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Midknight
05-03-2005, 10:14 PM
Title: Traitors Within
Author: Midknight
Category: Answer to Midknight's Azkaban Challenge! - Betrayal!, Revenge!, Azkaban!, Dark Heir!, Independent!, Manslut!
Pairings: H/Tonks/Bella/Patil Twins
Rating: M(R) - Mature for fight scenes, severe description of castration via fork, and just blame b/c I warned ya.
Summery: Heir of Slytherin, Dark, Independent, Azkaban, Harry. Bella, Tonks, Patil twins as the 'ships. After a interesting visit from Voldemort, Harry has a fight with Fudge, and begins his ascent to freedom. Twists and turns abound!

Antivash
05-04-2005, 12:37 AM
+ Pairings: H/Tonks/Bella/Patil Twins

O_O!! SWEET!
ive always wanted to see one of those... will eb interesting to see how you pull it off

+ Rating: Mature for fight scenes, severe description of castration via fork, and just blame b/c I warned ya.



A fork?

what happened to the spoon? or better ... a plastic SPORK!

nightangel960
05-04-2005, 01:18 AM
hey I'm a fan of the patil twins so I like this story

Lord Ravenclaw
05-04-2005, 01:38 AM
We need some just H/Patil Twins, as in all my travels I haven't found any who had him just paired with the two...usually he had the baggage with Ginny and Hermione, or both. This should be good though, I've never seen this pairing.

IndoGhost
05-04-2005, 05:56 PM
harry and the Patil Twins never read one with then but i'm willing to see where it leads

Midknight
05-04-2005, 10:33 PM
We need some just H/Patil Twins, as in all my travels I haven't found any who had him just paired with the two...usually he had the baggage with Ginny and Hermione, or both. This should be good though, I've never seen this pairing.


The Patil twins I'm gonna try to make believable.

I'll come flat out and tell ya now, H/GW IS in this story, but in a way that our dear dark lord in training is simply manipulating her for information, lol.

Tonks... I MAY not write much more then a one nighter, When the idea for the challenge and story came up, H/T was not written. So I figured I'd try to usher it in, but then it exploded, lol.

Harry/Bella seems to still be mostly untouched ground, with no really great example shining from the ship.



The spoon I could not reveal without giving away who uses it, and when. The spoon is in the story, lol. I'm not gonna explain it when I post it to FF.net it'll stay a DLP.net "In" joke, heh.

As for sporks. Sporks are too good to use on the ppl that are going to be spooned!

nightangel960
05-04-2005, 11:39 PM
there was this good one I read from Jeaconis called the Objects Lesson Trilogy. it's a Harry/Padma fic and I must say that it's really well written, you'd have to join his yahoo group but it's worth it. It's in his files section under Harry/Padma

http://groups.yahoo.com/group/jeconais_fanfiction/

Midknight
05-09-2005, 10:30 PM
I'm very proud to say my story now has over 600! view in the thread I'm posting my story in.

Not taking into account the Games board, that is the highest view count of the whole board, with some of the closest running 200+ views behind! I'm very humbled that so many people would check in, and follow the story, even in it's slightly dummed down formatting to work on the boards =)

Thank you for your support. I may be looking for a Beta later on, if Omagic or halstead does not respond to my request=)

Ya know the most aggrivating part of writing this story... I have things I want to get to, Hermione's um "special" treatment, Harry and his three headed friend, another incident with a spoon/fork/spork, and the building up, and making it BELIEVABLE is killing me.

I've seen authors totally ruin their credibility by taking Harry from the borderline wimpy guy he is now, to a unstoppable powerhouse in 3 chapters, so I'll just have to grin and bear it, and cry as my plans come out slowly =(

nightangel960
05-10-2005, 11:16 AM
yeah do that. I always tend to hate the fact that one day he was crying about sirus, the next he's all powerful taking control of his life.. there has to be a balance somwhere in there

ariannariddle
05-10-2005, 03:14 PM
ooohhhh i love it more kill more kill please :twisted: :twisted: :twisted: :twisted: :twisted: :twisted: :twisted:

nightangel960
05-10-2005, 05:21 PM
yeah more blood

Midknight
05-10-2005, 09:57 PM
yeah do that. I always tend to hate the fact that one day he was crying about sirus, the next he's all powerful taking control of his life.. there has to be a balance somwhere in there

I hate any fic where he's whining about Sirius period. I've said it before and I'll say it again,

-He's had what, like 4 actual drawn out conversations with the guy? He knows the Dursely's mailperson, some randon person in gryffindor much better then he knows this guy who suddenly popped up after 12 years in prison.

Same deal with Lupin, yeah year 3 he got special tutoring, but has he ever had a heart to heart with the kid? Lupin was free for the 12 years, why didnt he visit Harry. Lupin is easily explained, but for Harry to cry over either of them is just pure stupid.

IndoGhost
05-10-2005, 10:45 PM
i dont think he'd be whining about Sirius i think he'd be angry i mean it the third close person other then his parents that he lost who was going to be close to him. that would make anyone angry. and anyway it's more beliveible

Antivash
05-10-2005, 10:50 PM
Aye! I agree... I think he'd be more angry than depressed... though the prophecy might bring him down abit he isnt going to sitting in his rooom tearing up a box of tissues!

IndoGhost
05-10-2005, 11:05 PM
na if there was a prophecy about you would be pissed off....very pissed off that i have no control over my life at all

Midknight
05-10-2005, 11:10 PM
na if there was a prophecy about you would be pissed off....very pissed off that i have no control over my life at all

Ah and you have hit on one of the themes of my story. Harry is out to prove he can go outsight fate.

I was toying with the idea of having the prophecy already fufilled, since Voldie's body "died" and Harry lived. But I've seen this once before in some obscure story and didn't want to be labeled a copycat

nightangel960
05-10-2005, 11:10 PM
I agree finding out that you have no control of your life would set anyone off. poyally

IndoGhost
05-10-2005, 11:15 PM
just because of the prophecy i would walk away from everything and do what ever i want

nightangel960
05-10-2005, 11:17 PM
would your conscious allow it?

IndoGhost
05-10-2005, 11:25 PM
conscious can be twisted and turned to fit ones purpose

Midknight
05-10-2005, 11:38 PM
This is the question Harry will ask himself. The answer.

Screw them all. A good majority of the magical world has used him, lied, hurt, tried to kill, taken from, or demanded things from him.

The muggle world.. well Dursleys mucked that up.

Harry to me, will be for the magic. His loyalty is to his magic, and only to his magic. Light or dark, does not matter.

For anyone who has everyread Dragonlance, or knows of Raistlin Majere.. that is who I picture my Harry most like.

IndoGhost
05-10-2005, 11:44 PM
i got to read those then

Antivash
05-11-2005, 12:51 AM
... never read dragonlance... but yeah.. id be depressed for a day or so then id get pissed... maybe flay the person who made the damnedable thing..

Midknight
05-11-2005, 01:49 AM
... never read dragonlance... but yeah.. id be depressed for a day or so then id get pissed... maybe flay the person who made the damnedable thing..

Good old Sybill... =)

The Dragonlance reference with Raistlin for those who don't know. Raistlin was a sickly mage whose loyalty was only to his magic. He'd do anything, manipulate anyone, to be the best. He became so strong he planned to take on a god. And he would of won. They went back in time and showed him it was not worth it to win, b/c he'd destory the world.

Pick up Dragonlance Chronicles, and Legends... must haves no matter what.

nightangel960
05-11-2005, 08:36 AM
hell if I was Harry I'd say screw them all as well. not like he really is happy there. they put their future in the hands of a child and lay back expecting him to kill Voldemort for him. why should he?

Antivash
05-12-2005, 03:01 AM
Ha .. great chapter... as always... just getting interesting i say.. or well... even more interesting i guess since its always be very interesting ^_^

ulkser
05-12-2005, 10:55 AM
i do not read the story only for girls. you have to include some romance or ti will be boring. if i read just for girls then i should be reading the stories in adultfan.com

by the way it is a good chapter.

Midknight
05-12-2005, 07:08 PM
i do not read the story only for girls. you have to include some romance or ti will be boring. if i read just for girls then i should be reading the stories in adultfan.com

by the way it is a good chapter.

Not bothering with romance period. There will be some sex later on, but I'm not one of the ppl who feel there needs (hell or ever should be) graphic sex in a world like this.

Do feel free to read porn, or hentai, but there will never been red hawt secks in here. I just don't see it has a place for me, others may feel diff, but *shrug*

As for boring, it will be impossible for anyone to ever say boring. Once Harry gets ahold of Bella, and he has this one attack happen, it stays a roller coaster ride.

TYVM all for your reviews

nightangel960
05-12-2005, 07:15 PM
your very welcome and I agree too much porn is a bad thing

IndoGhost
05-12-2005, 08:31 PM
CH 15 was great i wonder if you are gonna let the headmaster in something?i wanna see another fight between them

nightangel960
05-12-2005, 09:47 PM
I know.. chances are it's gonna be a doozy.

Midknight
05-13-2005, 12:25 AM
CH 15 was great i wonder if you are gonna let the headmaster in something?i wanna see another fight between them

Dumbles will have alot of speech later on in the story, right now, it's going to focus on setting everything up for the middle.

I will tell you when the two of them do finally have the be all, end all fight towards the middle it'll make a few people happy.

For awhile it's going to focus on setting up backstory. I'm prewriting the chapters now, and let me tell you it's absolute hell to keep track of the plot twists I've got planned, I have a dry erase board 3 feet from my keyboard, filled with post-it notes and what not.

To be honest I don't like Dumbledore. People often get mad when authors portray him as manipulative.. but get real, he's a master at it. You look through the books at it, and you see very few times where he's ever acted directly, instead choosing to let Harry set things right b/c he is always "coicidentally" left out of the loop.

I don't blame the "character" itself for that, its partially JKR never coming up with a valid reason Harry wouldn't report the fact that he's hearing voices of death, or seeing a dog stalk him, etc.

BlackPhoenix
05-13-2005, 10:08 PM
well I was a fan of Dumblely untill OoP but I still don't mind him myself.

anyways little empty in chapter 15, the cycle talk was interesting but some of the interaction between Tonk, Kingsley and Harry was a bit... meh

Midknight
05-13-2005, 11:12 PM
well I was a fan of Dumblely untill OoP but I still don't mind him myself.

anyways little empty in chapter 15, the cycle talk was interesting but some of the interaction between Tonk, Kingsley and Harry was a bit... meh

I'm rewriting the ending part and prolly reposting. I had a part I wanted to get out there, and it outweighed the semi roughness. I'm also not happy about the size of it, I got hit with writers block at the start of it, and roughed my way through enough of it to get out a point I wanted.

Do remember up until that chapter, I'd written every chapter in about 10-15 minutes in this reply box, with no proofreading or beta reader for errors about timeline/story, So it's pretty incredible it's come out the way it has so far.

I've come to the point where I think i'll be forced to prewrite the chapts, for the plot is going to be doing loop-d-loops with alot of deception and mind games going on.


EDIT: The story is now up on FF.net with added conversations, a few reedited parts, and extended explanations for some parts. I've added about 20K more words to the story expanding on the chapters I already have.

Midknight
05-29-2005, 09:08 PM
I locked the story post for now it'll be a week or two + before I add anymore new chapters, I'm stuggling to revise all my old ones and keeping continuity is frustrating the hell out of me.

