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Complete The Perfect Azkaban Breakout by pstibbons- K

Discussion in 'Almost Recommended' started by Shezza, Sep 26, 2006.

  1. Shezza

    Shezza Renegade 4 Life DLP Supporter

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    Title: The Perfect Azkaban Breakout
    Auhtor: pstibbons
    Rating: K
    Genre: Azkaban
    Pairing: None so far, hints of HP/HG
    Chapters: 12
    Words: 31,280
    Updated: September 27, 2006
    Published: September 14, 2006
    Status: Complete

    Summary: Three years after HBP, Harry kills the murderer of Ginny and Ron, and is justifiably sent to Azkaban for three years. Snape ensures there is a race to spring him from Azkaban but will the Order or the Death Eaters get to him first?
    Link: http://www.fanfiction.net/s/3153194/1/


    I've put this up for review because it mildly entertained me for ten or so minutes. This is definately one of the most cliche-free Azkaban stories I've ever read. First off, Harry does deserve to go to Azkaban....he actually committed the crime. There isn't any crappy trial scene where he pleads his innocence and RW/HG/GW burn his stuff. It isn't a quick trial, there's Vertiserum, Penesieve's, high media coverage....

    The breakout bit was the best part. Insetad of Harry magically gaining powers in Azkaban, people outside break in for him. It really is...logical, I guess you could call it.

    Anyway, not the greatest. Harry really hasn't said much yet, though he has acted like a bit of a sook. There are hints of HP/HG but nothing has happened yet. I recommend that you try this out, just to see what a realistic Azkaban story looks like.



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  2. ip82

    ip82 Prisoner

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    This is an OK fic, but it really doesn't have much to do with Harry... it's mostly about Hermione and Snape trying to get him out.
     
  3. bornagainpenguin

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    It wasn't bad. I give it 4/5 for slightly better than average ideas even if the death of Voldemort was a bit anti-climatic and I wasn't all that pleased by the handling of Snape. The removal of Ginny and Ron from early on in the story was a plus.

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  4. carvell

    carvell Professor DLP Supporter

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    I like this it's much better than the standard azkaban fic's, and the pairing's i still like h/hg and the best part ron and ginny are already dead
    I give this 4.5/5 :D
     
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    Harryquins?
     
  6. mcatrage

    mcatrage Raptured to Hell

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    So I read the story completely confused because i misread the description.

    I thought it said that he killed Ron and Ginny. I was all excited just to be let down.
     
  7. Mordecai

    Mordecai Drunken Scotsman –§ Prestigious §– DLP Supporter

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    Well written, nicely summed up at the end, and overall, not to verbose.

    4/5
     
  8. magyareagle

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    An enjoyable fic, all in all. 4.5/5. The length, style and pacing are perfect, and I loved the ending. Excellent work.
     
  9. Warlocke

    Warlocke Fourth Champion

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    Not to be confused with Harley Quinn. Hmm, now there's a pairing; dark!Harry/Harley Quinn. :cool:

    I thought this was pretty good. It worked for its length. Dragging out the rescue and/or the aftermath may have gotten tedious otherwise. I liked seeing how Hermione's personality changed, partially due to the deaths and partially because Harry wasn't there to help her pick up the pieces. It was interesting that the author had them hook up at the end, not because they were in love but more because they didn't want to bother letting anyone else get close. The super-happy 'we're so in love' ending would have been easy to go for but I'm glad it wasn't used in this case.

    Now what would have made it really good would be if, after securing his magical oath-backed pardon/immunity, Snape accidentally tripped and skewered his brain on something sharp someone left lying around. Hehe.
    Hermione killing Draco by transfiguring him into a fish-out-of-water was good enough though.
     
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