sound and the Fury" and I don't want to spend five minutes figuring out what the fuck the dialogue is about.
"To be honest, I have no interest in a bunch of blind led by a one-eyed shadow." She waved her hand dismissively.

The corners of Itachi's lips twitched a bit, a faint smile appearing on his face.

"They say that in the land of the blind, the one-eyed man is king." He said mildly.

"King?" She chuckled mockingly. "Then the realm he rules is poor indeed, yet so very fitting - filled with nothing but the blind and easily misled."

"Should I take it as an answer to my question?" The renegade asked, rising an eyebrow questioningly.

It was, to Sasuke's amusement, the single most expressive grimace Itachi made, even counting the faint smile form before. Itachi was weird that way. But then, so was she. That was precisely why she preferred to smile anyway.

"I don't know." A faint look of amusement grew predatory, the unnaturally long canines glinting in the candle light. "Should you?"

The other Uchiha looked for a long moment, before blinking once.

"I see." He said calmly, nodding and closing his eyes briefly. "Then there is no other way at this point." Despite the deadpan disappointment, there was a faintest trace of a pleased note in the man's voice. If she had to guess, she would even hazard as to why.Then Itachi uses Tsukuyomi, and it doesn't work. But the description is confusing beyond belief. Like here."You..." Itachi's eyes widened a fraction as the woman's voice came from under the dripping blood. With a wet squelch, the fluid coalesced, against all laws of physics, flowing and forming an undeniably feminine silhouette. "who is little more than a puppet eaten alive by his own strengths, who doesn't even know the deeper arcana of his art...!" the raven strands, still wet with blood, scattered around her, showering the water with droplets of red that started to dissolve, lending water their crimson hue.Afterwards Itachi is trapped in the Tsukuyomi, and he undoes it.

And then comes the mindfuck.
The Mangekyo spun once, the illusionary world of Tsukuyomi sliding away like a curtain, revealing the moonlit chamber.

The woman said nothing, still sitting in the very same position as before.

"Fu fu fu..." The fangs glinted in a lazy smirk. "Do you really?"

Itachi blinked, before strangling a scream as his eyes started burning with pain, followed by his body.

"Illusions..." he struggled for breath, even as he fellt o his knee before the stone throne. "can't...!"

"Actually, they can but in your case, you were dead the moment you came here." The elegant hand reached and the overpowering smell of cherries hit Itachi again, mingling with soft tones of the strangely familiar song yet again. Itachi looked upwards at the smiling silhouette, with hair like raven's feathers pouring the alcohol to the kunoichiís saucer yet again. "Or even before."

Itachi's knees hit the carpet of cherry blossom petals even as understanding dawned.

The Uchiha renegade stared at the pale beauty for a long moment, before his lips twitched, a strangled gasp escaping his throat. It took Sasuke a moment to understand that the bizarre sound was, of all things, laughter.

The genius bowed his head once, a small smirk on his lips.

"I see." He murmured. "My thanks, my lady. I will darken your chamber no longer. But then..." the corners of his lips twitched. "I never did in the first place, did I?"

"Hmm... who would have thought... he can learn!" The kunoichi said with genuine amusement. "You are too stiff, boy. Unless you let the sword rest it will become dull and break."

"Ah." The other Uchiha nodded. "I see."

"Instead of seeing go and do something about it. Getting laid works wonders for one's stress threshold." The kunoichi let the saucer in her hands dissolve even as Itachi fell back on the cherry blossom carpet, the Sharingan in his eyes spinning slowly.

With the last bit of his strength, his eyes darted towards the woman on the throne, the Uchiha bloodlimit piercing through paper-thin layer of illusion.

The onyx eyes looked back at him unflinchingly as the crimson faded.

"...I see now." Itachi chuckled softly, the Sharingan dying as chakra finally ran out. "Forgive my... intrusion." He whispered as the poison finally finished its job.If anybody can bother to explain what the fuck happened in that brief sequence, I'd give them a million dollars.

All I know is that Itachi lost. Sasuke was really cool. And I have no fucking clue what just happened.

That's a good description of all Fosfor's writing. Main character does something really awesome. Villain is pawned. Reader (that's me) cannot understand anything else.