A bonus though, alot of the reviewers for my story have join up with the site =)

Treck
05-30-2005, 12:41 PM
I hate any fic where he's whining about Sirius period. I've said it before and I'll say it again,

-He's had what, like 4 actual drawn out conversations with the guy? He knows the Dursely's mailperson, some randon person in gryffindor much better then he knows this guy who suddenly popped up after 12 years in prison.

I'd say if he cried over anything it would be being stuck at the Durzkaban prision again this summer. Sirius was a way out that he lost and not much more.

Midknight
05-30-2005, 02:40 PM
I hate any fic where he's whining about Sirius period. I've said it before and I'll say it again,

-He's had what, like 4 actual drawn out conversations with the guy? He knows the Dursely's mailperson, some randon person in gryffindor much better then he knows this guy who suddenly popped up after 12 years in prison.

I'd say if he cried over anything it would be being stuck at the Durzkaban prision again this summer. Sirius was a way out that he lost and not much more.

Yeah I really do despise JKR making such a potentially likeable character just to desposable. She made us all think Harry would be getting away from the Dursleys, and in a happy place, then she turns around and uses Sirius as an example that the story is firmly getting darker, and noone is safe. It just totally cheapened any of the small interaction they DID actually have together, while at the same time making any crying Harry does over the matter seem unreal.

Hell she could of taken whiny ass Hermione or flipping I've-not-bothered-to-contact-you-in-13 years - Lupin. I personally do like Lupin, but I'd of rather seen him vanish then Sirius.

Lupin will play a larger role in my story, Sirus ain't coming back, Hermione will "bite" it, and I will make Harry a force to be reckoned with, instead of this constant crybaby-unstable act we keep getting.

And I love Durzkaban prison! never heard that term before, but it fits incredibly, I may have to beg you to use that in the Harry/Dumbly arguement coming up, lol

Treck
05-30-2005, 02:46 PM
And I love Durzkaban prison! never heard that term before, but it fits incredibly, I may have to beg you to use that in the Harry/Dumbly arguement coming up, lol

I coined that phrase a long time ago while watching POA. Feel free to use it and the Hogwarts a History thumper. (Hermione who needs some quality time in St Mungos discussing books with Lockhart while wearing a strate jacket)

Midknight
06-04-2005, 03:49 PM
Ill add responses here to reviewers from FF.net, whose answers would take a extreme amount of space, lol


Treck - Kinda hit a sore spot, either that of lack of sleep has made me bitchy, lol. Toms not OOC, he has a incident where he got a vision of him loosing. The Slytherin in him will do what he has to to save his own ass. Right now it's seducing Harry to the dark, by acting alot nicer then he really is.

What hes doing to Harry right now is called spin Harry will find out later, when it's too late, that much of what Tom said was just to forge a fake trust. Tom's not turning into a wuss in the fic, if anything he'll get alot worse, but right now he's got to make sure Harry is at least not against him.


Slow startish maybe, but I'm not going to be like all the other idiots that rush rush rush, and wind up having a god like Harry who still whines like a little girl about everything and doesn't know his ass from a hole in the ground.


I wouldn't say "stuck" at the Dursleys really. Stuck at thier home implies I'm writing about him and his normal life there, but that's far from the turth.

He got back, got punished, locked down. He had his ass whupped good by Vernon after Petunia died, so it's not like he could leave. Lupin comes, heals him, leaves for help when Voldie's there, then the rest of the stuff happens. You could maybe say stuck at the durselys for two chapters maybe, not 8, not in the normal way that phrase would be used.

Is he still there? Yeah he's on the lawn having it out with Voldemort, who is dropping bombs on the boy like baghdad.

Comparion of mine vrs a very popular story in a similar theme

First 8 chapters of mine. 30K something words, alot of it dialogue which I'm not good at, and yet I've been praised for it in emails =P

-We see who winds up on top after it all ends. Who? I dunno you'll have to wait and find out =) The rest of the story is a flashback type deal.

-Introduction of Merlin character, and WHY he left the world, including a cool bit about the Black Death(which was magical plague in nature, a dark lord wanted to wipe out muggles and damned near did) I made Merlin a fleshed out character in the story, instead of just a famous Name that is still around and hasn't interfered with the world for 1,000+ years just for the hell of it. I admit it took a bit longer then I wanted to write it without holes, but it will be important as hell later.

-Voldie and Merlin have been sifting through Harry's memories

-Harry's Aunt dies by a Order traitor, vanishing the small bit of blood protection he has now that Tom's got his blood.

-Vernon blames it on Harry, beats dat ass for it. (Note i actually gave a REAL reason Vernon would beat him so bad, not like everyone else and just HAD him do it b/c he was bored/drunk/made it seem like it always happened that bad.)

-Voldie kills the traitor, Lupin comes to the rescue, runs to get help, Voldie drops tons of bombs that set the whole story up for Harry. Dumble's assassin wizards pushing him more and more to the dark to defend himself, the reason why the Death Eaters were formed, insight into Voldies mind why he feels the way he does.

-Harry gets Excalibur-ish sword, from Merlin slipping into Tom's mind for a moment, the sword is .... bah can't tell ya that it'd ruin everything. Voldie doesn't remeber a spell he cast conjuring the sword, but it seems favorable, and he doesn't want to show he's not in control of himself at the moment, so he plays it down.

-Lupin gets help, we see Dumbles and Fudge going at it, sets up chapters 9-11 where Harry gets his.

-Harry gets to choose to kill Vernon or not, he chooses death, but can't bring himself to go that far yet. Note that i did not having him caring much about killing him, Harry was just simply not ready to do it yet. (No becoming a cold blooded killer out of the blue like alot do, when Harry does his first murder, it'll be for a real reason not just because the author is too lazy to find a good reason)

-Vernon dies, Voldemort casts a verson of the spell he and Snape created to merge Harry with Sirius' magical core/soul making him a great bit stronger due to drawing from 2 magical cores now, the first hint of Sirius is heard in Harry's mind, before he passes out. Harry will hear from "Sirius" in the future.

-Dumbles and crew finally get there, and all hell is about to break loose.

-There has been no ships yet, no Harry suddenly realizing he's madly in love with random chick or someone he's known forever.

-No Super Harry all of a sudden
-No unexplained betrayals, sudden character shifts
-No Mary/Gary sues that just pop out of nowhere to be disposable
-No OOC (Tom is being manipulative remember, he knows he's going to die unless he does something)
-No unbelieveable stuff yet.





Earl of the North (I loved this guy till i sat and looked at all the chapters and how they meshed together, it's a mess of plot holes and characters acting totally different from one part to the next)

-Harry is suddenly framed for murder. Everyone turns on him, despite the fact that he could of been Legimens-ized (spelling?) and found innocent easily.

Despite the fact that it's supposedly hard to impossible to use someone elses wand and get decent results (Ron/Neville) and yet Malfoy casts a incredibly strong spell, kills countless muggles. If there was a masking spell for magical signatures, would the Aurors and Dumbles of all ppl, NOT be aware of it?


-Truth serum is shrugged off senselessly, Dumbles sold him out for no reason. After doing it to Sirius, the fact that it is done again here, and in almost every other Azkaban fic makes it a stupid moment.

-Harry in Azkaban, rushed, within a few moments of bring tossed in prison, in the FIRST chapter, he's met and made up with Bellatrix.

All this happens in the FIRST chapter, the FIRST 1800 words of this story. I could stop here but I won't



-Bella somehow knows about a warlock rune that hasn't been seen for ages, recognizes it, and somehow knows to look for it in the first place

-Oh by the way, Harry's a long forgotten lord.

-Dumbledore has a new prophecy! We've never heard that before! Lets here some more about the new prophecy! No? Oh well, lets change the whole world over it anyway! They stress the Black rod, which to the best of my memory atm, 30 chapters later isn't really mentioned at all.

(Voldmort "vison" in my fic isn't a real vison, it's a mixture of Merlin forcing him to help Harry since noone else will, and the result of Voldemort using the spell he developed on a person with seer talents)

-2300 word chapter 2. Nothing happens that can be explained decently, just a thrown together mosh of points to hurry up and get everything changed.

Chapter 3 - Bella starts teaching him things

-By the way, Lily is descended from a pureblood, and they've just had squibs forever

-Snape is suddenly all for being friends with Harry!

Chapter 4

-Bella and Harry suddenly become life mates/married! All by cutting their hands each accidentally, and accidentally touching each other's cut! (Wow, why aren't more wizard medics married to damned near everyone they help then?)

-They break out of Azkaban, the dementors stand aside afraid of Harry

Chater 5

-They find a huge castle

Chapter 6
-Harry screws her senseless
-Starts screwing with the Ministry, passing all sorts of bills and demands. By the way he owns Hogwarts.

Chapter 7
-Al the background characters believe in Harry, yet not Ron and Hermione. Makes sense.

Chapter 8
-Everyone welcomes Bella with open arms, despite the fact she was one of the most wanted Death Eaters. You get a one sentance line to dismiss them not liking her.

-He gets new wands.

-He begins to make plans for his army, and the Queen of the Ice people (?) shows up. (Despite the fact that he will have a huge army 20 something chapters later, he always insists on going to battles himself with a small guard, and everyone treats him like a wimp, and he whines over it instead of doing something)

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My point of comparing the two? Well mine is new, not really getting reviews on FF.net (which does bug me considering the absolute crap I've seen lately on there get 300+ positive reviews in FIVE DAYS when it was 20K words long, and so typoed yu cnt hardy red it.

Earl of the North is touted as one of the best Harry/Azkabans out there right now, which is why I picked it to compare mine to. It feels rushed (he's corrected this in the last several chapters by doing basically nothing.), massive plot holes, unbelievably allegiance changers, out of character from one chapter to the next (read ahead to where Harry is confronted by the Order.)

In mine, there is build up, no plot holes, everything is explained, you will wind up feeling genuine feelings towards my characters. They are and will be fleshed out, true to how I've written them. Harry will not be a conquering badass in one chapters, and crying like a baby the next over something stupid.


It may feel slow to some, but it is simply because you are not used to reading a story where Harry doesn't become GOD/Lord/Holy snap he's strong in the first 20K words. =P

I intend to try to get at least one or two authors writing in a way that is not simply carbon copying everyone else, with a mad rush to the finish.

Midknight
06-04-2005, 09:37 PM
I did write that when I was read to jump through the 'net and murder another reviewer who sent me a nice expletive filled email, so take it with a grain of salt =)

Treck
06-04-2005, 09:44 PM
I did write that when I was read to jump through the 'net and murder another reviewer who sent me a nice expletive filled email, so take it with a grain of salt =)

THats ok I reviewed pree coffee which is VERY dangerous of me to do *G*

You never did mention who was weilding Tom's wand when James died.

Midknight
06-04-2005, 11:37 PM
I did write that when I was read to jump through the 'net and murder another reviewer who sent me a nice expletive filled email, so take it with a grain of salt =)

THats ok I reviewed pree coffee which is VERY dangerous of me to do *G*

You never did mention who was weilding Tom's wand when James died.

Next chapter will be up shortly. I got majorly pissed off at a email I got and ripped all the chapters off of ff.net to merge some of them. Next chapter stops all the talking and starts all the action =)

I hope anyone that reads the above response and comparison will understand what I mean by rushing a story, it realllllllly kills me when I hear that, lol. The comparison part was mostly for anyone who says that to me, if it was just you, I wouldn't of been so pissy about it =)

Dark Syaoran
06-14-2005, 11:37 AM
What did the email say?

