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Harry Potter and the Slightly Unbalanced House-Elf by Zoken - T

Discussion in 'Almost Recommended' started by Zoken, Mar 26, 2007.

  1. Zoken

    Zoken Card Captored and buttsecksed

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    Title: Harry Potter and the Slightly Unbalanced HouseElf
    Author: Zoken
    Rating: T/PG-13
    Genre: Humor
    DLP Category: Humor/Parody
    Pairing: none yet,
    Status: Work In Progress
    Summary: What is the Power the Dark Lord knows not? I believe it's the adoration of a slightly unbalanced House-Elf and one over protective owl
    Link:FF.Net

    Somethign I have that I thought you all might enjoy.
     
  2. ip82

    ip82 Prisoner

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    This is... lolish, I think. A bit short, though.
     
  3. SmileOfTheKill

    SmileOfTheKill Magical Amber

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    The thing was amusing but it was too short for what it offered. I liked it and will give it a 3/5. If it had more detail, even one or two lines in some locations, it could of been a 4/5. It would of been a 2/5 but having Dobby slap and beat down death eaters works for me. It does also have minor English grammar errors though. I may be too nice here but 3/5.
     
  4. Manatheron

    Manatheron Headmaster

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    Dobby FTW!

    3.5/5
     
  5. SmileOfTheKill

    SmileOfTheKill Magical Amber

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    The story is gone... for what reason... I don't know...
     
  6. DarthBill

    DarthBill The Chosen One

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    It's not gone. FF.net is just screwy today.
     
  7. deathinapinkboa

    deathinapinkboa Minister of Magic

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    It's okay. I don't love it, but I don't hate it. I'd give it a solid 3/5. It has potential, but needs work.
     
  8. Zoken

    Zoken Card Captored and buttsecksed

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    Why can't people read this one as much as they read my crappy one?
     
  9. Vesvius

    Vesvius High Inquisitor DLP Supporter

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    Kinda good. Could do with some minor tune ups, and that kinda thing. I've read much, much worse.

    3.5/5
     
  10. KenderCleric

    KenderCleric Lord of Plot Bunnies

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    As far as "for laughs" fics go I approve of any fic where Dobby and/or Hedwig go on a rampage.

    Dumbledore Insults: 2.5/5 (nothing too imaginative here)
    Rampage!Dobby: 5/5
    Rampage!Hedwig: 5/5
    Fawkes attacking Order members: 3/5 (it's original...kinda)
    Overall: 3.5/5
     
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