Title: Harry Potter and the Coming of Fate
Author: Laeka
Rating: T
Genre: Angst/Action/Adventure
Status: HIATUS, being rewritten (125,529 words)
Pairings: None for now (strong hints of H/Hermione and few hints of H/Ginny)
Summary: Harry Potter discovers his fate, but has he come to terms with it? What will fate make him out to be? He must make a choice; one that will make Harry what the wizarding world wants to him to be, or one that will afford him his own life.

Link: http://www.fanfiction.net/s/1987670/1/

Original Yahoo! group (3 more chapters and some abandoned parts):
http://groups.yahoo.com/group/Coming-of-Fate/

New Yahoo! group (rewritten version of first 7-8 chapters):
http://groups.yahoo.com/group/CoF-Proper/

This starts like standard Independant!Harry clished story (Griphook, family accounts, emancipation, etc), but that can be excused for two reasons:
1) This story was written in it's entirety during the first half of 2004 (these thins weren't exactly clishes back then).
2) After the initial 5-6 chapters, it almost completely breaks off from the formula and takes it's own path.

As for whether this path is good or bad, it's debatable.

Good bits include nice and original character of James Potter, very interesting training regime, good development of Harry's character and the best part - perfect characterisation of manipulative-but-not-evil Dumbledore. Even if you don't like this story, check out chapter 12 at least - that's one of the best Harry-Dumbledore mind-battles I've ever seen in fanfiction... and that's saying something, coming from me.

Unfortunately, this story is also riddled with some bad parts, least of which is lack of direction in the last two chapters. I really had to force myself through some vomit-inducing parts, like Harry being whipped by the beaverhead, taking her to clothes-shopping, finaly seeing Ginny for the beutiful young woman she really is, desperately trying to make peace with the jelous idiot and hugging Molly, crying on her tits & calling her mum. The worst thing is, he's normally completely respectable independant!Harry character, it's just that he turns into a half-pussy at the mere sight of the rednecks. Somewhat choppy writing style doesn't help either.

As for the story's status, in one of A/N's the author mentioned having something like 200,000 words already written, but for now, he'd only posted 100,000+ words in a single month and then nothing. There are few more chapters on his Yahoo!Group (in several variants), as well as rewritten versions of the first 7-8 chapters (last update 2 months ago), so this story might have a future yet.

To conclude, this is very good and long independant!Harry story, done more or less by the formula, but with some great Harry-Dumbledore interaction and overall characterisation. It's worth a shot IMO.

 

Trutfully, almost all crying/angsting/Ginny/Weasleys parts are in the last chapter or two... it's like he'd lost inspiration after that showdown, which explains his writers block, 5 different variants of the next few chapers and finally, the decision to rewrite the whole story alltogether.... But until that part, it was very good (except for the shopping trip).

 

I started this fic when it come out...it was good...the writer stopped updating and i havn't read it since...but the training that harry went through was cool. I like how harry was more knowledgeable. at least from what I remember.

 

I remember it also. I've always been bad at motivating myself to reread stories, but I think I might just try for this one. Sounds like classic for the most part, and I can hardly remember it anyway. It'll just be like reading a whole new story, I figure.

 

I don't know if anyone is still following this story, but the author has updated about 2 or 3 new chapters. They were interesting and moved the plot along as Harry and co. even made it all the way to Hogwarts. The author hasn't decided if Harry will end up with Hermione or Ginny, and even seems to plan to throw another girl in the mix. So the fic is up to 15 chapters and 130000+ words.

 

An average fairly cliche story with a few intresting twists.

This is my 3third reading of it and while it is good for taking the edge off my fanfiction addiction it is not an epic of brilliance in the slightest.

 

L. Kezza, what exactly about my old story takes the edge off your addiction to fanfiction?

I didn't know this site was here until recently, and then bam, i've been mentioned. Weird, I tell you.

In all honestly I couldn't figure out where the take the story. Someone mentioned I lost inspiration which is actually the case. I began writing 'Fate' summer of my sophomore year in college and by the time I graduated I'd fallen out of the arc completely. Then, after I joined the military and came back I figured why not revamp the damned thing only I couldn't get it to work.

The next chapter was supposed to have Harry wake up in a hospital bed completely unaware of what had transpired over the summer. Well, everyone seemingly unaware of what had taken place and with Harry finding himself capable of acts that were previously beyond him. I wanted to go for a Bourne plot line and bring Harry back to the teenager he is and not the young twenty-something I was pretending to be.

If someone wants to work with me on necromancy-like rejuvenination for this or thinks that they can take the story and run with it let me know. I'll turn over the yahoo!groups as well if they're up for it.

 

It's okay... I don't really like the story line. It's too cliche.
2/5

 

I'll get around to reading it tomorrow, but even ip82 referred to some parts as

and the justification for the cliches are that it was written in 2004, so my expectations are very, very low.

 

I've started the story and so far, it's a big let down. You are able to 'see' where thew story is heading after reading the first four chapters. He gets trained as a merc and blows a rasberry in Dumbledore's face. He hooks up witho one or towo girls, but onlu girls who are safe, i.e. not Slytherins. YEah! It's just another cliched warrior!Harry.

 

The only female characters that can't be considered "safe" are the extremely old ones, like Arabella Figg, the nurse, McGonagall, etc.