I thought it was going along nicely my self. Didnt think anything had to be changed but it doesnt matter. Instead of nine chapters its five, meh.

Some people just dont understand a good build up. They want it all rushed so it gets into the action quickly like some other stories. But then when its rushed, things get over looked.

And thats when Plot Holes appear.

Then those same people have a cry because things werent explained properly. Can't win, eh? :P

ghst.san
06-14-2005, 01:12 PM
Ohhhh poor old midknight dont cry, I really like your story, I am just too lazy to write reviews ^^. I also like your dialogs (spoon lol ^^). The problem is that many authors write about completly unnecessary things like cloths, but forget to write about why a character is doing this and what his intentions are. Dont get me wrong, I have nothing against a author who describes his character, but it gets boring when it stretches over a whole chapter.

Midknight
06-14-2005, 10:49 PM
What did the email say?

I thought it was going along nicely my self. Didnt think anything had to be changed but it doesnt matter. Instead of nine chapters its five, meh.

Some people just dont understand a good build up. They want it all rushed so it gets into the action quickly like some other stories. But then when its rushed, things get over looked.

And thats when Plot Holes appear.

Then those same people have a cry because things werent explained properly. Can't win, eh? :P

Just one of the author's I mentioned in one of my posts here or on FF.net responses, about his story being like 5 days old, nearly unreadable with typos, god forsaken amounts of errors, and yet 300+ reviews of people riding his nutsack screaming how great his "Harry + Ginny
coming together since they have both been possessed" angle is.

I'm working on a few chapters ahead and Harry's four turns just extremely bitter at that hellhole that is FF.net atm.

I merged the chapters, because I felt that if people REALLY wanted to rush the interaction with Voldie and Harry, and miss the *counts* 13 foreshadowing hints I dropped in there.. screw them, let them skip the one chapter, and get on with the Fudge dialogue.

The reviews and the email just hit at a time where I didn't feel too hot to start with, and I'm just blatantly pissed off that such trash gets their jock ridden.

Any of you looked at the thread I locked, the main story thread, and seen the teasers?

LT2000
06-14-2005, 10:57 PM
I too get frustrated with extremely bad (or at best mediocre) fics getting hundreds upon hundreds of reviews based simply upon the ships they sail. I could think of quite a few offhand, but don't particularly care to list names.

Midknight
06-14-2005, 11:43 PM
I too get frustrated with extremely bad (or at best mediocre) fics getting hundreds upon hundreds of reviews based simply upon the ships they sail. I could think of quite a few offhand, but don't particularly care to list names.

Aye I called out Earl of the North, which is THE Harry/Azkaban + Harry/Bella fic out right now to read, and I must've pissed off every reviewer he's ever had with the hate I got, lol.

I stand by my statements on it though

Dark Syaoran
06-15-2005, 01:33 AM
lol.

If its a good story, its a good story. It isnt good because Harry is with Tonks or whatever and they like it. Most shippers are annoying.

Midknight
06-15-2005, 09:52 PM
lol.

If its a good story, its a good story. It isnt good because Harry is with Tonks or whatever and they like it. Most shippers are annoying.

Aye.

I've gotten alot of questions about the amount of ships I have in mine.

None are all fluffy and romantic at all, some are down right twisted.

It's no Harry/Harem story

IndoGhost
06-16-2005, 01:23 AM
people need to learn it a book about a kid who is fated to kill or be killed where do you see the romance in that...ok it could be like shakespere(sp) or something... but no you dont see any romance that works with harry he could play around but thats all not " i love you,(name of character). will we marry me?" while still in school it does not work

Dark Syaoran
06-16-2005, 06:35 AM
lol.

Yeah, Harry should get some in canon. Seriously, he should get some serious booty. :P

Antivash
06-16-2005, 08:07 AM
<__< if the kid'll stop being a whiney bitch im all for it... give the kid some serious knock your socks off older experienced pussy... or even one of these uptight idiot fangirls from the school.. so long as it s not hermy or ginny..

Midknight
06-16-2005, 02:39 PM
<__< if the kid'll stop being a whiney bitch im all for it... give the kid some serious knock your socks off older experienced pussy... or even one of these uptight idiot fangirls from the school.. so long as it s not hermy or ginny..

Like I said before, Harry is going to make Bella his bitch, and use her in all sorts of ways.

Voldy gives Bella to him, as a way of getting a spy in close, and bonds her to him, as long as he doesn't kill her.

Harry + Bella = some fun scenes with experimenting. I have to go over it all when I finish writing it to figure out just what I want to keep @ ff.net and try to stick to the M rating, lol.

Tonks is around for a short bit, sadly she's gonna kick it.

Ginny is a funny case, Hermy's only going to get slobbered on from Fluffy as he tears her into a million bits.
The Patils I'll keep quiet about for now, but it's gonna be funny.

Dark Syaoran
06-17-2005, 02:22 AM
In the next book, if he is screaming at everyone again, i'm burning it.

I understand that he's gonna be angry but hell... if he chills abit, bangs some random fangirl, its all good.

Antivash
06-18-2005, 04:12 PM
In the next book, if he is screaming at everyone again, i'm burning it.

I understand that he's gonna be angry but hell... if he chills abit, bangs some random fangirl, its all good.
*nods* .. agreed... id have said the same thing if JKR killed tonks as well but shes already said she would be around a while..

seriously.. the guy needs to get his rocks off... im sure if he asked real nicely he could even manage to get four or five fangirls at the same time... and if we use the popular cho's a slut idea.. cho as well..

nightangel960
06-18-2005, 05:16 PM
true.. it would help him calm down considerability

Dark Syaoran
06-19-2005, 03:04 AM
They'll work the anger outta him. Bugger talking about it, just get some. Sirius would be proud. Apparently he was a ladies man... well, before he went to Azkaban for 12 years. Thats how everyone writes him in their stories anyway.

That 'Cho's a slut' theme is weird. I dont like her very much but only because she talks about her ex's and where they took her doesnt mean she's easy. If she was, Harry woulda got some his 4th year during the Tri-Wizard. She woulda jumped him in the hall and dragged him into an empty classroom. Doesnt matter if she's with Cedric because she is a 'whore'.

Midknight
06-19-2005, 03:46 AM
They'll work the anger outta him. Bugger talking about it, just get some. Sirius would be proud. Apparently he was a ladies man... well, before he went to Azkaban for 12 years. Thats how everyone writes him in their stories anyway.

That 'Cho's a slut' theme is weird. I dont like her very much but only because she talks about her ex's and where they took her doesnt mean she's easy. If she was, Harry woulda got some his 4th year during the Tri-Wizard. She woulda jumped him in the hall and dragged him into an empty classroom. Doesnt matter if she's with Cedric because she is a 'whore'.

I don't see her as a whore, more of a mentally unstable young chick who got really latched onto her first boyfriend that shagged her.

I'm sure we ALL know a girl whose gotten beyond obsessed at a boyfriend at one point in time or another, lol.


-On a side note, I've felt like crap lately, so the story hasn't had it's weekly update this week. Got alot of dental work done, 4 cavities, and a wisdom tooth pulled, and they found a nice "growth" in my right sinus cavity. Got to love how there's never anything wrong with you till you go to a doctor!@

Got vacation the week of the 3rd of July, and that's going to be filled with a CT scan and fun blood tests, yay!

Antivash
06-19-2005, 10:41 AM
I dont thnk shes a whore OR mentally unstable.. ithink what it is is that shes overly emotional, and like mid said, got attached to her first shag partner. Its not uncommon, as far as i know. women desire romance and the so called mr. right, rather than the hot and avalible mrs right now that guys are looking for..

Dark Syaoran
06-20-2005, 03:08 AM
I bet Cho and Cedric had some pretty good times in the prefects bath. I wonder if Myrtle watched... :P

Nytmare
07-12-2005, 08:24 PM
Cho and Cedric? well as far as i can tell, she seemed to only want to know the famous guys, I mean she showed an interest in harry until another triwizard champion asked her to go to the ball with him, alright I agree that she might have eventually gotten attached to him but still, It's there in big NEON blashing sign's "I am a gold digger."
Well, thats how I percieved her character anyway, to me it looked like she was used to bring out some emotion in harry and bring to light the " they only like me cause i'm famous" thing.

Antivash
07-13-2005, 07:30 PM
I dun think so... i think cho is just like every other character... ignored until she has a use.. and i think that put her in a bad light l

Midknight
07-13-2005, 07:43 PM
Cho and Cedric? well as far as i can tell, she seemed to only want to know the famous guys, I mean she showed an interest in harry until another triwizard champion asked her to go to the ball with him, alright I agree that she might have eventually gotten attached to him but still, It's there in big NEON blashing sign's "I am a gold digger."
Well, thats how I percieved her character anyway, to me it looked like she was used to bring out some emotion in harry and bring to light the " they only like me cause i'm famous" thing.

Hadnt thought about that angle

Nytmare
07-15-2005, 07:33 PM
you might be right Vash, but that also makes her an expendable asset, so she might end up getting whacked by the big bad V for some reason.(siad reason possibly being cause Harry had a thing for her)
god I hope he's over her in the HBP!

IndoGhost
07-15-2005, 07:36 PM
I thought he was over her at the end of OotP

Midknight
07-15-2005, 09:14 PM
I thought he was over her at the end of OotP

Aye he is.

Midknight
07-23-2005, 10:56 PM
Treck = You hit something on the head, lol wait for Percy's article in the prophet and the series it launches off to find out what.

New chapt is up

IndoGhost
07-24-2005, 12:45 AM
that was great i got goosebups off it

Midknight
07-24-2005, 01:44 AM
tyvm.

Next chapter, Percy reports to Voldie, Harry and Lupin have their talk and Tonks makes her apperance felt. Some fun bits with Ginny and Ron.

After that, Daily prophet release of Percy's story, and Harry's descent into dark.

ChuckDaTruck
07-27-2005, 10:29 PM
YES!! :twisted:

Upload it, man. I can't wait to read it!!

Dark Syaoran
07-28-2005, 03:33 AM
Oooo, fun bits with Ron and Ginny? *gets all giddy* Does it involve kitchenware?

Vecna
07-28-2005, 05:05 AM
Damn you all making me thing he uploaded =(

Midknight
07-28-2005, 09:34 PM
Damn you all making me thing he uploaded =(

?

I did add a new chapter when I posted, should be chapter 7 http://www.fanfiction.net/s/2394411/7/

IndoGhost
07-28-2005, 10:22 PM
i wonder who will harry get with first? tonks...bella...or the twins?

Midknight
07-28-2005, 11:05 PM
i wonder who will harry get with first? tonks...bella...or the twins?

Tonks, then Bella. Bella fills in a odd role for awhile before she and him hook up. Ginny comes in next, followed by the twins later on.

I'm having alot of trouble with Tonks. I know exactly, word for word, the deal with Bella, it's been in my head since I first saw the character.

Tonks is proving to be a bitch to write believably and in the way I want. I refuse to write it all corny and lovey, and it's kicking my ass.

IndoGhost
07-28-2005, 11:18 PM
you have all the time in the world...this is your fic after all

ChuckDaTruck
07-29-2005, 12:34 AM
Yeah, dude, quality before quantity.

I only speak for myself, but I'd rather get 1 great update every other week than a bunch of shitty ones twice a week.

Vecna
07-29-2005, 10:20 AM
Damn you all making me thing he uploaded =(

?