Dark Syaoran
11-16-2008, 07:21 PM
Never liked this story much. Seems like all the stories I like of his never get an update while all the ones I hate get a fuckton of work.

That's life.

Janus
11-16-2008, 07:54 PM
If anybody can bother to explain what the fuck happened in that brief sequence, I'd give them a million dollars.

What, seriously? =P

All kidding aside, genjutsu fights, or any fight between two illusion masters in any genre are going to be confusing as fuck. The point is that you don't really know what's going on.

As for what happened, you need to pick up on a few little clues he left scattered around the other chapters.

First was the fact that genjutsu can be layered in his world, seperate from each other and such. Then he had the whole thing about the Sharingan being able to pick apart illusions, but hinted that it could only be done one at a time (or rather, that you dispelled the illusion you were aware of). So Sasuke has mastered all these different layers of genjutsu and such and stalls the hell out of Itachi.

Moral of the story? Sasuke used a physical illusion instead of genjutsu to kill Itachi. The flower petals weren't just decorations, they were poisonous. S/he was just waiting for them to put him down for her.

This last bit, Itachi realizes that he'd been had and just dispells everything like a regular non-Uchiha ninja would do, blowing Sasuke's illusions apart all at once. The black eyes were because Sasuke didn't have the Sharingan activated at all, maybe to make a point, maybe to conserve chakra, whatever.

"Even when it was only... a simple reversal...?" Sasuke winced a bit as a spike of migraine hit her. "...tch!"@Howdy: =P Don't give up on it man! He's not gender-confused, just gender proficient! It actually comes up later in the story. A few times at that.

AntiChrist
11-16-2008, 10:35 PM
I actually like the fact that sometimes I have to reread a section a few times to understand it completely. It makes it more interesting for me, and gives the story reread value because I'll notice something new each time.

Janus
11-16-2008, 11:53 PM
^^; Ditto. Genjutsu fights are tough to write, and despite barely understanding what went on that one left me with a sense of awesome. I aspire to do that one day as well. >>

Wildfeather
11-20-2008, 05:55 PM
This story makes me think that Joker!Naruto would be awesome.


Other then that, there's a bit too much buddy-buddying with Naruto and Sasuke for me to really enjoy it, especially since we don't have a reason why they are so friendly. The standard timeline went on, so Sasuke did shove a chidori through Naruto's chest, as well as other things. I suppose that is circumvented by the whole "multiple cycles" thing but...

Chime
11-20-2008, 09:25 PM
I think you have to put it the context of Naruto and Sasuke as shinobi. They may have been 'enemies' before, but they trust each other now. I imagine trust is a rare commodity among shinobi. Though I do agree it's irksome that the author hasn't explained how Naruto can accept the past like it is, it may simply be because Naruto doesn't care. They were brats when it happened.

This is actually my least favorite Case13 story (in terms of plot and characterization, this story is rather weak in comparison to his other stuff), too, though I do enjoy it when he updates.

vinais
11-21-2008, 01:54 AM
^^; Ditto. Genjutsu fights are tough to write, and despite barely understanding what went on that one left me with a sense of awesome.


Agreed, Had to read that fight three times to barely follow what was going on. Still loved it. The Naruto fight however, was on a totally different level, especially when Tsunade got involved! 5/5 from me ;)

Janus
11-21-2008, 03:29 AM
I think you have to put it the context of Naruto and Sasuke as shinobi. They may have been 'enemies' before, but they trust each other now. I imagine trust is a rare commodity among shinobi. Though I do agree it's irksome that the author hasn't explained how Naruto can accept the past like it is, it may simply be because Naruto doesn't care. They were brats when it happened.

This is actually my least favorite Case13 story (in terms of plot and characterization, this story is rather weak in comparison to his other stuff), too, though I do enjoy it when he updates.

I think its more straight forward than that. Sasuke lays it out in the first chapter.

"...yeah. Jealous. Sure." Naruto rolled his eyes. "Why am I friends with you again?"

"For the same reason I'm with you. We didn't have any fucking choice."

