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Old 07-13-2009, 03:39 AM   #1
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Harry Potter and the Spellbook of Desires-NC-17

Title: Harry Potter and the Spelbook of Desires
Author: Avatrek
Pairing:Harry/Lots of bitches
Summary:Harry Potter discovers the Spellbook of Desire in his fourth year.

I give this story a 3/5
My reason for posting it, you ask?
Lots and lots of sex, and I likes me some sexy time. The dialog leaves much to be desired, although the grammar is better than the crap circulating around ff.net and aff.net. I actually don't care for this story, I just want to see what peoples reactions are....

*= I'm pretty fucking confused.
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Old 07-13-2009, 04:15 AM   #2
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Wow....The doctor that drop kicked you in the head when you were born must have really hated your guts.

It's the only thing I can think of that would make you this stupid.

The story was bad to.

So not only are you stupid, but also retarded.

You need to die in a fire, like, right now.
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Old 07-13-2009, 04:22 AM   #3
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Wow....The doctor that drop kicked you in the head when you were born must have really hated your guts.
^^ This...

OP, no one is really interested in your preferred wanking reading material.
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Concept is ridiculous and overdone, but at least it looks like the grammar isn't terrible. Nothing special- just the typical stuff you'll see on aff.

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If you're confused and rated this 3/5, don't post in For Review section.

"want to see what peoples reactions are...." fail troll.
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The protagonist rapes a 13 year old girl who is described as someone who has never thought of sex before. FAIL.
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Ugh... Wow. This was just fucking fail.

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This is worse than HP and the new powers.
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That isn't AFF, that's some other equally shitty site where they rated it 88 (out of a possible 100).

Written for idiots by one. 1/5.
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Old 07-13-2009, 12:09 PM   #11
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Had a brief look in my boredom today. I regret it.

The author appears to take delight in rape and impregnating the women involved. A sex scene with Ginny in the first chapter, I might add, is not the best way to appeal a story to this site...

Also, Ron and Fleur? Ron and Parvati/Padma? Ron with anyone? No thank you.

The only, and I mean only, good thing about this is that it is readable. Readable in the sense that I can understand what's going on.

1/5. Lower if it were possible.
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Old 07-13-2009, 12:36 PM   #12
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You're wrong. It's not readable. 1/5

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I opened this fic, and it molested my afternoon.

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Had a brief look in my boredom today. I regret it.

The author appears to take delight in rape and impregnating the women involved. A sex scene with Ginny in the first chapter, I might add, is not the best way to appeal a story to this site...
Adult stories like this, and that one about Harry having an 8 year old Gabrielle as a sex slave really really make me wonder about the author, it is obvious that they need counseling if they truly enjoy writing fics about rape and impregnating the women involved, it's truly disgusting.
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"You know!" she exclaimed. "The mexican girl you came with!"

Harry couldn't help it; he busted out laughing. "Oh, you mean Parvati?"

"Yeah, Pervatty! What's that bitch up to?"
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Just wasn't very interesting. 1/5
I actually updated something. Go read it:

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This post is pretty much made for the thread.

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This is crap but I am not surprised as this story is from a porn site. Am I the only one who realize this story is in a porn site that happens to have perverted stories? The other genres include necrophilia, mind control, older male/female, virginity, cannibalism, alien, cock & balls torture and many others....
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The first chapter was mediocre at best, and that's just taking into account the overall poor state of HP smut in general.

Each successive chapter gets worse and worse until its just painful to read.

The vast majority of mind control stories tend to be wish fulfillment exercises for preteens and the eternally immature. This certainly keeps up that tradition.

And is it just me or does it really feel like nobody in the story actually enjoys what they're doing. The way its described an orgasm is about as good as ice cream, but more attractive because someone else makes it for you.

The whole story is a gigantic disappointment. The fact that the grammar and spelling isn't horrible only makes me more disappointed because the author isn't actually retarded, he just doesn't care enough to write anything of quality.
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I've not read it yet, but the incredibly, overwhelmingly, Implacably, negative response has now piqued my interest. Maybe tomorrow.

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