I did add a new chapter when I posted, should be chapter 7 http://www.fanfiction.net/s/2394411/7/

nm i r on crack :oops:

ChuckDaTruck
08-04-2005, 08:34 PM
Please update again. I know its only been a few days, but I'm hooked like a junkie. it your fault., You did this to me. FUCK YOU!!!

just update okay. You and Seraphath are fucking me up real bad.


Harry has them swear to him by taking part of their magic, if they betray him at any level, they die, and their magic is forfeit


Seriouly, Midknight, don't do that though, because if you do, you'll have to explain why DUmbledore and Voldemort don't do this. Its a major plot hole JK created. Don't fall into the same trap just to show her how stupid it is.

But if you can work it in so it fits with the plot, then go for it. I'll certainly be impressed :D

Giovanni
08-04-2005, 11:22 PM
There is still a way to work it in... But please do it some other way...

Midknight
08-05-2005, 12:43 AM
nada, I'm doing it, I explained how in another thread,

He's going, in the draft I'm using now anyway, to Antarctica, and unearths the ruins of the high elf empire, that are buried under miles of ice, the result of a spell cast wrong to hide themselves from the world.

He comes across a spell the high kings used to bind their stewards to them whenever they would ride out to war, so you wouldn't have any of that "Steward of Gondor, but fuck that I'll act like a king no matter where the real king is" crap.

The loyalty bit one of the smaller plot holes she's left that I'm going after, trust me, I'm abusing canon and calling it my bitch and you're gonna love it =P

Dark Syaoran
08-05-2005, 04:04 AM
Weeeeeeeee! Can't wait till the next update! IM FREAKING OUTT!@#~

ChuckDaTruck
08-05-2005, 11:23 AM
I was wondering is Harry hooking up with anyone in your story?


I say go with, hmmm? I'll get back on this. But, yeah, Harry gonna get laid? I mean he is going to Azkaban, and the dude is still a virgin.

IndoGhost
08-05-2005, 11:47 AM
i'll answer this for midknight Harry Bella, Tonks, Patils that;s by my understanding unless he's changed it

ChuckDaTruck
08-05-2005, 01:20 PM
SWEET!! :D

Midknight
08-05-2005, 05:56 PM
i'll answer this for midknight Harry Bella, Tonks, Patils that;s by my understanding unless he's changed it

Its still the same.

Bella he gets a a "tiding to seal the deal of temporary peace between hi and Voldie, and he takes out a great bit of his anger on her... but since she likes it she eventually winds up screwing his brains outs."

Tonks I'll keep quiet about, the patils i'm working on researching, and I've written a few test chapters to try to figure out how to pull it off. The Patils I included simply out of someone here saying they'd love to see both twins do Harry.

Azkaban is a bit off, i'm catching heat for calling it a Azkaban story, and not starting it with him already INSIDE prison.

Who the fuck wants to read story #2282 where he's mad, in jail for something he DIDN'T do, breaks out, beomces god, and either stays pissed or makes up with everyone.

My Harry IS going, but he's going to fucking deserve going when he does, trust me on dat, none of this "Malfoy set me up shit"

ChuckDaTruck
08-05-2005, 06:50 PM
Any tips on how he's getting out?

Midknight
08-05-2005, 07:06 PM
Any tips on how he's getting out?

I was going to have *************** buy the damned island, but after reading so many horrible lord of azkaban fics, I decided against that.

I'm waiting to see how a few things are reacted to before i make up my mind, because they both kick ass, and I can't decided, and I can't say without ruining a large twist =(

ChuckDaTruck
08-05-2005, 07:08 PM
Dude, update. I really am eager to see what happens.

Dark Syaoran
08-06-2005, 12:33 AM
Takes his anger out on Bella? Hah, of course she'd like it.

The Patil twins would be a hard one but im sure you'll come up with something. Maybe's its been one of 'their' biggest dreams to do it or something, lol.

GO GO GO!

LT2000
08-06-2005, 01:07 AM
I dunno about the Patils in this story. I mean, I'm all for Harry have sex with a pair of hot twins also, but I just can't see the protagonist that you've fashioned being willing to tolerate the presence of an airhead like Parvati. I don't really see him working with Tonks for much the same reason. I don't see the metamorphmagus as being stupid or airheaded, mind, but she does seem to be a sort of fun-loving and happy-go-lucky type (at least until Rowling had her go all emo pining for the bloody sodding werewolf in Harry Potter and the Half-Baked Plot). Harry seems to be way too dark and hateful in this story to work with Tonks. Just my humble opinion here, but I think you'd be best off pairing him exclusively with a psychotic Bellatrix and having done with it. That also avoids the rather cliched scenario of pairing him with more than one member of the Black family.

ChuckDaTruck
08-06-2005, 01:17 AM
Bah! We don't know enough about Tonks. He could recreate her anyway he wanted.

IndoGhost
08-06-2005, 01:37 AM
Tonks is an Auror that means she has some skills and her fun loving could help keep harry sane where as if he stayed with just bella then he would be crazier then well crazy. and anyway it's the wizarding world they marry cousions off if thats legal then so is Polygyny

ChuckDaTruck
08-06-2005, 01:42 AM
True. I like Tonks. Padma Patil is unknown other than she went to the Yule Balle with Ron, and Parvati went with Harry (or the other way around). This is really the extent of it. And what's wrong with airheads anyway, I'll have you know that some of the best tail I've gotten has been from drunken air-heads :D :wink:

IndoGhost
08-06-2005, 01:46 AM
some of the airheads i know are down right evil if pushed to far.they will stop at nothnig to get back at you.

ChuckDaTruck
08-06-2005, 01:48 AM
that's a good point.

Midknight
08-06-2005, 02:18 AM
some of the airheads i know are down right evil if pushed to far.they will stop at nothnig to get back at you.

exactly.

As for Tonks, don't worry about her, she's there for a reason.

IndoGhost
08-09-2005, 09:09 PM
i cant wait for the next chapter :cry:

Midknight
08-09-2005, 11:02 PM
i cant wait for the next chapter :cry:

I broke it in the only spot I could, and I'm not happy with it at all.

I'm working on trying to make what happens next believable, instead of

-Harry does this
Ginny does this
Ron bitches
Hermione IS a bitch
Molly butts in, all hell breaks loose when Harry tells her to go pop another bun in her oven if she wants to mother another damned child, and leave him the fuck alone cause he aint it, etc

Dark Syaoran
08-09-2005, 11:13 PM
Muwhahahahaha!

I wanna read what happens badly! BADLY!

Will Harry cope a feel of anyone... sorry, of topic there. lol.

There is a Padma/Harry story that's getting underway on FF.Net. They only problem i have with it so far is that he has become a 'Lord'. He is apart of the wizmagnort or whatever the fuck its called so its not THAT bad.

IndoGhost
08-09-2005, 11:16 PM
take you time...i'll try and wait...gotta find someting fun to do *goes off to torture Severitus*

Midknight
08-09-2005, 11:19 PM
Muwhahahahaha!

I wanna read what happens badly! BADLY!

Will Harry cope a feel of anyone... sorry, of topic there. lol.

There is a Padma/Harry story that's getting underway on FF.Net. They only problem i have with it so far is that he has become a 'Lord'. He is apart of the wizmagnort or whatever the fuck its called so its not THAT bad.

The Harry/Ginny groundwork gets laid in this chapter.

Remember I hate Harry/Ginny, so its there for a GOOD reason =P

I don't mind stories where he is called a Lord if theres a good damned reason for it, but when it's just because he comes of age or something, it's retarded. You don't hear Lucius being referred to as Lord, or Fudge, and they're supposedly amount the strongest politically purebloods there is.

Not to mention, even if they did, not everyone in the world is going to do it, every.single.time. they talk to Harry, lol.

Whats the link to it?

Dark Syaoran
08-09-2005, 11:21 PM
http://www.fanfiction.net/s/2512323/4/ - Harry Potter and The Breaking of Bonds

He is now living right next door to the twins.

Midknight
08-09-2005, 11:30 PM
I dunno about the Patils in this story. I mean, I'm all for Harry have sex with a pair of hot twins also, but I just can't see the protagonist that you've fashioned being willing to tolerate the presence of an airhead like Parvati. I don't really see him working with Tonks for much the same reason. I don't see the metamorphmagus as being stupid or airheaded, mind, but she does seem to be a sort of fun-loving and happy-go-lucky type (at least until Rowling had her go all emo pining for the bloody sodding werewolf in Harry Potter and the Half-Baked Plot). Harry seems to be way too dark and hateful in this story to work with Tonks. Just my humble opinion here, but I think you'd be best off pairing him exclusively with a psychotic Bellatrix and having done with it. That also avoids the rather cliched scenario of pairing him with more than one member of the Black family.

I kept meaning to reply to that and keep getting sidetracked.

The twins are there simply to see if I can do it. They'll be changed a bit due to circumstances, and not so annoying.

Tonks has more behind her then it first appears, and she's not exactly going to be center stage material, that role will belong to Bella. And remember I refuse to fucking use anything from HBP for my story, so Tonks is more of a Weird Sisters goth oriented chick then the love struck bullshit.

Harry isn't going to stay so dark, it's just at the time of those events hes just had his first civil conversation with Voldemort, he doesn't know what to believe, as alot of what Voldie says makes sense, and appears to be more truth then spin (alot of it's truth save for a few huge things)

I gave my Harry a good reason to be mad, he finds Fudge and Peter conspired to set Sirius up, he offs Fudge, and then Dumbes stops him from killing Peter, and instead portkeys the man away (ya know I expected SOMEONE to comment on the portkey method I used.. I thought it was fricking cool and I got no love for it =( )

It wasn't prolonged hate, you'll see it ebbing out of him towards others, and even Dumbles after enough time. I didn't turn Harry into a hate filled war mongering idiot, not with that much hot ass he's got around him, lol

Harry+Bella+Tonks I agree is getting cliche, with everyone doing it as threesomes. Trust me when I say it ain't going there with them two.

IndoGhost
08-09-2005, 11:39 PM
Harry+Bella+Tonks I agree is getting cliche, with everyone doing it as threesomes. Trust me when I say it ain't going there with them two.

what cliche is hard to find someone who can pull it off and i can hardly find any fic with those three

Hubert
08-10-2005, 12:01 AM
( ya know I expected SOMEONE to comment on the portkey method I used.. I thought it was fricking cool and I got no love for it =( )

Well consider it commented on. It was.......good.

I can't remember if you've mentioned an animagus form for Harry or not( and to be honest i can't be bothered looking) but i want to see a fic where either he just straight out doesn't have the ability or has some sort of useless form, like a duck.

IndoGhost
08-10-2005, 12:13 AM
omg please make him a evil duck....yes please :o

Hubert
08-10-2005, 12:16 AM
I can just see a duck wadling along with a wand in its bill and voldemort chasing after it. :lol:

IndoGhost
08-10-2005, 12:25 AM
me too i can voldemort and all his death eater chaseing it...they dont use magic aginst it fearing they would brake voldemort wand....i can see them chaseing the duck back and forth lol

Midknight
08-10-2005, 12:27 AM
( ya know I expected SOMEONE to comment on the portkey method I used.. I thought it was fricking cool and I got no love for it =( )

Well consider it commented on. It was.......good.

I can't remember if you've mentioned an animagus form for Harry or not( and to be honest i can't be bothered looking) but i want to see a fic where either he just straight out doesn't have the ability or has some sort of useless form, like a duck.

ty, I wanted to do it differently, but Dumbles doing the Mission Impossible "explosive gum" style bit with the slamming a portkey gallen on the center of Peter's head was too good for me not to do.


