Luna's Hubby by Meteoricshipyards - T

[RagefulLlama]

Title: Luna's Hubby
Author: Meteoricshipyards
Rating: T
Genre: Humor/General
Pairing: Harry/Luna
Status: WIP
Summary: 7 year old Luna wants a husband, and she wants one now. With the unintended help of her befuddled father, she kidnaps Harry Potter. Idea and 1st chapter by Roscharch's Blot
Link: http://www.fanfiction.net/s/2919503/1/

[On April Third]

i like it, so far anyway.

luna has always been a favorite of mine.

[Xiph0]

I can't be arsed to read the fic, as I'm feeling a bit sick right now, but what the hell?!

[cast2007]

Pretty Funny fic. I am not a fan of Harry/Luna but this one's got me interested since the idea was made by Roscharch's Blot. I can't wait to read the rest.

[rj_stone2]

This fic is getting very good with chapter 4. I feel like we're getting the best of two worlds here--a neat, slightly off-the-wall plot idea from the Blot, and solid execution by a more grounded author. I hope he continues with this one, it seems like he's really hitting his stride.

[Dark Syaoran]

Yeah, I've been reading this since it started. I like it. The fourth chapter was a bit... out there, with them getting that Horcrux, which happened to be the cup and not the locket which baffled me since I dont know if the author did that purposely or just fucked up.

But yeah, this is good. Sree likes it as well.

[Shuujaku]

This is one of my favorite new stories, oddly enough. Too many H/L writers either turn Luna into another Hermione/Ginny mix, a sappy soulmate, or a continuous pun. Reading this younger, more grounded, but still open-minded Luna is a very nice change.

[Jolly Rancher]

But yeah, this is good. Sree likes it as well.

Heh, indeed I do, Sya. Ty for linking it to meh :P.

But yeah, this author really did Luna well, which I find most people can't do. Good story this, humor with a plot.

[ip82]

This is very nice and cute story for now, rather interesting and original as well.

The only problem is Harry's character; the little twat doesn't have any active influence on the plot whatsoever. Everything is decided either by Luna or her mother, while Harry is there just to look cute and get dragged along for the ride...

[Lunarian]

I like it, it certainly changed from when it was just a chapter, seemed total on the humor side then. Now little children are beating tommy's traps and unscathed at first. I can just imagine what HBP Harry's reaction would be.

[coupdmain]

Yeah, I've been reading this since it started. I like it. The fourth chapter was a bit... out there, with them getting that Horcrux, which happened to be the cup and not the locket which baffled me since I dont know if the author did that purposely or just fucked up.


I dont think so, but I could be wrong, remember they found the location by following the "dark thread", since the locket has already been stolen, the dark thread woudn't point to its supposed location (where voldemort placed it), but the thread would lead them to I would guess the house of Black.

This is just speculation on my part...

[Harpy Prince]

This is very nice and cute story for now, rather interesting and original as well.

The only problem is Harry's character; the little twat doesn't have any active influence on the plot whatsoever. Everything is decided either by Luna or her mother, while Harry is there just to look cute and get dragged along for the ride...
I think it's a nice breather from the usual jump into things wand blazing kind of Harry, that's uaually his character in most fics other than pussy!Harry.

I like how the fic is humorous but doesn't try to be funny all the time, the author knows when it's ok to be funny so his fic doesn't turn out like fuegodefuerza's.

[razz]

I really enjoyed this. Though, I kind of see the Harry/Luna relationship here more like incest than anything else - euck. And I don't much like the idea of keeping Harry back a year at Hogwarts ... Still, though, it's definitly a good read.

[zEROfrustration]

I like it very much as well. Good idea by the Blot man and exelent continuation from Meteoricshipyards. Luna's char is nicely done and I expect we'll see a more influential Harry as the story continues and he gains confidence in his new environment with the Lovegoods and Sirius and Remus to encourage him as well,

Can't wait for the next chapters,
zEROfrustration

[razz]

Was just updated. I'm still getting huge incest vibes, but.

I really don't think I like the idea of two people being together from that young a age - it's like they'd miss out on so many experiences. Yeah, the marriage does irk me. I wouldn't mind if they got together later, after dating other people (like, sixth year or something) but at (what was it?) five years old? It's just wrong.

The fic is coming along very nicely, though.


EDIT: Ok, Luna and Harry were seven when they first met. Slight exageration there, sorry.

[Raijin]

Was just updated. I'm still getting huge incest vibes, but.

I really don't think I like the idea of two people being together from that young a age

Eh... i don't really mind the incest thing, now no throwing sticks and stones or pitchforks at me. Though i do agree that them being so young and married is kinda dissapointing.

