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PsyckoSama
08-10-2007, 04:32 AM
Title: Harry Potter and the Evil Summer Vacation
Author: Meteoricshipyards
Rating: T
Genre: Comedy/"Evil"
DLP Category: Dark Arts or Humor
Pairing: HP/LL
Status: One Shot
Summary: Harry's summer vacation isn't exactly as the Dursley's planned. There are a few repercussions
Link: http://www.fanfiction.net/s/3617809/1/Harry_Potter_and_the_Evil_Summer_Vacation
The Mysterious Nobody
08-10-2007, 07:47 AM
Awesome. Pure win. I laughed almost all the time, and the Bellatrix moment was funny as hell. Original idea and excellent execution.

Also, as a fan of the loon and the pairing, I can only give this one-shot a 5/5
Kardikek
08-10-2007, 09:09 AM
It didn't have that spark that makes comedy funny and frankly whatever punchline he tried to go for went past my head. Like someone trying to rehash someone else's jokes but failing.

3/5
ip82
08-10-2007, 09:45 AM
Heh, not bad. Good idea, but the actual story could be better. Like this, it's sort of... bland.
Dark Minion
08-10-2007, 12:48 PM
Like his/her other stuff it is quite nice, but not that brilliant.

Compared with "Honestly Headmaster" (http://forums.darklordpotter.net/showthread.php?t=6851#post136790) this story was better written as it wasn't entirely based on a retelling dialogue, but the jokes in this part were not as good as in the other one.

So again 3.8/5
Kyp's Avenger
08-10-2007, 02:34 PM
It was all right. Good main ideas, just didn't like the writing very much. Didn't seem funny enough. 3/5
Antivash
08-10-2007, 06:25 PM
4/5.

I thought it was pretty good, honestly. I was amused, at least. ^_^

Nice characterization of luna. Not too normal, not too out there. Could have done without Mr. Lovegood, and the whole Dr. and Scott Evil thing ... meh.. but good, aside.
Dark Minion
08-10-2007, 06:30 PM
Well, yeah, it would have been funnier if the author had included Mini-Me instead of Scott - or as Scott's rival.
PsyckoSama
08-10-2007, 06:38 PM
Well, yeah, it would have been funnier if the author had included Mini-Me instead of Scott - or as Scott's rival.

What would have been the best is if somehow he managed to slip in a fist fight between Prof. Fitwick and Mini-Me.

Bare Knuckled Midget Boxing FTW! :D
Richardc269
08-10-2007, 07:06 PM
It didn't hold my attention for very long. 3/5 for me.

Richard.
The Dark Monarch
08-11-2007, 10:32 PM
I liked it. 4/5
deathinapinkboa
08-11-2007, 11:44 PM
"Hermione! What are you doing with that magazine? They're very careful about who can get it, you know." He pointed at the issue of Evil Monthly.

"Oh, that. I'm sure you know that both my parents are dentists," she replied.


It was worth reading of that.
Solomon
08-11-2007, 11:57 PM
Hrm...I liked this story; it kept my attention well, and kept a smile on my face, even if I didn't laugh (though, I think a chuckle or two may have escaped). 4/5
rj_stone2
08-12-2007, 02:22 PM
Enjoyable, but underachieving. Meteoricshipyards' stories always have great premises, but they rarely have anything humorous (or noticeable) that doesn't flow directly from the premise.
Manatheron
08-13-2007, 04:04 AM
Amusing at the least. Not solid gold, but a solid stable 4/5 for sure.

Then again I'm a sucker for comedy's...
Nemrut
08-20-2009, 04:38 AM
I really liked the conversations between Scott and Harry the best and Luna was well written but the part with Dumbledore knowing about the quill and such and letting those things happen "for the greater good" really killed it for me. Even if it's a parody, but that just destroyed the mood.

But I did like everything else in this story so 3/5
Korisovra
08-20-2009, 10:22 AM
I was bored. Bored as hell. 3/5 for technique and flow.