Harry will NOT have an animagus form in the story, I've argued on this forums against fanfic authors suddenly making every godamned person that is around Harry an animagus. For something that supposedly only a handful could do each century, fan authors make everyone they can one, and it irks the snot out of me.

Remember I've flat out said I'm going to bash the shit out of way overused cliches, animagi will not be sacred, lol.

It'll go something like Harry takes a potion to reveal if you have potential to turn into an animagi, after like 10 ppl have taken it.

None of them get it, so when Golden boy pops up, you KNOW he's gonna have a phoenix, unicorn, centaur, etc millions of damned forms...

Except he doesnt. He'll come back with something like, "What the hell is me turning into a dog or a bug going to do? I'm not going to kill Voldemort with a case of rabies you stupid tossers"

Hubert
08-10-2005, 12:35 AM
Good to hear. I had faith you wouldn't give Harry an animagus form. Still the idea of a duck intrigues me. I may have to include it in the fic im working on, if i ever get around to seriously writing it.

ChuckDaTruck
08-10-2005, 12:37 AM
cool.

Midknight, Is Harry going to have a familiar in your story. (I have this Idea for you if you want. Harry wants a powerful familiar but he doesn't want a new one. So he goes through a ritual to make her more powerful (do it on her 7th birthday as 7 is more magically powerful) Anyway, she turns into an Ice Owl, with the ability to create balls of ice (maximum size of volleyball) and blow cold the way dragons breathe fire. Anyway,


I've thought of all types of magical creatures I'm gonna use in my story (because 52 is not enough, (great work JK on Magical Beasts and where to Find Them)

Midknight
08-10-2005, 01:04 AM
cool.

Midknight, Is Harry going to have a familiar in your story. (I have this Idea for you if you want. Harry wants a powerful familiar but he doesn't want a new one. So he goes through a ritual to make her more powerful (do it on her 7th birthday as 7 is more magically powerful) Anyway, she turns into an Ice Owl, with the ability to create balls of ice (maximum size of volleyball) and blow cold the way dragons breathe fire.

Excaliber is in a way, but Harry is going to have... er... animilistic qualities of his own in a way thanks to a care package from Lupin.

I may kill Hedwig just to be an ass about it and to make fun of 2929298 azkaban stories where she gets killed.

Harry: OMFG WTF, Hedwig is dead?
Ron and Hermione: Don't look at us convict we're not sick enough to kill a defenseless bird, how fucking stupid do you have to be to think something like that?

I had an idea for using Excalibur as a type of familiar waaaaaaaaayyyy back in 2003 when I started first collecting notes. I think Omagic or halstead did some factfinding for me on the end scene of this story, and I wound up changing it either because I thought up something different, or I got bored.

(The ending is written and set in stone, I just have to work towards it. You see the aftermath of the battle years later in the prologue. The ending is as old as GOF's release week, lol)

Take a look @ Prince of Darkness, and see how he's using the Fallen God trapped in the sword. It won't be "quite" like that but it's similar in a far fetched way.

ChuckDaTruck
08-17-2005, 09:05 PM
hope you update again soon.

Midknight
08-17-2005, 11:30 PM
Ive got 3 quarters of the next one done, I'm just dealing with really bad writers block.


It's like... I got the start done, the middle (he is going to antarctica) the end (one of the most incredible final battles ever, the ending has been done for years)

its just the small shit in between everything that pisses me off.

Dark Syaoran
08-18-2005, 02:11 AM
True.

I can't wait for the final battle when it finally gets there.

Anonymous
08-29-2005, 12:04 AM
I hope you update again soon.

Midknight
08-29-2005, 01:17 AM
havent been home much, many of my posting are from other pcs, at work, on the road, etc.

I'll have another 2 chapts up soon though

Nuit
08-29-2005, 07:47 AM
Woohoo

IndoGhost
08-29-2005, 11:18 AM
yyyyyyyyyyyyyyyeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeessssssssssssssssss ssss!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! :D

Dark Syaoran
08-30-2005, 03:33 AM
lol @ Mid's sig.

Whore Ginny trying to woo animangus Harry squirel!

ChuckDaTruck
08-30-2005, 08:22 PM
FUCK GINNY!!!! :twisted: :twisted: :twisted: :twisted:


MIDKNIGHT!! UPDATE SOON!!! :( :(

:wink: :wink: :wink:

Dark Syaoran
08-30-2005, 09:55 PM
I agree, i'm dying to find out what's going to happen. I'll have to read the chapters again so I can remember everything.

IndoGhost
08-31-2005, 12:25 AM
please update, please

Midknight
08-31-2005, 07:11 PM
I agree, i'm dying to find out what's going to happen. I'll have to read the chapters again so I can remember everything.

yeah =(

I'm looking for a beta soon to bounce ideas off of I think, i've just been home so little lately, I couldn't even log on to check the bards the past 2 days @ work, much less @ home. Hell i'm @ work now damnit =/

Dark Syaoran
09-01-2005, 01:10 AM
Bounce ideas off me anytime, i'm willing to put in my 2 cents.

ChuckDaTruck
09-02-2005, 04:29 AM
I'll be able to help out occasionally.

PLEASE UPDATE!! :( :(

Midknight
09-02-2005, 06:16 PM
Ah finally home. I've got 3 days off, so I'll toss some up this weekened.

Due to the godamned gas deal, they're talking about making us do 4 12's .... god just freaking )*&^@*&^*&@ bah n/m

ChuckDaTruck
09-02-2005, 09:34 PM
YES!!!

Antivash
09-02-2005, 10:17 PM
I'm looking for a beta soon to bounce ideas off of I think, i've just been home so little lately, I couldn't even log on to check the bards the past 2 days @ work, much less @ home. Hell i'm @ work now damnit =/

Ive got to reinstall Xfire and Aim but ill be avalible after 4pm central time if ya like to throw things at me.... <_< im always on the damn compy as ive got little energy for doing anything else after dealing with that fucking bastard Ali ...

God i hate that man... i think i hate him enough that i would even subject him to participating in Dumbledore's office orgy

Giovanni
09-02-2005, 11:08 PM
^ Should give Giovanni a description of said person and Giovanni will gladly write him into the Office Orgy.

FUCK GINNY!!!!

HELL NO!!!!
HAVE YOU LOST YOUR DAMNED MIND???

Antivash
09-03-2005, 12:50 AM
^ Should give Giovanni a description of said person and Giovanni will gladly write him into the Office Orgy.



nah.. cant do that... then id seem racist.. and im not... i hate all races equally..

Giovanni
09-03-2005, 08:32 AM
^ Can PM Giovanni with description... Giovanni wont look down on silly Vash as long as he hates every race the same... Including his own.

ChuckDaTruck
09-04-2005, 05:17 PM
UPDATE!!!


PLEASE!!! I'M DESPERATE!!

Midknight
09-04-2005, 05:43 PM
did you read my locked topic in work by author that has the next 5Kish words. I've hit a writer block rewriting a few things and have been stuck for a bit now.

ChuckDaTruck
09-04-2005, 05:47 PM
no where is it

Nuit
09-04-2005, 05:52 PM
Midknight's story (http://forums.darklordpotter.net/viewtopic.php?p=12888#12888)

Midknight
09-04-2005, 08:50 PM
no where is it

lol didn't realize I had posted the story first here I take it?

It was all the original content I removed, along with another 50 or 60 replies to trim it down once I locked it for the revised content. Now that I'm up to date here I'll probably post the new stuff here first, then follow it to ff.net later if i don't see glaring plotholes or something.

At around 6500 views total, they hold the record for views for one story on this site, and I think my threads individually hold the records for views in the #1 and #2 spots anywhere or single threads, INCLUDING games! I locked my main story thread for the simple fact I didn't want it OT and like I said I deleted a good number of replies, lol.

That's damned impressive, considering how on topic my 2 threads have stayed, compared to other high count threads that talk about everything but the story.

ChuckDaTruck
09-05-2005, 04:26 PM
Brilliant!

My question is why does Harry trust Kingsley and Tonks so quickly? How does he know that they ARE loyal to Dumbledore and were sent to spy on him? DUmbledore may be many things, but stupid he is not.


ANyway, it was FANTASTIC!!! I LOVED seeing Ginny getting attacked and hurt. Hate that bitch.


UPDATE SOON! :D

Midknight
09-05-2005, 09:19 PM
Brilliant!

My question is why does Harry trust Kingsley and Tonks so quickly? How does he know that they ARE loyal to Dumbledore and were sent to spy on him? DUmbledore may be many things, but stupid he is not.


ANyway, it was FANTASTIC!!! I LOVED seeing Ginny getting attacked and hurt. Hate that bitch.


UPDATE SOON! :D


He just assumes they are there for either the Ministry to arrest him, or for Dumbles to do something to him. When neither do anything, and both speak out against him, he relaxes his gaurd a bit. He's wary enough not to be off his gaurd and figures Lupin will help him if either tries to take him by force. What Kingsley says makes perfect sense to him, and is in fact the truth.

Ginny was originally going to die in that scene, and Harry was going to leave her there in a pool of her own blood and go to another room to sleep, unaware she'd be bleeding to death, but since I cut a part out of the start of the story, and since I felt it didn't fit with Harry's attitude yet, I made her just get injured.

There's very few things I hate in fanfiction more then cliches, and among the top of the cliche list is a slap happy Ginny. The bitch barely knows Harry, but for some reason all ff writers want to make her slap the spit out of him and turn into a ranting Mrs. Weasley. Thats the other thing I can't stand. The bitch did NOT spit Harry out of her womb, so she needs to keep her damned mouth shut.

Alot of the writers let Harry be yelled at by everyone, and he just takes it. At 15, if someone yelled at me, I yelled back or acted on it, I didn't stand there like a punk and take it, it's unrealistic to make the guy a God, but turn him into a bitch everytime something with A-cups is yelling at him.

ChuckDaTruck
09-06-2005, 12:28 PM
lol

ChuckDaTruck
09-07-2005, 07:30 PM
CHARLIE WANT UPDATE!!!! ARGGGGHHHHH!!! :begins breaking things in his room:


:looks around horrified as he realizes he broke everything in his room:

The Chosen One
09-07-2005, 08:16 PM
good fic just wondering if you have a regular update schedule?

Vecna
09-07-2005, 09:35 PM
Yes his schedule is update every time he finishes a chapter :P

Midknight
09-07-2005, 11:39 PM
good fic just wondering if you have a regular update schedule?

I did, and was doing then weekly, then it got shot to hell by millions of dollars more work coming my way, and I got screwed with no vacation time to take, bah. Doesn't help the people around me are idiots and I get sent all the fun/hard stuff to deal with. Try telling someone if they want it done right, it's gonna cost them several hundred grand more then they thought, and I think you'll be able to see why I have no free time, lol.

I've got around 5Kish works of the next chapter up, but I hit a nasty writers block. If I can get around it, the next several chapters will flow easy, as I already have them outlined, I'm just struggling with a way to do a few key interactions atm, that can't be dealt with the way they need to be, when I have 5 minutes of free time, on a PC that has copies of my notes. All this posting is done via laptop, or various other ways of connecting, that sadly ain't from home =(

I'm activley searching for a beta I can trust, I may just forcibly draft Dark Syaoran into that role. I know some of the admins here would do it, but I'd rather have them as objective readers, then beta ones

The story is not in hiatus, in fact, I've got large chunks of later chapters pre written, and you can see the teasers for it in the main story thread in Work by Author, it's the second post I think from the bottom, last page. I've just got to get past this one part and need time to do it =*(

Dark Syaoran
09-08-2005, 03:07 AM
Forcibly, eh? How kinky of you Midknight, lol.

