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Old 07-21-2017, 09:28 PM   #2481
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Originally Posted by Stealthy View Post
Sucks that the actual writing is mediocre.
If that's what you consider mediocre writing, then I'm not sure why you bother reading fanfiction at all, cos your standards seem way too high. PA's writing may not be as good as you'd expect to find in a published novel, but for a fanfic it's definitely top tier.
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Old 07-21-2017, 10:39 PM   #2482
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Originally Posted by Hawkin View Post
That's how most "author" on Alternate History write. They are more concerned about explaining their POD and its consequences, than they are about writing a a good story, or improving their writing in general.
I haven't read a lot on AH, but yeah this makes some sense. And it's probably very self-reinforcing as I imagine the majority of the feedback on AH is nitpicking the divergences. It's unfortunate, because the diatribes are what really holds the fic back. The chapters without them are just fine.
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Old 07-22-2017, 04:12 PM   #2483
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Yes, constructive criticism is not encouraged on AH. People get offended if you point of faults.
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Old 07-23-2017, 12:17 AM   #2484
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Yes, constructive criticism is not encouraged on AH. People get offended if you point of faults.
I got called an asshole for asking why a guy didn't separate his paragraphs.
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Old 07-23-2017, 12:20 AM   #2485
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You're clearly a paragraphophobe and should check your privilege.
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Old 07-24-2017, 01:20 AM   #2486
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Searching through the ASOIAF threads in AH.com I found this:


The Prince No One Wanted.

Basically, another Jon/Jaehaerys is a secret Targaryen prince in a AU where Rhaegar won (How? Not exactly explained beyond Rhaegar's use of 'shade of the evening'). More divergences include Cersei as Queen (with three children), a more hostile North, the Baratheons apparently extinct, etc.

Now, what catched my attention were the sub-plots of the story:
  • Jon Arryn´s call for a Council of the Faith for the Vale to put down dissatisfied elements of the clergy led by a previous supporter of his, Janos. The septon proposes a different view of the Seven centered in the Father, denying the divinity of the rest. To put it short: enter the High Septon, heathen prince and princess, misunderstandings, and a schism is in the horizon. And maybe with Dorne and White Harbor's congregations declared heretics.
  • Gerion Lannister and co. searching for a (mad?) pirate lord of the Stepstones that works in the name of a long-dead Stannis Baratheon. And answers for a certain valyrian sword.

Besides that, most chapters are average. Except the original third chapter (pure trash). Still, the author welcomes the critics and the Arryn chapters makes the read effort worthy.

(Sorry if the writing appears clunky. Still learning English )
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