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Complete Potter by Water Mage - T

Discussion in 'Almost Recommended' started by Antivash, Aug 23, 2005.

  1. Antivash

    Antivash Until we meet again... DLP Supporter Retired Staff

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    Title: Potter
    Author: Water Mage
    Genre: Gen
    Pairings: ------
    Rating: T [PG]
    Chapters: 17
    Words: 98,880
    Updated: May 26, 2005
    Published: November 27, 2003
    Status: Complete

    Summary: One change in the past can cause a ripple effect, changing the timeline. A baby, Harry, being adopted by a crime lord is one. How will Hogwarts be different with a gun wielding, Harry Potter-McKnight? The heir to England's underground crime empire.
    Link: Potter
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    Found it ages ago, and stopped reading it for god knows what reason, forgot it existed. Was just recently reminded of it and found it again. Good, in my opinion. Always liked the idea of Mafia Gangster Harry. You should too. Its your duty to like mafia!harry! LIKE HIM DAMN IT!!


    Sequel:

    Title: Slave of Dragons
    Summary: Sequel to 'Potter'. A Basilisk is loose, letters ask for his blood, and an assassin is after him. You would think Harry was scared. He was. But most of his life was spent destroying things he fears. Next to a dark lord, piece of cake.

    DLP thread: https://forums.darklordpotter.net/showthread.php?t=1977




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  2. Midknight

    Midknight Middy is SPAI! DLP Supporter Retired Staff

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  3. LT2000

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    This is the original Mafia!Harry and beyond question the best. I can hardly wait for the sequel.
     
  4. Midknight

    Midknight Middy is SPAI! DLP Supporter Retired Staff

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    After reading it, I think that it has it's up points.

    The constant making up of religious things and chucking them in way annoying as all hell, as was the "sense", but it works within the story.

    The need to make everyone around Harry super powered doomed the story for me. I gave up reading it at chapter 15, it was becoming a gangster epic and just using the HP names.
     
  5. LT2000

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  6. Redeye

    Redeye Penultimate Lurker DLP Supporter

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    i agree with midnight but i just hate it whenever there is a story with kick ass harry and then the auther feels the need to make everyone around harry kick ass it just takes away from harry's kickass-ness
     
  7. LT2000

    LT2000 Heir

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    Well...Harry pretty damn well kicked ass on his own when he took on Voldemort at the end.
     
  8. Redeye

    Redeye Penultimate Lurker DLP Supporter

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    aye this is true.
     
  9. XclusivPetal

    XclusivPetal Card Captored and buttsecksed

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    Its our duty to lik mafia harry (kills it wen evryone else can kick ass) but got to admit mafia harry is entertainin...lol
     
  10. Xiph0

    Xiph0 Yoda Admin

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    YOUR LUCKY I LIVE IN A COUNTRY WHERE FIREARMS ARE BANNED!

    I'D POP A FUCKING CAP IF I SAW THIS POST AND HAD A GUN BITCH!

    I mean, what? Sorry, was being possessed.

    What? I'm on the internet?

    WTF
     
  11. The-Hyphenated-One

    The-Hyphenated-One Chief Warlock DLP Supporter

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    That was the funniest shit I've seen in a while dude, fucking epic.

    Didn't the author recently begin writing again?
     
  12. MysterioX

    MysterioX Professor

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    Yea, here
    I can't wait for the update.
     
  13. Dr. Strange Lulz

    Dr. Strange Lulz Denarii Host DLP Supporter

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    His dad dual wields Deagles.
    His dad is named after a character from Inuyasha
    His bodyguards are named "The Archangels"

    And lastly, my personal favorite:

    Katana.

    /Fail.
     
  14. Iztiak

    Iztiak Prisoner DLP Supporter

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    Ah, but you forgot the Griffindor preps and the Pretty Goth slytherins.
     
  15. Cathal

    Cathal Sir Nils' Right Hand

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    Hey, it's fairly good. Definitily the best Mafioso!Harry I've ever read. I liked the fact that Harry here, more often than not, acts like an 11-years-old kid ought to. Although, I would have liked Harry's adoptive father being Italian... You know, true Mafia will always be Italian for me...
    Still - 4/5
     
  16. Water Mage

    Water Mage Denarii Host

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    I cant believe I named his dad after that Inuyasha villian. And I gave that kid a katana. I definitely should revise it one day. I look back on those two things and just go wtf.
     
  17. Nemo

    Nemo Second Year

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    Well, at least you recognized the problem. That's a start, right?

    I've only read the first couple of chapters, but it's otherwise pretty good other than the random weeaboo moments.

    Minor suggestion, though? Dual-wielding Desert Eagles is also kind of silly. I know Harry's dad did that in an early chapter, it struck me as a little off. Dual-wielding in general is waaaay overdone, but with guns that big?

    I dunno, maybe I'm just being pedantic...
     
  18. Water Mage

    Water Mage Denarii Host

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    You do have a point. I obviously watched way too much anime as a teenager.
     
  19. Dr. Strange Lulz

    Dr. Strange Lulz Denarii Host DLP Supporter

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    I'm sorry, I'm really just a harsh cunt.

    The fact that you have Peter as your avatar now makes me feel bad.
     
  20. Water Mage

    Water Mage Denarii Host

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    Dont fell bad. Critiscm comes with the territory. And it was called for. I cringe myself when I go back and read some of my past stuff.

    Peter, Peter, power Re-Peter is the shit. Its always nice to see a fellow fan.
     
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