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ip82
06-05-2006, 11:16 AM
Title: Right or Easy
Author: razzle-dazzle-me
Rating: T
Genre: Angst
Pairings: Harry/Cho
Chapters: 12
Words: 41,552
Updated: January 10, 2007
Published: May 25, 2005
Status: Abandoned
Summary: AU The final battle has been won, but was it worth the cost? Harry, alone and determined, sets out to rewrite history for a better world. Pity the bloody timeturner isn't working right…
Link: http://www.fanfiction.net/s/2408594/1/

20-something Harry travels to an Alternate Reality where Neville is the BWL. This Harry is rather angsty, but also powerful (he defeated Voldemort). He takes the position of the Divination teacher, which he uses to teach Occlumency, and starts dating Cho (no he doesn't use his teaching post to get chicks... cheez..).

Downside to this fic is angst and poetic writing style, which I personally don't like, but other people might.

All in all, a solid AU story, with lots of angst and action scenes. Interesting enough IMO.


Checked by Minion, December 23, 2012

Amerision
06-05-2006, 11:45 AM
Awesome story...

I just wonder why Razz didn't post it here herself - she is a member.

I don't mind the angst, it works well, and the writing style flows.

Recommended.

ip82
06-05-2006, 11:49 AM
She is? Maybe she was too shy to promote her own work?

Element
06-05-2006, 01:15 PM
Adored this fic, really enjoyed it. I'm not minding the angst either, although it is a little over the top. Pity about Cho being a rather ditzy bitch, and the relationship not being permanent. I didn't find any problems with the writing style, although I guess you couldn't describe it as pure prose. Nothing wrong with it, however.

Apart from the last chapter, I haven't seen much evidence of Harry being very powerful, but perhaps thats just me. I'd really love to see more incidents of Harry using his knowledge from the other dimension to convince others that he really is a master of Divination, but perhaps thats just me finding it very funny.

Randeemy
06-05-2006, 02:45 PM
She is? Maybe she was too shy to promote her own work?

Some people can be pretty brutal on here. So it is understandable.

I really like this. Its a shame that the updates are so infrequent.

Cupspeaker
06-05-2006, 06:22 PM
The writing style is solid, and the story seems good. I just couldnt get past the first chapter because I kept losing interest. Angst is not for me, and even though there isnt much of it in the prologue... The whole genre puts me off.

TheIllusiveOne
06-05-2006, 10:46 PM
I thought this had some very good ideas, and is shaping up to be a good fic. Writing style isn't my thing, but it's cool enough. My only real problem is how stupid Harry seems to be. For a kid who managed to manipulate Lucius Malfoy into freeing his house elf, manipulate slughorn into giving up the memory, and who managed to avoid the Dursley's in his pre-hogworts years, I found it annoying how he couldn't keep his emotions in check around anyone, made everyone suspicious of him, and never had one intelligent excuse for anything he's done. I mean, couldn't he at the very least use Occulemency so he doesn't stare at his parents and Sirius at the party? I mean jeez, he's supposed to be a bit discrete.

I'm probably being a little over the top about it, I just hate it when Harry makes stupid mistakes all the time in fics. But this is a real nice little fic, pity about slow updates though.

Mrriddler
06-05-2006, 11:07 PM
Looked through first couple of chapters, it does flow rather nicely. And H/C I see. I'm surprised Sera hasn't eaten this up already.

I guess the angst could be a kicker, though that seems quite moderate for now.

edit: oh never mind about the H/C. Author said the romance with Cho was a filler. Did a fairly good job of portraying the interaction.

razz
06-05-2006, 11:17 PM
Recommend myself to you lot? Fuck no.

Su-ah-cide.

Honestly, I don't even like this fic all that much. It has been going on for over a year now - that's a long time, and my taste has changed so much since then. When I originally posted the prologue there were even snatches of soppy H/G (they have, thankfully, long ago been edited out). Any motivation I had to write this has long ago died, though - but I kind of feel obligated, you know? I hate it when people abandon shit on me, so.

I do have the whole thing planned out, so it's not too hard to keep going ... but there are so many plot holes, so much that just makes me want to delete the bloody lot of it.

Besides that, I do have an embarrassingly, shameful amount of WIP's ...

I've been thinking of chucking the whole lot of them in, and starting a fic that I might be able to stick to, if that's at all possible.


But anyway, thanks for the mention ;)

xxoo

ip82
06-05-2006, 11:51 PM
Best solution when you grow tired of fic? End it.

Simply edit your last chapter and have Harry blow Voldemort in that duel. The prophecy is revealed and his secret comes to light. There's a slopy scene with his parents and quick closure of other scenes. Maybe a Wizengamot trial scene, where his parents pick him over goverment. And that's it. Case closed. The end.

arkeus
06-06-2006, 09:25 AM
ok, i liked this fic, though harry kind of seem a bit stupid. te genre is good though... i am sure you could change the story to comfort one of your ideas? if not i will just rearead a new world by finbar :ppp

It is good to hear you evolved since last year. if you really don't like that storym you should just ditch it :/ as long as you are zritingm ;ost of your godesssworshipper will understad :-)

Randeemy
06-06-2006, 10:20 AM
What IP82 said... if you dont want to carry on, give it some closure. Write a final chapter and let us all move on....(Weep)

Amerision
06-06-2006, 11:11 AM
Pity...I like it alot. Your other story, the one with the french Harry isn't nearly as good as this one.

razz
06-06-2006, 10:05 PM
Aw, thanks guys ;)

I already have the next chapter half done, and then a few rough drabbles for the one after that, so it'll definitely go on to there. I redirected my plan today, so I hope to have it finished off at thirteen chapters (lovely round number).

