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Abandoned L'Esprit de Hadrian by Lord Merrill - T

Discussion in 'The Alternates' started by Jheph, Dec 17, 2006.

4.0999999046326/5, 10 votes
  1. Jheph

    Jheph Groundskeeper

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    Dec 17, 2006 #1
    Title: L'Esprit de Hadrian
    Author: Lord Merrill
    Rating: T
    Genre: Action/Adventure/Mystery
    DLP Category: The Alternate's
    Pairing:
    Chapters: 2
    Words: 5,215
    Updated: September 28, 2006
    Published: September 25, 2006
    Status: Abandoned
    Summary: Harry Potter was the quintessential Slytherin: cunning, resourceful and gifted with a natural affinity for magic that flew under even Dumbledore's radar. Alternate Universe with Neville Longbottom as the Boy Who Lived.
    Link: http://www.fanfiction.net/s/3169490/1/

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    Too early to give a proper review, but it's very promising.
    A bit worried about Harry's character...


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  2. Nuhuh

    Nuhuh Dastardly Shadow Admin Retired Staff

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    Dec 17, 2006 #2
    So far very good. I like the glimpse into Voldemort's thoughts, and motivations behind his actions. Harry's characterization is interesting, he is Slytherin, but unlike how a lot make him cold and callous, this one isn't. More importantly, the two chapters have enough of a hook to make you wonder what happened and what's next.

    Bio's taken time to set up the scenery and mood, which helps a lot. Recommended, hopefully there will be more chapters.
     
  3. Nexus

    Nexus Denarii Host

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    Dec 17, 2006 #3
    Interesting. I read it before it was posted here. I can't formulate an opinion. Though I am sure Syaoran appreciates being mentioned in the fic :p.

    I'll reserve judgement till he reveals more of his AU world and plot.

    Special note to author: Update your other fics bish :)
     
  4. Skeletaure

    Skeletaure Magical Core Enthusiast ~ Prestige ~ DLP Supporter

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    Dec 17, 2006 #4
    Yes - definitely a nice atmosphere; very Pride and Prejudice.

    Good writing of course with nice description, characterisation, style and speech.

    The use of some cliches, e.g. Lord Potter, but they are presented in a way that doesn't feel used, so bonus points there.

    Hope you update soon Bio.
     
  5. TheIllusiveOne

    TheIllusiveOne Raptured to Hell

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    Dec 17, 2006 #5
    I thought it was decent, but I'd prefer it if he finished his Star Wars crossover instead of this. 3.5/5.
     
  6. Vtigo

    Vtigo Second Year

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    Dec 17, 2006 #6
    I agree with you, it's not bad..but it isent half as good as his starwars cross.
     
  7. Darius

    Darius 13/m/box

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    Dec 17, 2006 #7
    Are you fucking with me? This story is way better than his crossover, my hating of crossover's prejudice aside and it still is.
     
  8. Brooklynight

    Brooklynight Seventh Year

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    Dec 18, 2006 #8
    I like it so far, especially the tone, that said there isn't enough written to form a fair opinion but its a promising start.
     
  9. Anarual

    Anarual Seventh Year DLP Supporter

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    Dec 18, 2006 #9
    I got the feeling that this will be my favorite story on ff.net , the pride and prejustice is brilliant ! ;]
     
  10. Amadan

    Amadan Second Year

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    Dec 18, 2006 #10
    I read this several months ago and it still hasn't updated.
    The story itself is ok apart from Harry calling himself hadrian so I will have to give it 3/5.
     
  11. Cervus

    Cervus Raptured to Hell

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    Dec 18, 2006 #11
    I'd much rather see this story updated than his Star Wars one. I loath crossovers for some reason...

    I like the writing style of this peice and Harry calling himself Hadrian doesn't overly irk me. I'd like to see more before I rate it though, I wouldn't want to rate a story just off a few chapters.
     
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  12. Cthulu

    Cthulu Unintelligent Bigot

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    Dec 18, 2006 #12
    Hey this sounds relly good, brb after having actually read it :p

    Edit:

    Okay... I... Don't really get it... Is he 30 or 13? Cause I have no way to guess his or anyone elses age, it's really rather annoying.

    Otherwise well written, a bit too soon to give an honest rating, but 4/5 för the superb writing style.
     
  13. sirius009

    sirius009 Minister of Magic

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    Dec 19, 2006 #13
    hasn't been updated nearly three monthes, not worth reading yet, imo.