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Perfection by Arynia - Naruto (T)

Discussion in 'Almost Recommended' started by Oxy, Oct 11, 2010.

3.3333299160004/5, 6 votes
  1. Oxy

    Oxy Seventh Year

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    Oct 11, 2010 #1
    Title: Perfection
    Author: Arynia
    Rating: T
    Genre: Family
    DLP Category: General fics
    Pairing: None known
    Status: Work in progress
    Summary: AU: Orochimaru decides to create the perfect host by combining Akatsuki's abilities, and selects Naruto for the 'honor.' Sacrificed by the elders to appease Orochimaru, Naruto can become the greatest shinobi ever seen - or the ultimate monster.
    Link: http://www.fanfiction.net/s/5689777/1/Perfection

    A story where Naruto gains the abilities of all the Akatsuki members. However unlike most stories, this isn't a story where Naruto instantly becomes godlike. Naruto is a inexperienced child that had to grow up early due the capture by Orochimaru. The author has done a great job characterizing Naruto and has given reasonable explanations so far about everything. More over some of his OC's are the best that I've read in a long time. It is definitely a story that's worth a read.

    My only complaint so far is that he might have added a little to many OC's.

    4/5 it has potential to become 5/5
     
    Last edited: Oct 13, 2010
  2. Moridin

    Moridin Minister of Magic DLP Supporter

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    Oct 11, 2010 #2
    I found this fic a while back, but hadn't followed it up until now. From what I remember, though, this is quite an excellent fic with a lot of potential. Rereading, but a tentative 4/5 from what I remember. I agree on the characterization of Naruto, and Orochimaru seems pretty well done as well.
     
  3. Hashasheen

    Hashasheen Half-Blood Prince

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    Oct 12, 2010 #3
    Three out of Five. While there was excellent characterisation of Orochimaru and the others starting out that made 4.5/5, but how he brought in Kushina and handled her was completly annoying and somewhat ruining to the rest of the fic. The fact that the entire world seems to be after him isn't too bad, since he is like the Sage reborn. IRL countries would kill to have this guy on their payroll.
     
  4. Oxy

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    Oct 13, 2010 #4
    Good point; it has been edited.
     
  5. Iztiak

    Iztiak Prisoner DLP Supporter

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    Oct 13, 2010 #5
    The characterization of Kushina is ridiculously bad.

    The story is a bit cliche, but readable if you manage to ignore the little bits of Kohona-hate throughout the story.

    ...At least until the introduction of Kushina.

    2/5
     
  6. Yerzinia

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    Oct 27, 2010 #6
    To be fair to Arynia, she said that she didn't want to put in Kushina - it was part of the challenge that Kushina be alive, and she is trying to concentrate on Naruto and his friends now.