It'll be left more up in the air, though - I'm not going to rush through and have Harry save the world in the last 10K. But no worries, it will be conclusive.

I'm yet to decided, too, if Harry will blab to everyone who he really is. If I did, though, it'd be at the very, very end. Like the last paragraph. Or sentence.

xxoo

XTakaX
06-09-2006, 11:49 AM
^.^ Well, that's definitely good to hear! I can't stand it when an author rushes through the ending and everything happens all at once. Granted, it's gotta be a little rushed, because the minute Harry's found out, certain things have to happen, but I think I'd settle for never knowing their exact reaction. It leaves room for imagination, no?

Toruviel
08-08-2006, 11:07 AM
I really like this story. I'd been updated recently (if you don't konw). I think it's a good story to read, if you don't mind a litte angst - I don't. :)

Xanatos
08-09-2006, 09:04 AM
This story is one of the few Harry as a teacher storys I've been able to read and enjoy, very recommended

RagefulLlama
03-10-2007, 02:00 AM
Updated back in January, only just read the new chapter. To tell you the truth it irritates me. All of a sudden it goes into the order having summoned him to be their weapon.

The last two chapter essentially being Harry wanting to let go and actually enjoy his second chance, only to have the order hunting him down. The only way I can really see this going is essentially Harry going ape-sh*t and killing everyone or at least hurting them very very badly, especially Cho.

It looks like the next chapter is either going to be incredibly good or well bad.
Not to much actual constructive criticism that I can give, this chapter was rather good when I look at it objectively. It just rubs me the wrong way as I don't look at it objectively to often =P. Most especially the ending with Cho . . . I sincerely hope that Harry castrates them all both verbally AND physically (perhaps mentally for a select few =D.)

Heh, thinking about it Sera, or LT2000 now, would probably be displeased the way this story went =P.

Sorry if the post bounced around a little, it's getting late here . .

Calen
03-17-2007, 05:30 PM
^^^ Or since Cho's obviously the Order's whore, he could demand her services for his services, make them really work for his help; all kinds of demands.

LT2000
03-19-2007, 10:39 PM
Heh, thinking about it Sera, or LT2000 now, would probably be displeased the way this story went =P.



Only slightly. This fic never really gave me the vibe that the Harry/Cho was going to work out in the long run to begin with. I'm just hoping for some violent retribution on Harry's part when or if it gets updated again.

zUzaque
03-20-2007, 10:45 AM
I liked it. At the moment, I really hope that Harry chooses what is 'easy', and murders everyone. I can see the next chapter going either really bad, or really good, like RagefulLlama said. Bravo, this is one of the few HP stories that I've enjoyed recently.

Srichapan
01-22-2008, 04:10 PM
I'm disappointed. I kept reading this fanfiction hoping in an improvement because I saw its potential, but it didn't happen.

There are some things unexplained, unrealistic or just... wrong and a lot of plot holes.

The position of Divination teacher could have leaded to far better results. It could have opened so many different paths... instead, it became something marginal. I didn't like that.

This Harry is an idiot, a pissy idiot who is confused and made me confused. What does he want? Does he want to defeat Voldemort? Does he want a normal life? To be left alone? To be accepted by others?
This confusion could have been used better too. This Harry could have been a character with a good and an original characterization almost impossible to find in HP fanfictions (God only knows how many masterpieces of the literature are born from interior doubts and uncertainties).
Instead, I reached the conclusion that the one confused was the author, and that is not a good thing.

In the last two chapters there are a lot of revelations that maybe are too sudden and a little... stretched, but that can still be explained. However, the battle is unrealistic, especially considering the previous fights that involved Harry.

This story has potential, but it isn't exploited at all.

Andro
01-22-2008, 06:28 PM
It still impressed me. It had a very Matrix-esque feel to it. I have the feeling that something larger than what is comprehensible is in play. The Order is blatantly caricatured, and I have to wonder what part of the plot led to that.

I keep thinking the story will end with Harry thinking, "Third time's the charm" as he flings himself back into the past again.

Renzhoulawyers
01-23-2008, 06:50 AM
One word: Wow. Your writing style is very unique: it captures attention and spits out action with no breaks. I must say i LOVED it, especially the more recent chapters. Sometimes, it slows down a bit, but the fight scene at the end of the last ch. was just mindblowing.

Cxjenious
01-27-2008, 02:46 PM
I've only gotten through the eigth chapter, but so far, the writing is good, and the characters are realistic.

EDIT: Now that I've read all of it... very good. The wrting is great, and, if it hadn't been abandoned, would've featured my favorite type of Harry. Young, powerful, dark, and angry.

4.5/5

IBG
01-27-2008, 07:54 PM
Amazing fic, very original, however the fact its taken the author more than 2 and a half years for 39000 words, and that he has about 10 incomplete fic's certifies that this will be abandoned, at his current update speed the fic wouldnt be completed in a decade.

Ah well, hopefully someone else will take over / utilize these ideas.

The whole betrayal by Cho and the Order's attempt at turning him into a puppet are inspired, to say the least. I hope Harry breaks free, kills Moody and some other well known but easily replaced people such as Tonks then takes a position as Voldemort's apprentice or possibly equal commandership of the Death Eaters.

Given the other Harry, Ron & Neville's desire to learn the Dark Arts, he could probably even sway them and some of their friends and even bring a third faction to the war.