I get the feeling that this has been going on for a very long time now. Sasuke mentions spending several resets doing nothing but learning Taijutsu from Gai, and Naruto mentions Sasuke spending several more moping until the miko thing pulls him out of it. Add this to all the others that are implied, ad the fact that each individual "lifetime" may actually be that, and we could be looking at a very long time indeed. (Side Note: Groundhog Day is said to have lasted 10 years, though most fans and about half the film crew suspect it would have had to be a great deal longer. And that was just one day. >>)

Case13 is essentially going about his usual style in backwards order. Nothing is explained between Naruto and Sasuke because nothing needs to be explained between them. They know each other far better than anyone possibly could, so much so that they have started coming back around the bend and are getting exasperated when one or the other still hasn't changed their ways. We're getting the character development in much smaller doses than in something like The Art of the Deal.


Agreed, Had to read that fight three times to barely follow what was going on. Still loved it. The Naruto fight however, was on a totally different level, especially when Tsunade got involved! 5/5 from me ;)

xD I think we can all agree Naruto's fight was entertaining.

O_O And let the nay-sayers be shot and gutted with butter knives!

Paravon
11-21-2008, 03:11 PM
Are you all reading a different story? The week-long resets began before any major events happen in the Naruto time-line.

No invasion, no Chidori through the chest, none of that. The reason they know about everything is only because they have had an unlimited time to systematically explore their world, with no consequences beyond one week.

At the most, the Wave mission may have happened.

aledeth
11-21-2008, 06:38 PM
Are you all reading a different story? The week-long resets began before any major events happen in the Naruto time-line.

No invasion, no Chidori through the chest, none of that. The reason they know about everything is only because they have had an unlimited time to systematically explore their world, with no consequences beyond one week.

At the most, the Wave mission may have happened.

Case13 said the resets last several months on average. Length can vary, but rarely does. And if Naruto and/or Sasuke die, they respawn next reset. What they don't know is that the resets have ended for whatever reason. This is their reality now, and they are happily making a huge mess out of it.

Janus
11-22-2008, 01:23 AM
Yeah, they've already been in the current reset for longer than a week. Its definately more time than that.

Paravon
11-22-2008, 01:52 AM
Huh, I was under the impression that they were under a strict time constraint.

Could someone point me to where its stated.

Karnath
11-22-2008, 02:20 AM
The resets generally last 3 months, sometimes more sometimes less. There are no more resets, they don't know this and they are in for a rude shock when they realize this. Case13 (aka Fosfor) stated this on Hawk's The Fanfiction Forum where he posts chapters of his stories first along with numerous other stories of his that can't be found anywhere else, including several interesting Harry Potter crossovers.

Mercenary
11-22-2008, 04:50 AM
He's pretty much said that the resets used to have varying lentghs. He's changed that now to as others have said, 3 months. So far I think its been about a month, month and a half on the current and final reset. A rude awakening is about to happen after the 3 month point is crossed.

Janus
11-22-2008, 06:40 AM
Case13 (aka Fosfor) stated this on Hawk's The Fanfiction Forum where he posts chapters of his stories first

Speaking of which... *points at the Chapter 10 thread at such forum*

Paravon
11-22-2008, 07:00 AM
Karnath; Mercenary: Thanks, I thought he had mentioned it in-story.

Janus
11-22-2008, 08:42 AM
*Blinks rapidly at the vast wealth of stories on FFF by Fosfor.*

Is there anywhere these are actually set down without having to go slogging through the threads? 'Cause most of em aren't on ffnet

Karnath
11-22-2008, 11:09 AM
Only there, he isn't fond of the reviewers on ff.net or ficwad, to many have asked stupid questions he had already answered in AN's.

Mercenary
11-22-2008, 06:38 PM
*Blinks rapidly at the vast wealth of stories on FFF by Fosfor.*

Is there anywhere these are actually set down without having to go slogging through the threads? 'Cause most of em aren't on ffnet

Sorry not really. I dont think he's really put them any where else... also

^^ I think we all understood 'vert.

I'm terribly curious how long the resets have been going on, we were having a discussion on another forum about it and everyone seemed to have different ideas.

EDIT: Crap almighty, this was my first post on these forums? o_o /endlurk I guess...
Over 30 years.
Well over 30 years. As to why the resets stopped... why, it could be anything and everytihng from a nova exploding in a galaxy long, long ago and far, far away to Naruto having vegetarian Ramen for dinner at midnight with chopsticks made fomr rubies and bowl made form Orochimaru's skull for a change. Possibilities are.. endless.

From the TFF forums.

