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Discussion in 'General Discussion' started by Lord Ravenclaw, Jan 22, 2006.

  1. Lord Ravenclaw

    Lord Ravenclaw DLP Overlord Admin DLP Supporter

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    New story from stained-future,

    Category: Harry Potter
    Title: The Elven Connection
    Genre: Action/Adventure/Romance
    Rating: Fiction Rated: M
    Summary: Lily was an Elf, and so is Harry. He is found and trained by the Elves to beat Voldemort. Independent, Dark, Intelligent Harry. Honks...slight crossover with Star Wars. Need feedback re: other story.

    URL: http://www.fanfiction.net/s/2764207/1/

    I haven't read it yet, but I'm thinking light-saber wielding elves.
     
  2. IndoGhost

    IndoGhost Dark Lord

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    18098 words of pure crap...god i'm gonna :puke:
     
  3. Midknight

    Midknight Middy is SPAI! DLP Supporter Retired Staff

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    I just don't get this guy. He gets an A for effort, but a D for creativity and writing.

    His typos are alot better then they were in the other ones he had up previously, but jesus, the writing is beyond cliched and repetative by now.

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  4. Cervus

    Cervus Raptured to Hell

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    What the hell is with all the Star Wars crossovers? There was a load of them added to the crossover links section the other day, is it new genre that's taking the world by storm? They're all over the fucking place.

    As for Stained. Well what can you say?

    I give up, seriously I surrender so stop with the inhumane torture.
     
  5. Rahkesh Asmodaeus

    Rahkesh Asmodaeus THUNDAH Bawd Admin DLP Supporter

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    rofl, more lightsabers! Man, I can't believe he came out with another cliched piece of crap.
     
  6. Midknight

    Midknight Middy is SPAI! DLP Supporter Retired Staff

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    Can we please get him here to defend himself or at least help him abit? The guy obviously wants to try... I just.. ah the hell with it I'm drawing blanks trying to help
     
  7. Evil Shnitzel

    Evil Shnitzel High Inquisitor

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    I've read it and its like all the others of his stories just including elves from the republic.Jeez the guy dont know when to surrender.
    I've noticed that without all the elven-star wars shit it will be pretty normal clished Indepndent!Harry.
     
  8. Dark Syaoran

    Dark Syaoran No. 4 Admin

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    What are his reviews like? I mean, what are people saying to him? If he's getting good reviews that he isnt going to stop writing these types of... things.
     
  9. ip82

    ip82 Prisoner

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    His initial idea was to have people choose between those two, but...

    Now that's your Stained-Future at his best. If you can't choose what to include in your story, why not include it all? Why not throw in every possible super-power clishe you'd ever seen in HP, other fantasy books, cartoons and movies...

    This guy really needs someone around to slap him whenever he forgets to take his medication...
     
  10. Giovanni

    Giovanni God of Scotch

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    He gets a shitload of good reviews...

    I've given him quite a few constructive ones, and quite a few flames... But I seem to be one of the only ones doing it.
     
  11. Dark Syaoran

    Dark Syaoran No. 4 Admin

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    Heh. Well I've learnt that readers on FF.Net dont take to original ideas very well...
     
  12. Lutris

    Lutris Jarl Dovahkiin DLP Supporter

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    Oh! I'm not the only one! (sarcasmsarcasm)
     
  13. razz

    razz Seventh Year

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    At least we can count on the most eruditely talented people to offer their oh-so-wise words of wisdom.

    The 'Duff-Man' strikes again.
     
  14. Aura

    Aura Seventh Year

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    OMFG!!! The guy would actually be a decent writer if he got rid of all the cliched crap in his story... Seriously.

    Some people actually liked the cliched independent, dark, arnold!harry riding a what was it? Oh yeah! A yamaha racer thingy...


    OMFG! Harry is a hot, well-muscled and badass teen. He smokes Tobacco to boot! I can finally die happy knowing that somewhere out there, a brilliant writer had made a pansy into a completely different guy in five weeks... Somebody kill me now.
     
  15. Zero

    Zero Seventh Year

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    Imagine if he released all these fics he has now one year ago, he'd probably be a fanfic god on this forum.
     
  16. Dark Syaoran

    Dark Syaoran No. 4 Admin

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    Have to be more than a year ago, lol.
     
  17. Blackstar

    Blackstar Second Year

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    If that wasnt one the most homo-erotiv descriptions of harry potter ive ever read, ever!

    He seriously needs to stop making harry so powerful in a month, he needs to pick one cliche dammit and not be a force wielding, uber magic having, elemental elf, i want better elemental stories!!!, so far the best ive read is elemental genesis, but back on topic, stained just cant seem to control himself and pick one thing and settle down with it and add depth to it.
     
  18. Lord Ravenclaw

    Lord Ravenclaw DLP Overlord Admin DLP Supporter

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    Highly doubt that. This forum's been around for close to a year, and we all hated stories without much depth then too.
     
  19. Evil Shnitzel

    Evil Shnitzel High Inquisitor

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    He updated his first story today.
    Surprising but 1\3 of the chapter is pretty good.
    The morning with naked Blaise pissed me off, the rant against wizards too.
    Thats one thing I hate about this fic, too much bashing.
     
  20. Midknight

    Midknight Middy is SPAI! DLP Supporter Retired Staff

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    lol nada. He could of been the very first to ever release any fanfic on HP, and he's still be a horrible writer. He means well, and he's trying, but for the love of god someone has to smack the piss out of him and get to to LOOK at his stuff to realize how utterly stupid so much of it is.

    If he'd take some ritalin or something, and knock off the homoerotic descriptions of Harry, and stop all the damned clinically termed sex, as well as use some sanity checks (hi I'm a force using elf! "What's the force?" Oh it's like magic. "Then what the hell do I need to learn the force for") he may be salvagable.
     
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