[ip82]

Well that's hardly an incest if they are unrelated.

No, the main problem with this story is that Luna and partially her mother are turned into complete set of Marry Sue-s. Luna is simply too perfect - smart, powerful, gifted, cute etc... All her failings from canon are negated, and only perfection is left. Harry, on the other hand, is still rather useless and could be easily replaced by Luna's teddy bear or a pet.

[Giovanni]

It was funny at first... But now the gimmick is getting old.

Harry's character needs to develop or this story is going to descend down to mediocrity.

[razz]

Well that's hardly an incest if they are unrelated.

Nuh, I meant that I think they have a rather (a lot) more brother/sister relationship over that of blossoming 'lovers'. Yeah?

[Harpy Prince]

No. Just because they can't feel sexual feelings for each other doesn't mean they can't love each other as husband and wife. It's just that their interpretation of it is not the same as that of an adult.

[Athenia]

It was funny at first... But now the gimmick is getting old.

Harry's character needs to develop or this story is going to descend down to mediocrity.


Yeah, I do think this makes a much better idea for a one-shot (or maybe even two/three chapter story) rather than some long drawn out story were they spend there childhood looking for Horcruxes through some black line and Harry seems clueless for chapter one end.

[Lord Ravenclaw]

Neat little story. Has it's problems, but funny nonetheless.

[zEROfrustration]

I like the new chapter. Nice way for Harry to save Luna's mom.

*wonders what's going to happen to Draco's character in this story*

May you find shade this day,
zEROfrustration

[ip82]

This fic is definitely gone to shit.

The first Blot's chapter was original and inovative. The new author's oppener was very good too.

But then, the author's feminist self-righteous genes started kicking in, making her gradually transform Luna and her mother into a pair of complete Marry Sue's. That tendency slowly spread to all the other characters and especially the kids, making them all completely sweet, logical, goodhearted and ultimately - dull.

One of the last charming bits left here was the way Harry and Luna were unwittingly hunting down and destroying Voldemort's Horcruxes, without even realizing what they were doing. With this latest chapter, even this cool plot has gone down the drain. Now that the adults and Unspeakables are involved, and are even able to track the Horcruxes withot Harry's help, the main characters aren't needed anymore. The author's alter-ego (Luna's mum) seems perfectly capable to take the plot over from here on.

I'll probably keep reading this, but mostly because of solid writing style and good update rate. Hopefully, the author will have good sense to end this, before it sinks even further into the dull grayness...

2.5/5

[Niffler Lord]

Yeah I'm with IP. This story had a great start but then it went down hill from there. It just feel so fake now (donno how else to describe it). Luna's character has become very un-Lunaish and Harry seems to be there only as a secondary character.

The story has lost its appeal, for me atleast.

1.5/5

[thapagan]

I don't think this story can carry five more years at hogworts at it's current pacing. Harry and luna need a new foe.The author has resovled the POA storyline. Snape may be a good villian to elevate but how and why?
Switch the dememtors for werewolves, having greyback attacking the wizarding world while lupin is teaching? Greyback/voldemort pairing (I mean like book one)?
Have other prisoners escape from azkaban... Plot bunnies elude me

Getting the humor back would be nice also....

Update was nice but ip82 and niffler lord's points have merit

Is this the turning point of the fic... can it be "saved"?

[nonjon]

Err... while I don't disagree with all of what IP and Niffler say, I don't think it's 'gone to shit.' This has been the direction the new author's been going on from the start I'd thought. Not sudden change, gone to shit, just the author took Rorschach's idea and has been writing a pretty much standard romance, child!Harry, growing up sort of fic. Nothing awful about that, but not terribly compelling or interesting either. We've seen about fifty million of these sorts, all with slightly different takes on the same sort of themes whether it's falling in love Luna or Ginny or Hermione or Susan or Hannah or Daphne or Fem!Blaise.

The further we get from Rorschach's original idea, the further we get from his originality, and so far this author hasn't shown me anything much. Mildly enjoyable and certainly better Luna than Ginny, but you can only have child!Harry acting like a child, and grown-ups doing grown-up things around them for so long before it's the exact same sort of story we've seen a million times before. Not the exact same story, but the same sort. We may see the author come up with a nifty way to break a prisoner out of azkaban, or a completely original idea towards how to do the Triwizard Tournament (perhaps Luna gets entered instead of Harry... or they both do), who knows? But it won't change the themes of the story. Love? Bonding? Luna guiding Harry everywhere and telling him how and what to do? And then being sent to their room for unwittingly saving the world again where we hear about 13 year olds kissing and tingling and brushing each other's hair. Of course let's add some traumas and dangers to explain Luna's 'oddness' and the need for Harry to be the hero.