Janus
11-23-2008, 12:53 AM
*Stares at you for a moment, waiting for you to realize that Janus and Jansviper might have something in common beyond the first three letters.*

*Especially what with the surprising and timely coincidence of this issue coming up in the thread right after one mentions it.*

Mercenary
11-23-2008, 01:12 AM
... I dont like you anymore.

Wildfeather
11-23-2008, 01:36 AM
Can I get a link to TFF? My google-fu is weak, and I can't seem to get anything even close to what I think I should be looking for...

Vesvius
11-23-2008, 01:38 AM
Ooohh, we talking about Case13 stories? Cool. I've been reading Fosfor's work for a while now, and despite the typos, errors, and occassional WTF moment, his stuff has been consistantly awesome.

Reload is good, but I think it's only third best of his Naruto stories. I suggest anyone who hasen't go and look at Art of the Deal and Wolf in Sheep's Clothing. To get to them, go to Fosfor's profile and find all topics by him. I think Wolf in Sheeps Clothing has 8 or 9 chapters, while Art of the Deal has 4. Art of the Deal can also be found on his Case13 account (I think), but WiSC can only be found on TFF. Sorry bout that.

On topic, Reload is good, but seemed to lose a chunk of momentum to me after chapter six or seven (I forget which. It was the one with them destroying a crime lord's house and Sasuke pretending to be an Uchiha Ghost). Probably because he's gotten more into plot then the pure crack story from before.

I'm going to give this a solid 4/5.

Final Note: I think there's a Lemon between Naruto and Fem!Sasuke on TFF in the Lemon Section. Take that as you will.

Ninja Edit: http://z14.invisionfree.com/The_Fanfiction_Forum/index.php. TFF is there, but you've gotta register. It only takes a few seconds though.

Mercenary
11-23-2008, 01:40 AM
Can I get a link to TFF? My google-fu is weak, and I can't seem to get anything even close to what I think I should be looking for...

The Fanfiction Forum (http://z14.invisionfree.com/The_Fanfiction_Forum/index.php?act=idx)


Also his Bleach/Naruto cross isnt too bad either though some might not like it...

His fateless vs canon thread/idea is pretty good imo.

Janus
11-23-2008, 02:33 AM
... I dont like you anymore.

*Throws his hands into the air and cackles madly.*

Can I get a link to TFF? My google-fu is weak, and I can't seem to get anything even close to what I think I should be looking for...

Unfortunately, its on an invision board. Google won't find it the bloody thing very easily.

Not that it matters when people are willing to provide the link, but just looking for it can be a pain.

go and look at ... Wolf in Sheep's Clothing.

This, is an awesome fic, which I will be linking the moment I have finished it.

Truly Awesome.

Don't believe me? Genjutsu using kittens.

Yes, he went there.

Fosfor
12-15-2008, 05:34 AM
Never liked this story much. Seems like all the stories I like of his never get an update while all the ones I hate get a fuckton of work.

That's life.


You should have said something then. Currently I lack time to write for pleasure, what with two jobs and finalizing my thesis and all, but I am open to requests. Though I might not get to it right away it will certainly jolt my memory a little to keep it mind the next time I write anything.

Bucks
12-15-2008, 08:33 AM
I started reading this, but gender-confused!Sasuke is a little too much for me.

This to me is what made the fic so interesting in the first place. It is, so far the only Sasuke that doesn't want to make me rip out a trachea or two.

I'm actually starting to lose a little interest in the fic due to later chapters. It feels like it lost it's lightheartedness. You know, something you can giggle to every time you read it.

A solid 4/5 for me.

Cxjenious
12-15-2008, 10:58 AM
Crimson Edge is by far my favorite of Fosfor's works. *hint*hint*

Calis Clayr
12-15-2008, 01:44 PM
Well, if we're hinting...

I still can't decide which one I like the most, but a new chapter of Livewire or Operator would be great.:)

Loki
12-15-2008, 03:42 PM
Yep, an update on Crimson Edge would be pretty sweet.

AntiChrist
12-15-2008, 11:23 PM
Actually, my favorite story by Fosfor would probably have to be Stray Cat Strut, because I have never seen anything even remotely like it in Bleach fanfiction and it's writing style appeals to me a lot more.