Beta sounds good since your kinda helping me with my story also.

Midknight
09-08-2005, 08:03 PM
Forcibly, eh? How kinky of you Midknight, lol.

Beta sounds good since your kinda helping me with my story also.

Rofl, i R not kinky, meh whip is straight!

Dark Syaoran
09-09-2005, 02:58 AM
LOL.

Anonymous
09-17-2005, 06:31 PM
Have you abandoned this story?

RagefulLlama
09-17-2005, 07:02 PM
Er *guest* . . . have you read this thread?

Midknight
09-17-2005, 09:40 PM
Have you abandoned this story?

No, as stated above I've got zero free time atm (multiple millions of dollars worth of jobs rushed me at once), and all my posting save for maybe a hour or two a week is done on either a blackberry, a PDA, a wireless laptop, or a office PC that does not have copies of my files for the story.

Sticking drafts on them is not possible either as our company is nazi with that crap.

There is a 4K word teaser for the next chapter in the locked story thread I have here, I managed to write that in a hurry, and it's not been checked for errors or continuity errors at all. I drafted Dark into the beta role, as I'm helping him with his fic occasionaly via PM's so I need to get around to my home PC to ship him the notes and spoilers to help me, lol

I'm hesitant to call the story on hiatius because I'm activley jotting down things I'm going to do with it, and I see idiots who haven't updated in a year not flag their story as abandonded =(

Don't worry I promised I wouldn't abandon it, and I wont. It'll be finished till the final battle on Azkaban island.. or what's left of it, and then the sequel is actually more written then Traitor's is

Dark Syaoran
09-18-2005, 02:27 AM
Sequal... I like the sound of that.

Midknight
09-18-2005, 02:28 AM
Sequal... I like the sound of that.

Remind me to send you the ending of the story if you wanna see it it's in rough draft form already

Dark Syaoran
09-18-2005, 02:31 AM
Well, you have to send me most of your shit anyway so that can just come with it. I'm dying to see how its gonna end thou.

Midknight
09-18-2005, 02:42 AM
Well, you have to send me most of your shit anyway so that can just come with it. I'm dying to see how its gonna end thou.

speaking of which have you done any research yet for yours?

ChuckDaTruck
09-20-2005, 02:17 PM
Yo quiero UPDATE!!! :D :D :D

Midknight
09-20-2005, 08:41 PM
I got sidetracked, but added another 3K words to the teaser I had up here.

Making my notes presentable for Dark to look over atm.

Dark Syaoran
09-21-2005, 03:51 AM
Im afraid I might have to read... HBP... again. I've forgotten so much of it already because I dont like thinking about shitty things.

ChuckDaTruck
09-21-2005, 01:30 PM
Where's the teaser? I went to your work by author thing and it still has the same stopping point of "didn't give two knuts about her." Which is great, I just don't see where you added more. Sorry, I'm probably retarded and just can't follow. But I still want to read it. :D just a few directions for the stupid (i.e. me). Ok? please. :makes puppy dog face:

:kicks self for being that stupid, and puppy faces never work:

Midknight
09-21-2005, 07:46 PM
no that's the same old teaser sadly. I'm out of town tonight, so maybe tom. or Sat night. I have Friday off to write, thank god for a day off, been working 6 days for awhile now.

ChuckDaTruck
09-22-2005, 05:56 PM
SWEET!!! :D :D :D :D :D

ChuckDaTruck
09-23-2005, 11:13 PM
God!!! YOu're like a stripper! I want to get closer and get more, BUT I CAN'T!!! I love/Hate strippers. They take all my money. :goes to be alone in a corner:



UPDATE!!! YOU can't do this to people; you can't be such a tease.


UPDATE!!! :D :D

IndoGhost
09-23-2005, 11:27 PM
God!!! YOu're like a stripper! I want to get closer and get more, BUT I CAN'T!!! I love/Hate strippers. They take all my money. :goes to be alone in a corner:



UPDATE!!! YOU can't do this to people; you can't be such a tease.


UPDATE!!! :D :D
i agree with all that except the stripper part...i dont deal with strippers...they are just willing to dance for free

ChuckDaTruck
09-23-2005, 11:30 PM
I go out with the guys some weekends (once every 6 weeks or so). I have to empty my wallet beforehand, because when I'm in there, and I'm all fucked up, whatever I have is going into some girl's g-string.

ChuckDaTruck
09-28-2005, 05:06 PM
Just wanted to let you know that no ones forgotten your story, and we're all eager for an update Midknight. Saw that no one had posted in 5 days, and took it upon myself to do so.

Happy Writing!! :wink:

Midknight
09-28-2005, 10:09 PM
Just wanted to let you know that no ones forgotten your story, and we're all eager for an update Midknight. Saw that no one had posted in 5 days, and took it upon myself to do so.

Happy Writing!! :wink:

Yeah and I've had time late Sunday to write, but I've hit writers block and its driving me insane.

Midknight
10-01-2005, 03:28 AM
The chapter I had here has been posted to FF.net, with a few minor additions.

I know where I'm going with the next one so I'll be able to knock that out when I get a chance. I had planned on doing it tonight but I got sidetracked bragging about my story in every thread, nazi admining, and just being a all around evil person.

Sorry about that.

Anonymous
10-01-2005, 04:14 AM
The chapter I had here has been posted to FF.net, with a few minor additions.

Where is the one here? I must've missed it. I cant go to ff.net, how minor re the changes? this is SlythDamian, btw.

Midknight
10-01-2005, 04:20 AM
The chapter I had here has been posted to FF.net, with a few minor additions.

Where is the one here? I must've missed it. I cant go to ff.net, how minor re the changes? this is SlythDamian, btw.

Here is the link here, it's in the Work By Author category. Thats where I post chapters first, or snippets of my notes.

Link: http://darklordpotter.net/forums/viewtopic.php?p=12888#12888

The changes are in dialogue, some foreshadow hints, and it's mostly proofed. It's not as long as I usually do, but I wanted to get it out there while I had time to actually be at my house in front of my own PC for a change.

Anonymous
10-01-2005, 05:24 AM
Here is the link here, it's in the Work By Author category. Thats where I post chapters first, or snippets of my notes.

Link: http://darklordpotter.net/forums/viewtopic.php?p=12888#12888

The changes are in dialogue, some foreshadow hints, and it's mostly proofed. It's not as long as I usually do, but I wanted to get it out there while I had time to actually be at my house in front of my own PC for a change.

Thanx! Great chapter! i love when Harry ells off Molly, I hate Molly. I also love Harry using Gin, so I'm glad that is impled to be coming up. I wonder, is Remus, Tonksie and Kingsley going to be the ones who tell him who is loyal to him? Since he doesnt seem tobe spying on the meeting at all... Will Ron or ermione stay loyal? Turn coat? I lov that line abut coming at Harry 'like a bloke', that was hilarious. I was waiting for him to punch her,but Buckbeak saved him the trouble. Did he refrain from hitting Molly becaue he still (partly) thinks it would be wrong? Or because he just knows that she is so annoying out of genuin concern? hmmm im gonna stop with the questions for now, im full of too many atm.

Midknight
10-01-2005, 02:32 PM
Thanx! Great chapter! i love when Harry ells off Molly, I hate Molly. I also love Harry using Gin, so I'm glad that is impled to be coming up. I wonder, is Remus, Tonksie and Kingsley going to be the ones who tell him who is loyal to him? Since he doesnt seem tobe spying on the meeting at all... Will Ron or ermione stay loyal? Turn coat? I lov that line abut coming at Harry 'like a bloke', that was hilarious. I was waiting for him to punch her,but Buckbeak saved him the trouble. Did he refrain from hitting Molly becaue he still (partly) thinks it would be wrong? Or because he just knows that she is so annoying out of genuin concern? hmmm im gonna stop with the questions for now, im full of too many atm.


Thanks.

Its a couple different reasons he didn't hit Molly. He's not going to turn into some abuser of women or anything. With Molly, it was reflex, he's still a little wary after Vernon. I didn't want to do the normal "Vernon's abused Harry his whole life, beating him to near death everyday" so I went the route I did, and it serves the purpose of making Harry more aware that physical danger can still hurt him, even when theres no magic involved. He knows deep down she means well, but her control freakisness and damned fawning over him needed to stop, and this is a small step how. There will be another instance probably midway next chapter that Harry goes at her again, and it's fairly funny, heh.

With Ginny, well he was annoyed after being yelled at all night long, and the bitch had the nerve to try to hit him again?! Screw that. Note I didn't have him smack the shit out of her like I'd originally written, (I didn't think I'd get too many nice points with anyone turning Harry into Ike Turner) instead he just shoved her on her skinny ass.

Buckbeak is going to be Harry's icon/mount/etc in the story. I'm so sick of snake pets that it's not funny, and I have never seen Buckbeak really used at all, so Buckbeak protecting the man that saved his life is going to play into a few scenes. I just though it'd be hilarious for Beaky to be the one to give Ginny her first asswhippin' :twisted:

Lupin will stay loyal through the whole story, he actually make it to the end. Shacklebolt never tries to involve himself a ton, but he'll help out where he can. Tonks will talk to him about Hermione and Ron, and their betrayal will be a drawn out thing, happening when Harry needs help the most.

Their deaths/punishments I've mentioned here before, and I can't wait to flesh out the note I have for it, hehe


Ask away I like answering what I can, it often gives me new ideas to :GDie1

LT2000
10-01-2005, 03:31 PM
Interesting, using Buckbeak. When my Harry needs to fly, he'll be doing so in style riding his trademark imperial chariot, drawn by ten winged horses (unsure whether to use Pegasi or Thestrals now, probably the former).

True Story
10-01-2005, 03:42 PM
Buckbeak is going to be Harry's icon/mount/etc in the story. I'm so sick of snake pets that it's not funny, and I have never seen Buckbeak really used at all, so Buckbeak protecting the man that saved his life is going to play into a few scenes. I just though it'd be hilarious for Beaky to be the one to give Ginny her first asswhippin' :twisted:



Ask away I like answering what I can, it often gives me new ideas to :GDie1

ARGH! I WAS GOING TO USE BUCKBEAK INSTEAD OF A SNAKE PET....ARGH!!!! CURSES!

ChuckDaTruck
10-01-2005, 03:58 PM
:grins Mischievously: I have a pet that no one's thought of yet.


Also, Buckbeak is pretty ferocious. Remember, he was able to fend off Lupin in Book 3, so he's pretty fucking tough. 8)

Midknight
10-01-2005, 07:49 PM
Buckbeak is going to be Harry's icon/mount/etc in the story. I'm so sick of snake pets that it's not funny, and I have never seen Buckbeak really used at all, so Buckbeak protecting the man that saved his life is going to play into a few scenes. I just though it'd be hilarious for Beaky to be the one to give Ginny her first asswhippin' :twisted:



Ask away I like answering what I can, it often gives me new ideas to :GDie1

ARGH! I WAS GOING TO USE BUCKBEAK INSTEAD OF A SNAKE PET....ARGH!!!! CURSES!