The only turning point I saw was when it went from one author to the next. Meteoricshipyards ain't Rorschach's Blot. Two different authors, two different styles and ideas. Not sure Blot could have even turned this into something fantastic with his style either. Maybe that's why he stopped when he did. I'd still give this a 3 out of 5 though. Pretty much what I felt after chapter 2.

I do see another fic heading down a similar road and I wonder when the 'gone to shit' responses may be forthcoming. I don't want to discourage anyone though, so I've kept my currently in the minority opinion to myself. But that's way off-topic.

[Dark Syaoran]

It has gone down hill, I have to agree on that.

I started reading this when it first came out. I thought it was pretty amusing and it was something I'd definitely follow. Now, however, some of it is getting a little old. Back when it started, I'd have given it a 4.5 out of 5. Now, I have no idea what I'd rate it.

[razz]

Meh. I deleted it off my favourites list a few weeks ago.

It's boring.

2/5.

[Hubby]

Why does everyone think love=sex?

[Lunarian]

I greatly enjoyed the story for the first couple of chapters. I liked how Harry got that great friend in Luna and they worked well together being kiddy married but for real. Then suddenly, I'm not sure where, the story lost its charm for me and I stopped reading it. I haven't a clue where it has headed in the latest chapters and didn't really get any urge to find out. It was still a nice read at the beginning however and worth it.

[Giovanni]

Why does everyone think love=sex?

Because when two people "love" each other, they fuck.

I agree with IP. This fic isn't worth the kilobytes of storage space it takes up.

[[KS18]Raziel44]

stroy was very weird xD but good

[Memory King]

The Graveyard Scene's out, if anyone cares to know. I found the Triwizard Tasks pretty entertaining, but they won't make you sold on this story, if you weren't already. I personally give it 4/5 for being pleasantly readable.

[Iztiak]

Well, it started out good. Great actually. But it should have definitely stayed a one-shot, or at the most, 5-6 chapters.

After those few, it really goes downhill. Slowly at first, slow enough that you almost don't notice it, seeing as how almost all stories have a few slow/boring chapters in them.

The parsel-learn spell was one strike against it, but I managed to ignore that, mostly because it didn't really serve any purpose.
The 9 year olds finding the horcruxes, and getting past the traps unscathed was a major strike against it, but the story was still interesting enough at that point to continue.


Harry's animagus form was...original, to say the least. But really, a rhinoceros?

Honestly, my main problem with this story is that the "Selene" seems intent on smothering Harry. Going so far as to instruct her husband not to use spells near Harry, as he learns them too fast. Or their odd reasoning that brooms are too expensive to buy one for him, and that he probably isn't that good anyway.

Edit: That, and the story is completely boring (no plot).

This story was a decent attempt. Not horrible, but not terribly interesting either.

[Demon_Vigilante]

I liked this story, I really did. At least, at first. Like others have mentioned, it went downhill pretty quickly. By the last chapter (I assume the latest chapter is the last, considering that Voldemort is slain), I had to really force myself to keep reading. The story wasn't interesting anymore, and the style was getting on my nerves. My mouse was literally hovering over the red X button towards the end of that chapter.

A while ago, I would have said this story was a solid 4/5. I've definitely changed my mind since then. 2.5/5.

[thapagan]

The last chapter was ok, somewhere between a tightly written ending and a rush job, but a good ending to a plot bunny run a muck.

[slasheh]

the story has come to a close, and like many others i have mixed feelings. At the start i considered it a funny story, but lately it has become dull, anyway if i could change my rating my final rating would be 3/5, and personally i don't think it is a humour story anymore, but rather romance

[hchan1]

A mediocre end to a mediocre story. Looking back, reading this story after the first few chapters was a time sink. It wasn't really funny, exciting, romantic, or much of anything. I think I kept reading simply because it was Harry/Luna, which was a mistake.

2/5.

[Chime??]

Yes, the story went down hill. Luna was much too demure in this story.

Though I don't think this deserves 2/5, as I've given worse stories that rating. It's 3/5.

The ending is great – not that I find it at all spectacular or outstanding, but rather, because the author knew he had to end it. Really, he/she needs to be commended for knowing when a story should end.

Plus, he avoids a lot of cliches at the end. Harry could've revealed his identiy, there could have been a marriage scene, a more intense love scene –*but there isn't any, and that's good. The story saves itself from being a flaming wreck, and merely just a normal trainwreck.

[Bratling]

I actually enjoyed this. Yes, it ended up being more serious than it began, but it does rank among my favorites in recent memory. That being said, it's not absolutely perfect, so I'll give it a 4/5.