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What is right by Emma Lipardi - T

Discussion in 'Almost Recommended' started by Marie M, Aug 28, 2007.

  1. Marie M

    Marie M Raptured to Hell

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    Title: What is right
    Author: Emma Lipardi
    Rating: T
    Genre: Time Travel
    DLP Category: Time Travel
    Pairing: None
    Status: WIP
    Summary: Harry finds himself making a decision to give it all up just to change what has happened. What he doesn't realize is that he gets a second chance to set it right.
    Link: http://www.fanfiction.net/s/2777448/1/What_is_Right
     
    Last edited: Aug 28, 2007
  2. Andro

    Andro Master of Death DLP Supporter

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    I think the category should be Time Travel.
     
  3. Skeletaure

    Skeletaure Magical Core Enthusiast ~ Prestige ~ DLP Supporter

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    If I remember correctly, this starts off okay but degenerates into angst before too long.

    3/5
     
  4. Palver

    Palver High Inquisitor

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    This is the most horrible angst-feast. Instead of Harry looking into the future, he becomes angsty little social outcast and comforted by Malfoy, Snape, magical creatures... He is crying, shaking, flinching, curling, sobbing, shivering... Stupid little shit. Where is AK and Deuce?
    1/5


     
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  5. Marie M

    Marie M Raptured to Hell

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    Ok, there's no doubt that you have a point there, I haven't read this fic for awhile and didn't quite remember that part, if I had, I wouldn't have posted it.
     
  6. Dark Minion

    Dark Minion Bright Henchman DLP Supporter Retired Staff

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    That fic is already posted in the barely readable thread.

    It's not only the angst feast but also the whole Malfoy-plot that makes it unreadable.

    Harry meets the Malfoys in Diagon Alley and Draco befriends him (it's not really two sided). Lucius is downright friendly and in December they invite him over for Christmas. Harry doesn't believe their behaviour, but Dumbledore forces him to spend the Holidays with the Malfoys. And there Narcissa cares for him almost like Molly Weasley.

    The only point I grant Emma Lipardi is for grammar and spelling.
     
  7. Lyndon Eye

    Lyndon Eye Minister of Magic DLP Supporter

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    2/5- I read a lot of it a few months ago. Seeing as I have no impression of it and can't remember the plot or anything special, it probably wasn't too original or moving.
     
  8. Amerision

    Amerision Galactic Sheep Emperor DLP Supporter

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    Seriously.

    This woman must be some kind of child psychologist or social worker. She's got this weird fascination with broken!Harry and spending vast amounts of the story healing him, having him break again, heal, break, degenerate him into a little boy, again, and again...

    2/5 for the mechanics.
     
  9. ip82

    ip82 Prisoner

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    Yeah, I pretty much agree with reviews. It started well and then fell to pieces when 20+ years old Harry had to be mothered by Narcissa and Lucius fucking Malfoy. Even though I don't share automatic antipathy towards these characters, enough is enough.
     
  10. Niffler Lord

    Niffler Lord Headmaster

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    I don't have much to add to the above.

    1/5
     
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