Kalas
12-16-2008, 04:34 PM
The Art of the Deal. Possibly the most original piece of Naruto fanfiction ever. That is all.

Ksai
12-16-2008, 05:11 PM
The Art of the Deal. Possibly the most original piece of Naruto fanfiction ever. That is all.
quoted for truth.

One of the most original ff in Naruto fandom.

Khortez
12-16-2008, 06:54 PM
Stray Cat Strut. It is perhaps one of the better Bleach fics I've read, plus it has more side characters that don't get much screen time in most fics.

Vesvius
12-21-2008, 03:48 AM
Wolf in Sheep's Clothing.

And he left a cliffhanger!

But Art of the Deal and Livewire are the next best, with Reload behind them and everything else way back.

Apothem
12-21-2008, 11:43 AM
Fosfor is... Meh.

He's like a slightly worse version of Kraken's Ghost, with ten million more stories that will never see another update.

His writing is just as, if not more confusing, and you'll be halfway through a fic of his before something else happens and you have to go reread the entire fic, desperately trying to figure out just when the hell those events occured.

This fic is alright, just like it's author. Nothing more, nothing less.

Fosfor
12-22-2008, 09:33 AM
Fosfor is... Meh.

He's like a slightly worse version of Kraken's Ghost, with ten million more stories that will never see another update.

His writing is just as, if not more confusing, and you'll be halfway through a fic of his before something else happens and you have to go reread the entire fic, desperately trying to figure out just when the hell those events occured.

This fic is alright, just like it's author. Nothing more, nothing less.


Being compared to Kraken's Ghost... what oh what shall I do! It is so... huh, wait, actually, you paid me a compliment. Imagine that.

Seriously though, some of us have other things than fanfiction to worry about, like a job for example. Also, aside form Reload, which is crytpic and strange most of the time simply because I have fun with it, most people don't have such a huge problem you seem to have with my fics. Though maybe that's because they don't like all of their plot to be served on a silver platter right from the chapter one with a complete guide and a map.

Bottom line is, fanfiction is just a diversion for me, so don't expect me to devote my every waking moment to it. I write what I want, when I want and how I want. I am not going to please everyone and I am not going to even try.

Also, a million stories never seeing an update? That's debatable. None of my stories are dead, all are being worked on. That I don't post it right away doesn't mean a thing. Take Stray Cat Strut for example - it had no update for a year, true enough. It isn't dead though and new chapters are being worked on as we speak, along with a large side-story, the same with Warborn. If you didn't know that, last time Griever and I waited until we had entire storyline of the first arc of SCS had been completed before we posted the first chapter - it is going to be the same this time around.

The Art of the Deal has a nearly finished fifth and sixth chapter I have been working on on and off for the last month. When they will be posted I have no idea. Maybe this week, maybe next month. But that doesn't mean I forgot about them and will never update. Last year had been very busy for me and I had almost no time at all to write so I did slow down quite a bit, but that's life. As I said, I am not going to devote my time solely to writing fanfics.

Chime
12-22-2008, 02:15 PM
Wow fosfor posted here...

But yeah, I think I agree, Reload is Fosfor's only story to really be "confusing" in a way... and ambiguity does help out a plot. I wish more authors were less direct with their writing.

The only problem I have with this story is it seems over the top sometimes. What with Naruto's bizarre seal abilities and Sasuke's shamelessness. I guess that's what's makes it fun though.

Ksai
12-23-2008, 12:39 AM
The Art of the Deal has a nearly finished fifth and sixth chapter I have been working on on and off for the last month.

Hug you:P

Thanks allot for this post. Very glad to hear that we will have a chance to read more of this fic.

Janus
12-23-2008, 07:47 AM
*Blinks rapidly.*

Holy crap, the captain posted on DLP? The world must be coming to an end, what with there not being a larger bunch of hecklers, elitists, bastards and all-around whiny over critical bitches than is concentrated on this site.

xP Thought you hated that sort of stuff Fosfor.

Though, while your here (if you're still here), I'm curious as to how accurate my interpretation of your genjutsu fight was. It back on the first page post... ten I believe.

AntiChrist
12-24-2008, 01:40 AM
Eh.. I actually don't think any of his stories are really that confusing. There is some foreshadowing and somewhat vague and out-there references, but it doesn't take away from the overall effect.

