Title: A Twist of Chance
Author: MockV
Rating: T
Genre: Humor
Status: WIP
Fandom: Naruto
Pairings: N/A
Summary: AU: Honestly, what were the odds of Uzumaki Naruto running into his only surviving relatives in the middle of the marketplace? Slim to none, right? Too bad the odds never mattered to the luckiest and most unfortunate genin in Konoha. [Not 367 Compliant]

Link: Fanfiction.Net

Yes, the premise sounds stupid. It's done better than it sounds, but not by much. Luckily this whole 'relatives' angle doesn't even play that big of a role, so I'd suggest to not value it that highly.

What's important is that in my opinion this is the best slice of life story in the entire fandom. It's lighthearted and humorous, and it utterly nails the overall tone of the early manga. This story makes Konoha as a village come to life. It makes me believe that this is what a village full of weird ninja with even weirder powers and eccentricities would be like. Yes, it has a few too many OCs but overall they don't really matter to the plot, instead they serve as a way to add depth to the whole world.

Of course this fic isn't perfect: Lots of tell and not show, a handful of OCs, a plot that doesn't really go anywhere and the fact that it's abandoned are certainly negative points, but I feel as if the boring sounding summary detracts people from giving this story a shot.

4/5

 

It's...ehhh. It's not poorly written. It doesn't have any horrible instant close cliches. It doesn't suffer from terrible grammar. But...

There's no flow. The majority of the story is chunks of introspection/internal monologuing. About half the verbal interaction within is between Naruto and his clones. There are a few too many anime styled conventions, such as face faulting and sweat dropping, written seriously into the text.

I didn't make it to the end of the story. I skimmed a lot after the first two chapters. Reading the blocks of text gave me a slight headache.

Despite all this, it isn't a bad story. I'd rate it 2.5 rounded up to 3. Belongs in the Almost Recced thread.

 

I forgot these still existed

 

Later on it mentions the Namikaze family and declares the name Minato to be girly. Naruto also gets fans for being able to file things.

This fic is strictly terrible. 1/5

 

You took away the big complaint I was going to make! Either way, I agree. But are we even allowed to put up dead stories for review?