I know how you feel, lol, Serapheth's stumbled onto a few ideas I was going to use, that I'm having to rewrite so it doesn't look like I copy& pasted his stuff, hehe

Also, Buckbeak is pretty ferocious. Remember, he was able to fend off Lupin in Book 3, so he's pretty fucking tough. 8)

Exactly, Lupin's werewolf will remember this and it'll be a point where theres a confrontation between the two, until finally they get along.

True Story
10-01-2005, 08:44 PM
I was just going to have him as Harry's pet....but Harry will possess him repeatedly to scout out an area and such...The eyes of an eagle could come in handy....

Midknight
10-01-2005, 09:01 PM
I was just going to have him as Harry's pet....but Harry will possess him repeatedly to scout out an area and such...The eyes of an eagle could come in handy....

Nice idea man, yeah that would come in very handy

Silke
10-01-2005, 11:09 PM
I was just going to have him as Harry's pet....but Harry will possess him repeatedly to scout out an area and such...The eyes of an eagle could come in handy....

How are they going to communicate? If you don't mind me asking.

True Story
10-02-2005, 12:36 AM
I was just going to have him as Harry's pet....but Harry will possess him repeatedly to scout out an area and such...The eyes of an eagle could come in handy....

How are they going to communicate? If you don't mind me asking.

Harry is just going to possess him...they're not going to communicate anymore than Harry and Hedwig would be able to.

Burt
10-02-2005, 02:46 AM
Interesting, using Buckbeak. When my Harry needs to fly, he'll be doing so in style riding his trademark imperial chariot, drawn by ten winged horses (unsure whether to use Pegasi or Thestrals now, probably the former).

You could use a dozen thestrals, and one shining pegasus to light the way. Then he'd be like Santa, only dropping murderous goblins down people's chimneys rather than colorfully-wrapped packages.

LT2000
10-02-2005, 10:48 AM
And enslave the House Elves, forcing them to make potion bomb and poisoned cookies for the kids in Harry's Workshop. Well...enslave them worse than they already are.

ChuckDaTruck
10-04-2005, 12:59 AM
I hope you update soon.


:D

ChuckDaTruck
10-07-2005, 03:32 PM
Is Ginny going to ever get to fuck Harry? I can't imagine Harry wanting that, but it may be the only way to get Ginny's loyalty.,

Midknight
10-07-2005, 03:49 PM
Is Ginny going to ever get to fuck Harry? I can't imagine Harry wanting that, but it may be the only way to get Ginny's loyalty.,

No, but I do have a very funny scene coming up that is similar to that.

er I can't explain more, but it's funny as hell

ChuckDaTruck
10-08-2005, 05:50 PM
Groovy. Post a teaser or something. Give us an Update.

Midknight
10-08-2005, 06:30 PM
Groovy. Post a teaser or something. Give us an Update.

check the main story thread, heh you got your own teaser for a chapter not too distant.

ChuckDaTruck
10-08-2005, 10:27 PM
BRILLIANT!!!

The bit with Mrs. Weasley was ESPECIALLY fantastic. FINALLY, someone find's a way to SHUT that BITCH UP!!! :twisted:


Man, I am SO pumped for the next chapter now. :twisted: :twisted: :wink: :wink: :wink: :wink:

Midknight
10-08-2005, 11:17 PM
+)]

The whole bit with him manipulating Ginny causes his falling out with Ron, some stuff happens, and thats when he gets into it with Molly, asking her if he has to knock Ginny up to prove he's not a child anymore, and Ginny will be standing in the back acting all "omfg he luvs me!1!! I'll do anything for him!"

That girl is gonna get so mind fucked, lol.

ChuckDaTruck
10-08-2005, 11:19 PM
YES!!! :twisted: :D :twisted:

IndoGhost
10-08-2005, 11:36 PM
i cant wait for it to come out.

Dark Syaoran
10-09-2005, 12:40 AM
Should have a scene were Harry is cleaning himself after a session with Ginny, using rediculous amounts of soap. Getting the 'germs' off his body. Haha.

Perfect Insanity
11-07-2005, 10:15 PM
excellent work. im a fan. this one is particularly good because it allows for plot development, and character development. i must say, i feel like an ass posting these late ass reviews. in my defense, i only just recently discovered the site.

Midknight
11-07-2005, 11:29 PM
excellent work. im a fan. this one is particularly good because it allows for plot development, and character development. i must say, i feel like an ass posting these late ass reviews. in my defense, i only just recently discovered the site.

Perfectly understandable =)

With my work load lately, lol any review that isn't UPDATE BITCH, is greatly appreciated.

Perfect Insanity
11-07-2005, 11:34 PM
i only wish my lit proffesor had that mental ideology. i wouldnt be getting a C. stupid fucking prat he is.

Vecna
11-08-2005, 04:18 PM
UPDATE BITCH
:D :!:

Perfect Insanity
11-08-2005, 04:43 PM
ahhhhhhhh i just finished the last chapter. ginny bashing, mm mmm mmm.

Anonymous
11-08-2005, 09:49 PM
Post your story "Insanity" and Midknight, speaking of updates.... :D :wink:

Perfect Insanity
11-08-2005, 10:10 PM
i meant of his story. im an awful writer. i started it only just yesterday. i read that whole, ginny your a stupid bitch just like your mom, thing

Lord Osiris
11-11-2005, 04:34 AM
Burn Weasley burn! MWAHAHAHA this is deffinately my top read! but wheres the update at!? meh ready and waiting though!

Midknight
11-11-2005, 07:04 PM
i've got a good bit of the next chapter, I think I've already posted the teaser for it here, but I've been away at relatives house doing stuff the past 3 weeks (renovations) then I get to help some people with various out of work... work related things. When the weather out here starts to suck is when I actually have writing time =(

TheIllusiveOne
11-22-2005, 11:26 PM
I could never really enjoy this story, I mean how do go from Harry letting his fucking muggle relatives lock him up, then beat him, then have him take a HUGE risk by challenging Fudge to a duel then killing him, then having him talk back to everyone he knows including one of the most powerful wizards in the world while being a submissive little bitch to Vernon. However, I like the direction the story is going in, and hopefully the pairings and azkaban parts will come into play soon.

Midknight
11-23-2005, 01:30 AM
I could never really enjoy this story, I mean how do go from Harry letting his fucking muggle relatives lock him up, then beat him, then have him take a HUGE risk by challenging Fudge to a duel then killing him, then having him talk back to everyone he knows including one of the most powerful wizards in the world while being a submissive little bitch to Vernon. However, I like the direction the story is going in, and hopefully the pairings and azkaban parts will come into play soon.

Locking him up is normal behavior for them, or did you not look into his first 11 years of life there? Beating him isn't a new occurence either, once again look into his life there.

He didn't take a risk by attacking Fudge, the general consensus is the man's a weakling. He's generally got a sarcastic attitude in canon, and there is well documents proof of him, even being puss!canon!Harry in OOTP, that he will bitch out stronger ppl with a bit of prodding. Considering Dumbles just portkeyed Wormtail away, and was being a general asshat, he had every right to be pissed.

He wasn't being a submissive bitch to Vernon, he attempted to fight back, but proceeded to get his ass stomped by someone multiple times his size, in a rage fueled frenzy.

I fail to see how You say you like the direction the story is going, when you disagree and seemingly hate everything else.

*shrug* I've had time to write lately, but I'm trying to figure out how to get rid of at least the Patil pairing, or possibly the Tonks pairing since that one's so overused.

TheIllusiveOne
11-23-2005, 04:06 PM
Locking him up is normal behaviour for the dursley's, however Harry taking control and challenging Fudge to a duel isn't, therefore with this new Independent Harry I fail to see how he would let some fat muggle lock him up.

Also I like the way the story is going because he's consistantly getting in more control of himself.

Lord North
12-05-2005, 04:15 PM
UPDATE!!!!!! :D

i like the yelling at molly weasley thing i never liked her she yells too much

Midknight
12-05-2005, 05:07 PM
Locking him up is normal behaviour for the dursley's, however Harry taking control and challenging Fudge to a duel isn't, therefore with this new Independent Harry I fail to see how he would let some fat muggle lock him up.

Also I like the way the story is going because he's consistantly getting in more control of himself.

Aye, but he's not independant until the talk with Voldemort really, that discuss I'll reveal whenever I get around to working on the story more, will be the pivotal point in his metamorphisis from douchebag to fighter.

i like the yelling at molly weasley thing i never liked her she yells too much

Oh if you like that, go read the story thread in the work by author category here, It's a spoiler of a later scene, lol.

Lord North
12-05-2005, 09:50 PM
omg haha i love that teaser mostly the wordplay its really good lol good job...

UPDATE! i cant wait for the next chapter

Xanatos
12-12-2005, 01:04 PM
this story is shaping up to be awesome, i will read the next chap with a smile on my face and a Dr Pepper in my hand :lol:

Midknight
12-12-2005, 07:38 PM
I've asked my wife to force me to sit down and speak more this weekend. I have time to add to the story lately, just been very busy @ work and when I come home I've been sitting on a heating pad zoning out to rampant violence.

Friday I get to go to the botto of a 900ft deep rock quarry, and begin a topographic survey of the rock, all it's various ledges, and various other fun things. IE. that writing may not happen, as I'll be in a rock climbing harness all day, possibly Sat, and probably too tired to move, lol.

Damn Martin Marietta, damn you to hell.

MadEyes
12-12-2005, 10:42 PM
I've asked my wife to force me to sit down and speak more this weekend. I have time to add to the story lately, just been very busy @ work and when I come home I've been sitting on a heating pad zoning out to rampant violence.

Friday I get to go to the botto of a 900ft deep rock quarry, and begin a topographic survey of the rock, all it's various ledges, and various other fun things. IE. that writing may not happen, as I'll be in a rock climbing harness all day, possibly Sat, and probably too tired to move, lol.

Damn Martin Marietta, damn you to hell.

Sweet! I love on-site stuff, although I've never been fond of topographic surveys or primary investigations. At the moment, all that matters is that work is keeping you from writing, so it should stop.

In any case, is there a specific reason for the survey, or is it just to map the area out? Last time I needed a harness was in a 50 floor high construction. But thatís always fun.

So have fun with that! I wish you luck and that you donít return too tired, making you able to write some more.

Midknight
12-13-2005, 12:19 AM
In any case, is there a specific reason for the survey, or is it just to map the area out? Last time I needed a harness was in a 50 floor high construction. But thatís always fun.

Yeah they need to get an exact volume of material removed this year versus last year for tax purposes. I think it's pretty assine for us to go in there, as it'll take all week, and they're blasting it to hell and back Thursday afternoon, there by screwing up our totals anyway O.O

MadEyes
12-13-2005, 03:10 PM
In any case, is there a specific reason for the survey, or is it just to map the area out? Last time I needed a harness was in a 50 floor high construction. But thatís always fun.

Yeah they need to get an exact volume of material removed this year versus last year for tax purposes. I think it's pretty assine for us to go in there, as it'll take all week, and they're blasting it to hell and back Thursday afternoon, there by screwing up our totals anyway O.O

I can understand that they want precise numbers and what not, but still, it does sound kind of stupid. lol. I hope it doest get too boring or get bad weather, the faster its done, the better, right?

In any case, good luck! And once again I thank myself for not going into engineering or anything of the sort; the numbers alone would have me mindless and blabbering already. I commend thee on thy work and wish thee safe journey!

