Dark Lord Potter Forums Dark Lord Potter Forums  

Go Back   Dark Lord Potter Forums > Library > Recycling Bin
Donate Register Rules Library List IRC Chat FAQ Members List Social Groups Calendar Search Today's Posts Mark Forums Read

Notices

Donor Bar
PatronusCharm Banner

 
Thread Tools Display Modes
Old 06-21-2011, 06:40 PM   #1
Zenzao
Avatar
 
Zenzao's Avatar
 
Join Date: Aug 2009
Gender: Male
Posts: 1,674
Lineage of Mastery by Zenzao - T

Title: Lineage of Mastery
Author: Zenzao
Rating: T
Genre: Adventure(?), Drama, smudges of Humor.
DLP Category: Alternates.
Pairing: None.
Published: April 21, 2011
Updated: June 22, 2011
Words: 8900
Status: Abandoned

Summary: What would the wizarding world have turned out to be if the Peverell Brothers had not died or splintered long ago? How would things have changed if they had received the Hallows in a different order? As its turns out, a hell of a lot different.
Link: Lineage of Mastery

Yeah, I'm being arrogant(and just a little hopeful) enough to offer my own story for Review. This is my more successful of the two March contest entries and it's done okay so far.


Moved into the Recycling Bin based on the reviews in here and in its WbA thread, despite its four stars.
Minion.
__________________



T5C, Three Years strong and Three Years completed.

PKMN Trainer RED wants to battle! PKMN Trainer GOLD wants to battle!

Last edited by Dark Minion; 01-26-2014 at 04:59 PM.
Zenzao is offline   Reply With Quote
Old 06-21-2011, 08:17 PM   #2
Catman
Third Year
 
Join Date: Jan 2008
Gender: Male
Posts: 128
I'm making this comment without having read it. Yes, it is considered bad form to post your own story in the for review, only the Good Old DLP Boy's club can get away with that.

If you want your story to come to the attention of DLP, for better or worse, put it in the Work by Author forum.

Last edited by Catman; 06-22-2011 at 01:19 AM.
Catman is offline   Reply With Quote
Old 06-21-2011, 08:54 PM   #3
T3t
God of Magic
 
T3t's Avatar
 
Join Date: Jan 2011
Location: Los Angeles
Age: 21
Gender: Male
Posts: 3,051
DLP Supporter Donor Star
Nobody cares, I promise. I'll read and review later.
T3t is offline   Reply With Quote
Thumbs Up 1 Thumb Up
Old 06-22-2011, 12:16 AM   #4
Blaise
God of Magic
 
Blaise's Avatar
 
Join Date: Jan 2008
Location: Washington, D.C.
Age: 29
Gender: Male
Posts: 6,194
...pretty fucking brassy, OP.
__________________
Blaise is offline   Reply With Quote
Old 06-22-2011, 01:37 PM   #5
Rym
Minister of Magic
 
Rym's Avatar
 
Join Date: Aug 2009
Gender: Male
Posts: 630
As soon as the June contest is over, I'll read and review this. I just have zero free time right now. Reccing your own story really isn't that big a deal, though I think you might have pulled the trigger a bit too early with this one. At 8900 words, this is just a fledgeling of a story. It hasn't really taken off yet.
__________________

Just Write.
Rym is offline   Reply With Quote
Thumbs Up 1 Thumb Up
Old 06-23-2011, 01:18 AM   #6
Richard
Avatar
 
Richard's Avatar
 
Join Date: Jul 2006
Location: California
Age: 31
Gender: Male
Posts: 1,689
Better off posting it in WBA, imo.
__________________
Richard is offline   Reply With Quote
Old 06-23-2011, 02:42 AM   #7
Johnny Farrar
Order Member
 
Johnny Farrar's Avatar
 
Join Date: Mar 2009
Location: In front of a Computer.
Gender: Male
Posts: 492
The story is already present in the WbA section.

As far as I understand, there is no problem with putting up your own story in the For Review. Nobody said anything to me when I did it. I haven't read your story yet, will be back with a review when I do.
__________________
Johnny Farrar is offline   Reply With Quote
Thumbs Up 1 Thumb Up
Old 06-23-2011, 09:37 AM   #8
Starwind
Unspeakable
 
Join Date: Nov 2010
Gender: Male
Posts: 798
The writing quality was decent.

The story didn't jump out at me.

The bit with the whole "magical signature" bit put me off a little, I read too many magical theory topics on here. =)
Starwind is offline   Reply With Quote
Thumbs Up 1 Thumb Up
Old 06-23-2011, 08:01 PM   #9
Basilisk
Death Eater
 
Basilisk's Avatar
 
Join Date: Apr 2011
Location: QC, Canada
Gender: Male
Posts: 553
I think he put it here because there wasn't enough feedback in the WBA section.
Basilisk is offline   Reply With Quote
Thumbs Up 1 Thumb Up
Old 10-17-2011, 01:37 PM   #10
Dark Minion
Moderator
 
Dark Minion's Avatar
 
Join Date: Sep 2006
Gender: Male
Posts: 1,820
DLP Supporter Donor Star
Any more input on this one?

The comments left in here and the reviews in the WbA thread here: Lineage of Mastery indicate Zenzao still needs some time to polish the part he already posted and to continue the story.

Thus I am inclined to move it into the Recycle Bin for now, despite its four stars (by only three votes).
Dark Minion is offline   Reply With Quote
Old 10-18-2011, 07:46 PM   #11
Anarual
DA Member
 
Anarual's Avatar
 
Join Date: Aug 2005
Posts: 234
DLP Supporter Donor Star
Interesting, remember reading it a while ago. I'll side with Dark Minion here and say it still needs a bit of polishing. Rehash some aspects and update it a few times in the WbA and I'm sure you'll get tons of people to read it.
__________________
The "Harry Potter" book series should be renamed to : The little knowitall mudblood whore and her scarheaded and ginger sidekicks.
Anarual is offline   Reply With Quote
Thumbs Up 1 Thumb Up

Tags
author:zenzao


Currently Active Users Viewing This Thread: 1 (0 members and 1 guests)
 
Thread Tools
Display Modes

Posting Rules
You may not post new threads
You may not post replies
You may not post attachments
You may not edit your posts

BB code is On
Smilies are On
[IMG] code is On
HTML code is Off

Forum Jump

Similar Threads
Thread Thread Starter Forum Replies Last Post
Lineage 2 Rhynim Gaming and PC Discussion 0 02-11-2007 03:00 PM


All times are GMT -4. The time now is 04:29 PM.


Powered by vBulletin® Version 3.8.3
Copyright ©2000 - 2014, Jelsoft Enterprises Ltd.
Copyright 2005 - 2011 Darklordpotter.net. All rights reserved.
No personal intellectual property on this site may be used without the credit and express permission of the respective authors.