While I don't like Wolf, it is nice to hear that new chapters of Art of the Deal and Stray Cat Strut are in the works.

Fosfor
12-24-2008, 08:19 PM
*Blinks rapidly.*

Holy crap, the captain posted on DLP? The world must be coming to an end, what with there not being a larger bunch of hecklers, elitists, bastards and all-around whiny over critical bitches than is concentrated on this site.

xP Thought you hated that sort of stuff Fosfor.

Though, while your here (if you're still here), I'm curious as to how accurate my interpretation of your genjutsu fight was. It back on the first page post... ten I believe.

Actually, I heard that, apparently, I somehow became an arrogant, overhyped douchebag which prompted me to come along and see that curious bit of proven information for myself. Which is pretty damn amusing given I at least try to be reasonably civil, repeatedly asked to stop with the hype and rarely had been rude to anyone unless provoked or annoyed. But then internet - being the source of completely true, one hundred percent confirmed data - probably knows better than I, so who am I to argue?

Besides, I will admit to perusing DLP's library to find some good HP fics, so I thought that I should at least register.

As for your idea about the Sasuke/Itachi confrontation, it is right in most ways that matter. The rest is just me playing with that story and referencing a bunch of obscure stuff that is really only amusing for someone who is writing this horrendouly vague and convulted crackfic. As I said before, I write Reload for myself as pure stress relief and it shows in every line.

Banta
12-27-2008, 11:22 PM
Huh, cool to see Fosfor on DLP.

Anyway, as much as I enjoy most of Fosfor's works, the only story I'm actually looking forward to reading is Mirage.

Poytin
12-28-2008, 01:52 AM
I can vaguely remember all of Fosfor's stories. I know Reload because it sticks out. The others I have forgotten about and will probably reread them to remind myself of their plot when new chapters come out.

What I can say about Reload is that it is very different at least. One of the few stories that when I get that e-mail saying there was an update makes me say, "Awesome."

Janus
12-28-2008, 04:15 AM
Huh, cool to see Fosfor on DLP.

Anyway, as much as I enjoy most of Fosfor's works, the only story I'm actually looking forward to reading is Mirage.

YES! QUOTED FOR FUCKING TRUTH! XD

Jon
02-20-2009, 08:48 AM
Topic; Back on it, get to. kthx.

Reload is a joy to read, and I hope we get the next snippet for the current wip chapter soon, though no rush is required.

Karnath
02-20-2009, 10:41 AM
According to a post by Fosfor on TFF he is done with Naruto for a while and will instead be working on his Bleach stuff.

blob
05-23-2012, 04:54 PM
So, here I am, reading Reload for n-th time, and since my brain is fueled by large quantities of beer, I've decided to find out what are those guys and forum that can be found on author's notes in hope that there might be more of this shit.

Imagine my surprise when I find this page on Google, instead of TFF.


Since the last reply was 3 years ago, I thought that it's a good idea to bump up this goodness. Honestly, this must be one of the best crackfics around, and personally it tops my list of longer-than-oneshot crack. There is just so much madness and random fuckery that I can read it over and over again and never get tired. Such a shame that the author seemingly abandoned it. Frankly, it's kind of hard to write a summary about it - but it's definitely one of the fics that you really should give a chance.

(I'd also like to point out that if you disliked the Sasuke/Itachi part, there is something wrong with you)


Definitely 5/5 from me.


Also, I have a request for you guys. I've tried to register of TFF to check out his other stories which can only be found there, but the registration is closed. Since I don't want to pester the admin with such mundane shit, I would greatly appreciate it if a person who has/had an account there that he doesn't need (or hell, even if you use it - I just want to lurk) would share his login data via PM. I want to get my fix, damn it, which seems to be at all-time-low in Naruto section, and I'm fairly sure that Case13/Fosfor's work will help with it.

GiantMonkeyMan
05-23-2012, 05:34 PM
TFF essentially suffers from an absent moderator who decided one day that instead of having to deal with the occassional troll he would just ban all the offenders and stop letting people make new accounts. Upon his disappearance a few folks made an archive for all the popular TFF fics: http://z13.invisionfree.com/TFF_Archive/index.php though I'm not sure whether or not Reload has any more chapters than are present on ff.net.