Midknight
12-13-2005, 08:07 PM
I actually really appreciate that. Normal engineers are usually utterly idiotic and lack real world knowledge, making tons of "impossible to build in real life and have function" desgin flaws, etc. So by that logic I often get treated as a brainless idiot in with the pack who likes to design gutters at an elevation of 300, that flow into a storm basin/box with a top elevation of 430. (a real example, the job was quoted, bid, and most of it built up to curb before they relized DUH! that the water wouldn't flow into the boxes. $3 million error)

I'm more akin to a surveyor/field engineer, since I do survey and layout sites with GPS, and make on the fly adjustments to pretty much everything. If anyone that likes this story wonders why I often lapse in updates, try to figure out how to raise a site multiple feet in elevation, while making sure a few thousand feet of storm/sewer/water pipes still flow correctly, won't overtax any one system, and for minimal cost with max. efficiency, and then you'll see why I'm often braindead by the time I get a chance to post, lol.

Xanatos
12-19-2005, 06:54 PM
:shock: i have just realised i have reviewed ur story twice, once when i read it properly and the second time when i read the first chap again while drunk, and promised to read on lol sorry bout that

the sad panda
12-20-2005, 04:20 AM
i just read this fic again, the first time i did was on my friend's ffnet account. the story is still interesting although i'm beinging to understand your hatred towards ginny. speaking of which, are you planning on killing her in this fic?

Midknight
12-20-2005, 11:25 PM
i just read this fic again, the first time i did was on my friend's ffnet account. the story is still interesting although i'm beinging to understand your hatred towards ginny. speaking of which, are you planning on killing her in this fic?

Yes, her, Ron, Hermione die. Check out either thread, or search I've spoiled the deaths here, except for Ginny.

I sort of screwed myself into a corner though, as I planned major harsh deaths for them... yet at the time table I want them to occur there's no way in hell Harry could have the power to do that. Struggling to find a way to rewrite sections.

ChuckDaTruck
01-13-2006, 06:51 PM
Has this been abandoned? :? :(

Midknight
01-13-2006, 08:49 PM
Has this been abandoned? :? :(

Nah I bounce ideas off of ppl every now and then, I've just had massive problems with various things, read the last page or two. Never being home and posting from the office or a wireless laptop doesn't help either.

Xiph0
01-14-2006, 01:35 AM
Just read this and I really liked it, not over-done super-ish! or pussy! *nodding* This is definetly a fic I'll be checking for updates.

Lost_soul
01-20-2006, 04:55 PM
Nice! finaly a indipendent story that dont have Harry spending the first chapter crying over his lost god father. I like the Molly and Ginny bashing in chapter 9. Buckbeak hiting Ginny to defend Harry wer bloody briliant. eny ides wen the next chapter is going to be?

Midknight
02-26-2006, 04:18 AM
I've slowly started writing again. Gotten some ideas from the IRC room discussions.

I'll release anything I get there first, followed by here, followed by FF.net.

be a bit before I get my research stuff back on track and reorganized again, but shouldn't be a huge wait now that I want to write a bit again

BetryedBitch
05-21-2006, 06:36 AM
I liked this story it was quite interesting. Points for individuality, this might be the first case of fork castration! :p
:headshot:

Mrriddler
05-21-2006, 01:51 PM
That's good news, Midknight.

Dark Lord Rostam
05-21-2006, 04:00 PM
Not to burst your bubble Mrriddler, but that was three months ago when he said he has new ideas. Hopefully he really is working, but it's been three months so we can't be sure until he posts.

Mrriddler
05-21-2006, 04:06 PM
Yeah, I noticed after my post. Thought that was weird. Mid didn't say anything about his story in chat.

Midknight
05-21-2006, 04:23 PM
I was all for it, then the Hard drive wiped and I lost my inspiration to keep going once I saw how out of date the material I had found backed up was to work with.

I seriously lost well over 75% of my well researched plot lines, and many of the restarts I've done have had too many cliches for me to stomache.

Summer is pure hell for me, 75+ hour weeks, so I can't see it happening for awhile.

Dark Lord Rostam
05-21-2006, 04:27 PM
I was all for it, then the Hard drive wiped and I lost my inspiration to keep going once I saw how out of date the material I had found backed up was to work with.

I seriously lost well over 75% of my well researched plot lines, and many of the restarts I've done have had too many cliches for me to stomache.

Fuck, that really sucks. I really hope that you're able to come up with a new inspiration soon and that you're able to fix this. I really like this story.

ChuckDaTruck
05-22-2006, 05:32 PM
So really we should consider this story abandoned or at the very LEAST on Hiatus. (Its been well over 6 months since the last update, and I THINK we'll be hitting a year in August, although I'm not certain).

Well, I hope you get it back on track, Mid, but at this point I would say I PERSONALLY consider it abandoned.

Either way good luck, and hopefully you'll get through work so you can maybe write again (I won't hold my breath though...I do like air, you know) ;)

Anyway, have fun, and if you get a chance and feel like it, write, if you don't that's cool too.

Midknight
05-23-2006, 01:33 AM
You trying to get a rise out of me Chucky... the wrath of god can't be put away till it's tasted blood you know

ChuckDaTruck
05-23-2006, 03:50 AM
Nah, just making a poor attempt to subtly goad you into writing again. I need an update, DAMMIT!! ;) :D

slasheh
11-09-2006, 10:58 PM
really a shame that you haven't continued this story (though i read your reasons and understand them) it has one of the best starts i've ever read.

One thing i am curious about is though why almost any good dark harry story is abandoned at some point :p

The Dark Monarch
11-10-2006, 02:36 AM
I believe this is called Necrophilia.

Last post date 5-23-06
YOUR Post date 11-9-06 4 Months!
Which last time I checked is looked down on.

slasheh
11-10-2006, 10:06 PM
true, but considering that it is the longest thread in this subboard and midnight is still an active board-user i have hope that with encouragement he would actually pick up the fic again.

Amerision
11-11-2006, 01:07 AM
Actually in the library, posting in old threads in accepted as long as you give proper reviews and the such.

And yes, Dark!Harry stories do tend to lose steam as they are incredibly difficult to write.

Midknight
11-12-2006, 12:43 AM
I just got busy as shit with a few promotions and pay raises, and am still busy enough that other then about an hour a night or so relaxing, I'm either asleep, eating, or at work 6 days a week.

That and when I do have some free time I need to spend time with my family, hell I've barely been on the boards in the past 3 months I've started this new site.

Darius
11-12-2006, 02:22 AM
I just read this story recently and it's good, I'm not going to bother with comments as it's all pretty much been said and I can't think of anything else.

Nice job MidKnight, hope you get around to updating at somepoint.

Giovanni
11-29-2006, 04:47 PM
Actually in the library, posting in old threads in accepted as long as you give proper reviews and the such.


Which is something that this threads Necrophiliac didn't do.

japanese_jew
12-24-2006, 01:46 AM
hmm, this would be a decent story if it had a beta. The errors in grammar and punctuation make it almost painful to read. It also goes a bit too fast for my tastes, but I suppose that it's a stylistic decision on the part of the writer.

david9
12-24-2006, 04:33 AM
hmm, this would be a decent story if it had a beta. The errors in grammar and punctuation make it almost painful to read. It also goes a bit too fast for my tastes, but I suppose that it's a stylistic decision on the part of the writer.
Yeah the of/have mixups get annoying after a bit. Still a good story, though I've only read about half of it (I'm about to start reading the rest)

Midknight
12-24-2006, 05:31 AM
hmm, this would be a decent story if it had a beta. The errors in grammar and punctuation make it almost painful to read. It also goes a bit too fast for my tastes, but I suppose that it's a stylistic decision on the part of the writer.

What happened to the other page where you pretty much said it was horrible as hell?

As for too fast, its nowhere near as fast as most fics, hell he's not ultra powerful yet, and only 2 major things of note have happened.

ah well, I doubt I'll ever finish, everytime I come back to write more something happens or fandom pisses me off.

DreamRed
12-24-2006, 01:00 PM
I'm pretty sure I reviewed on FF.net at some point, but I figure I may as well say it again. I really liked TW, and it was one of the first few good Dark Independant fics I came across, so it's got a place in my heart, as it were :D. The spelling and grammar really isn't that bad. Noticeable in some places but not enough to come close to spoiling it. I'd ask you to update, but considering the comment above I guess it's best just to look hopeful.

japanese_jew
12-24-2006, 08:54 PM
Well, I felt bad after you told me that you were using a voice recognition thing to write it, so I changed this to just, "Get a fucking beta, please." That's pretty much what I said on the other page too, I was just citing what irritated me about your lack of beta.

bornagainpenguin
03-02-2007, 10:21 PM
Midnight?

Are you aware this fic is no longer on FF.net? I still have a copy (using the old default templates) but am unable to update it with the DLP.net templates. I just wanted to let you know about it (in case you were unaware).

--bornagainpenguin

PS: Why the name change on FF.net?

PPS: Again this is not necro, because I am updating the archives and posting where there are broken links if any exist.

Midknight
03-02-2007, 10:56 PM
Midnight?

Are you aware this fic is no longer on FF.net? I still have a copy (using the old default templates) but am unable to update it with the DLP.net templates. I just wanted to let you know about it (in case you were unaware).

--bornagainpenguin

PS: Why the name change on FF.net?

PPS: Again this is not necro, because I am updating the archives and posting where there are broken links if any exist.


Sorry, yeah I'm aware I meant to lock this.

It circles around the the whole major drama incident. I changed the name to not reflect DLP, and after reading one more email about the same damned "OMFG you used should of instead of should have, you're retarded as fuck !1!" I just got sick of it and pulled it.

bornagainpenguin
03-02-2007, 11:11 PM
I'm sorry to hear that.

...

You don't mind if I keep the version I have in the DLP.net Archive do you? Normally I'd not ask*, but seeing as how you're right here and all...

--bornagainpenguin

_________________________________
*What you think I can email every single author and get permission first? Okay I suppose I could, but who has the time for all that? ;P

Midknight
03-03-2007, 03:33 AM
no go for it.

bornagainpenguin
03-03-2007, 06:06 PM
Roger, Wilco. Thanks! --bornagainpenguin (who still holds out hopes for an update to the fic despite it all)

Dark Syaoran
03-03-2007, 06:35 PM
...It was pulled? Damn. You should have just killed emails from FFN. I guess the bitches would then use their own emails instead of the author-pm thing. Bah.

thisperson
03-03-2007, 06:59 PM
Ermmm...I saw the works by author link and the thread only contains chapter 8.
It states that there are 14 chapters, atleast that is what I understood.
So where is the story?
or was it all lost.

bornagainpenguin
03-03-2007, 11:07 PM
Ermmm...I saw the works by author link and the thread only contains chapter 8.
It states that there are 14 chapters, atleast that is what I understood.
So where is the story?
or was it all lost.

You could try this (http://rapidshare.com/files/7644243/Dark_Lord_Potter_Reccommends_Archive_09-17-06.rar.html) and see what all is there, (I have nine chapters of this fic in that archive) or just wait a bit longer and get them along with all the latest copies of everything in the Library...

--bornagainpenguin

PS: Thanks Adam for reuploading the archive on rapidshare!

PPS: What happened to Lord Ravenclaw's copy that I emailed him back in September, which he was going to be uploading to DLP.net's own servers? I spent something like four hours emailing that archive in chunks and I'm hoping I didn't just waste my time and bandwidth on nothing...

007_rock
06-11-2007, 02:18 AM
Do leave a word when you finally get it uploaded, will you? I can't get it from rapidshare....... That site is a nightmare without premium accounts....:mad: