The Chamber Strike By evansentranced -K+ ONESHOT

[Sepanto]

Title: The Chamber Strike
Author: evansentranced
Rating: K+
Genre: Comedy/Humor
Pairing: None
Status: Complete-oneshot
Summary: Harry is sick of Umbridge and everyone pushing him around. Halfway through fifth year, he decides to Do Something about it. Completely AU, I'm sorry. I've tried to keep the characters as realistic as possible, but mostly I've just written whatever comes into my head. Read it anyway, I promise it isn't total rubbish.
Link: http://www.fanfiction.net/s/2830860/1/
My summary:
Hillarious story, finally something refreshingly new, FUNNY.

[EsperJones]

"It was the middle of the night when I enacted my plan. I quickly packed a couple sets of clothes, my toothbrush, and the stuffed Niffler Hermione bought for me. She says I'm depressed and therefore need something to cuddle with. I'm just happy she didn't decide to throw Ginny at me again."

Heh. That was a great line there.

[Dark Syaoran]

A few parts were pretty amusing but the rest was just plain stupid, not funny at all. I give it a... 'meh'.

[ip82]

A few parts were pretty amusing but the rest was just plain stupid, not funny at all. I give it a... 'meh'.

Seconded.

[darklordmike]

A few parts were pretty amusing but the rest was just plain stupid, not funny at all. I give it a... 'meh'.

Thirded.

The first half of the story was amusing, and this really could have turned into a good fic. As it stands, it's 'almost good' because of the failure in the final act.

The last 1/4 of the story reads like an absurd epilogue that was written in ten minutes while the author was on hallucinogens.

3/5

[ParseltonguePhoenix]

Ok, so I've just read this, and while I don't have much to say about the story itself...the AN at the bottom of the page is easily worth a 5/5.

A/N: So I'm just going to put this out there: This is what the wizarding world would be like if Rowling had stuck with her first year premise of 'Most wizards don't have an ounce of logic'. Because for all that she says that, I've only seen a few instances of it being true, and right now, the only one that comes to mind is Harry marrying Ginny. :D Also, it's true that Glade candles can kill birds, I wasn't just making that up. Also, this story was concocted in Las Vegas after a morning of debauchery and turkey, with my sister, transfiguredbunny.

5/5 for the AN, minus 3 points for having to read the whole story to get to it...and I'm giving this a score of 2/5.

[Scrittore]

I thought this story was hilarious for about the first half through. If it ended there, I would of easily given it a 5/5.

Lines like this made me laugh out loud:

“Oh, no sir. If sir doesn’t mind me saying, you has terrible handwriting.”

That being said, it went all downhill at the halfway mark, and continued to the end of the story. The author had a good concept going but was butchering it towards the end really (reminds me of another author ;)).

Overall, I give it a 3/5. While it's not Library worthy, it is Recycle Bin worthy.

[sangmtr]

this story was concocted in Las Vegas after a morning of debauchery and turkey, with my sister

really didn't need to know that !

[AntiChrist]

Amusing idea. The couple of grammar mistakes and the AN interjections really messed up the flow for me near the beginning. The end though was a bit WTF at some points, but it was funny regardless. 3.5/5

[Korisovra]

.....

That was different. It started to get repetitive and boring, not to mention weird by the end. I'll go with a 4/5