Edit: Actually, immediately having said that I just realised that Reload isn't in the archive though you could ask the WizardOne to add it. Also, Case13 is known as Fosfor on TFF if you felt like reading some of his other work which is along a similar vein stylistically.

Sauce Bauss
05-23-2012, 06:22 PM
Fosfor deleted large numbers of his works from TFF before going off to some other forum. Don't expect too much out of TFF, the community has suffered these past few years.

Cruentus
05-23-2012, 09:49 PM
Which wasn't much of a loss. Fosfor's talent never seemed to really improve, he never finished anything he wrote and if you try giving him any constructive criticism he rage quits the story.

WalkingDisaster
05-29-2012, 12:13 PM
Which wasn't much of a loss. Fosfor's talent never seemed to really improve, he never finished anything he wrote and if you try giving him any constructive criticism he rage quits the story.

Meh, this. Honestly. Some years ago this fic was a 4.5... now it's a 3.5 at best, rounded down to 3 for Fosfor's terrible attitude.

Hashasheen
05-29-2012, 03:51 PM
If I remember correctly, Fosfor had some sort of problem with his writing and reading like Dyslexia that was the reason for the long times between updates, and because of that, he got really pissed off at everyone pestering him for updates. So he went "FUCK U" to everyone and took his stories off the forum. :sherlock:

Cruentus
05-30-2012, 05:06 AM
Bull shit on the updating demand part, not on the dyslexia thing, I don't know anything about that. He did get pestered every now and then, but it wasn't horrible bad, and most of the time it wasn't even straight up demands for updates it was just people stating they wished he updated faster, it would be like Sayo or Nuhu getting pissed that people like their work so much that they wished the author would update soon.

It's tragic because he had the talent to make weird crossovers and story ideas work, when otherwise it sounded like a horrible idea. That's a rare skill, even rarer when you consider the difficulty of finding good authors in the first place, I think only Gabriel and one or two DLP authors have it that I know of. It just never went anywhere, it didn't help that he kept rage quitting and then deleting his most interesting stories, as well as forbidding any copies of said fic from being passed around.

After awhile most of Fosfor's fics went like this....

Story starts with awesome premise.

Hero leaves home/Hogwarts/Konoha sometimes willingly, sometimes not.

Presumably he would return, sooner or later, but we never see that part cause he never gets there, and the one story he did get that far with he deleted and reworked and then left it near the end of the first arc of the rewrite, which took place outside of Konoha.

To date the stories he has wiped off the face of TFF include...

Child assassin Shinji, from Evangelion.

Lawful evil, which was a Naruto cross with D&D which had Naruto being turned into a devil via Kyubi dickery.

Lotus Queen, which was a megacross that featured Harry trapped in an alt dimension where he meets and falls in love with Maya from Tenjo Tenge, and is trying to find a way to regain his magic that was taken from him by Tsurouko of Love Hina , who is the Heavenly King of Suzaku, and planing on releasing something called the Hell Dragon on everybody cause she was crazy. That one also had Ranma as the king of Genbu and it was hinted that Kenshin was to be Byakko's king, but it didn't get that far. He DID got pretty far into Lotus before he dropped though, seemingly without warning too. One moment it was there and then it was just gone.

It had a side story to it that never saw the light of day that would have followed Ranma and his two generals as they searched for Tsurouko, both of which were from the X manga/anime by Clanned, also hinted that Kamui, the hero of that anime/manga, would be one of Tsurouko's generals. it was massive and he quit it for some vague reason I can't quite remember.

Then there was the last one I remember. Can't remember the name, but it was another megacross, of a sort. It was more the story starts off at the end of all the really epic shit, that featured a whole bunch of heroes from different games and anime, and what you're reading is Naruto's retirement back home, only to be roped into shinobi conflicts now. He dropped that one, if I remember right, because too many people asking too many questions.

See the pattern? He also had a bad habit of turning the characters he didn't like into OOC fucktards with overblown character failings and then ragging on them till the cow came home.

So...ya....long rant is long.

T.L.D.R: I dislike Fosfor greatly.

Trooper
05-31-2012, 05:16 AM
Lol. The final nail in the coffin for Fosfor, if I remember correctly was a person trolling him continuously. I'm pretty sure said person is a DLP member.

>_>
<_<

Can't seem to remember who though.