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Old 04-03-2009, 01:47 PM   #1
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Chandelier- Artemis Day- PG13

Title: Chandelier
Author: Artemis Day
Rating:PG-13
Genre:Humor
DLP Category:Funny stories
Pairing: H/Hr
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Summary: Harry Potter, Alan Granger immediately decided, was probably the worst sort of son-in-law imaginable. Based on a true story.
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Old 04-03-2009, 02:40 PM   #2
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Meh. Nothing that keeps the interest. Pretty predictable ending and not that funny or so.

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Old 04-03-2009, 03:11 PM   #3
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Eh. I was amused. 4/5
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Old 04-03-2009, 03:26 PM   #4
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I agree with the tandoori duck. Short and reasonably amusing, pretty much what a humor oneshot should be.
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Old 04-03-2009, 03:33 PM   #5
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I'm the mother flippin' Rhymenocerous
My beats are fly and the birds are on my back
And I'm horny
I'm horny
If you choose to proceed you will indeed concede
Cos I hit you with my flow
The Wild Rhino Stampede.
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Old 04-03-2009, 03:38 PM   #6
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It wasn't bad... but it wasn't really that good either.

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Old 04-03-2009, 03:40 PM   #7
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It was fairly entertaining. Yet as Vlad said, it wasn't great either.

3/5.

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Old 04-03-2009, 11:06 PM   #8
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For a 1-shot. 4/5. I smiled and I needed one today.
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Old 04-04-2009, 01:35 AM   #9
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It was alright, I think I would have enjoyed it more if they had been having sex though. As it was the surprise ending well I can't say I expected it, but it didn't make me crack a smile.

3/5 because it's averagely amusing.
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Old 04-04-2009, 11:05 AM   #10
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Not what I expected but not really amusing either. Nothing that made me laugh out loud, and I caught onto the 'twist' pretty quickly. In short, nothing that really kep me entertained. I'm giving it 2/5 for some entertaining dialogue, but nothing higher.
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Old 04-13-2009, 03:28 AM   #11
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Meh. Amusing, sort of. 3.5/5
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Old 04-13-2009, 10:41 AM   #12
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Well this is just my sort of humour so I laughed uproariously at it. 4/5 from me.
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Old 04-13-2009, 10:52 AM   #13
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It got a laugh form me, and the author didn't try to over extend it beyond where it needed to finish. So 4/5.
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Old 04-13-2009, 11:08 AM   #14
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I'm surprised with the general apathy towards this story. I thought it was bloody perfect, if a bit predictable. Still, that just made me laugh all the more when you finally came to the twist. I think this deserves to be in the library for that quick, refreshing humor that most authors don't achieve. 4/5 for me.
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Old 04-13-2009, 12:51 PM   #15
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Funny, but the revelation of the punchline at the end is a little flat. 3/5.
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Old 04-13-2009, 04:37 PM   #16
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The ending should maybe have been shorter so that the punchline came quicker. Think that would have been more of a laugh.

Still a good story, 3,5 from me!
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Old 04-13-2009, 04:54 PM   #17
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I'm also giving it a 3. It made me smile, but that's about all it did. I say it's Bin worthy at the least.
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