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Old 01-05-2006, 10:11 AM   #1
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Crouching Lion, Hidden Serpent by Lutris Argutiae - M

Title: Crouching Lion, Hidden Serpent
Author: Lutris Argutiae
Genre: Adventure
Chapters: 6
Words: 31,179
Updated: August 13, 2006
Published: December 31, 2005
Status: Abandoned

Summary: Harry Potter has defeated the Dark Lord for the first time. But his parents are dead, and Sirius Black is inprisoned, Lupin is a werewolf, and Pettigrew is dead. AU 4th year and onwards. A Crouch Sr. adopts Harry story.
Link: I Finally Got Off My Ass And Posted

Right, nothing really, new, but as of 1/4/06, nothing you can't see on the forum in Work by Author except the edited works and an extension on the chapters. Enjoy.[/url]


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Old 01-05-2006, 12:44 PM   #2
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I was following this on the forums, and to be blunt it is bloody good.

Definately worth a read.
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Old 01-05-2006, 01:22 PM   #3
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Excellent fic. I HIGHLY recommend it.
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Old 01-05-2006, 02:13 PM   #4
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Love it.So far it seems very original, and a lot of the newer fanfics don't have a lot (or in some case none) of that.

I'm looking forward to the next chapter so update soon.
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Old 01-05-2006, 02:41 PM   #5
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The guy's other story is also VERY good. It REALLY picks up in CHapter 3, so READ IT!!!


NOW!!!

I mean. Stop reading this immediately. Stop. Don't read this sentence. You should have NO idea what I've written here. Well, what are you waiting for? Just go. Beat it. Fine, be that way.
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Old 01-05-2006, 05:26 PM   #6
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Does anybody know what ChuckDaTruck said at the end of his post? I sure don't, I was too busy re-reading Lutris' other fic. On another note... does ChuckDaTruck not remind you of something from a kiddies program?

I think I put my thoughts somewhere else about this, I can't remember though. You do first person tense very well, among the best I have seen it done actually. I also like the characterisation of Barty, it will be interesting to see how he deals with the whole Jr issue. It's well written like your other fic and looks like it's going to get better.

It's also very original (from what we've seen so far and most likely will continue to be) and something that looks like it's going to be great in the future. I'll be watching it and recommending it.
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Old 01-06-2006, 12:50 AM   #7
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Old 01-06-2006, 01:13 AM   #8
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nothing so far... unless you count crouch and his wife... but harry'll have a minor crush on someone during his travels... possibly a ravenclaw or slytherin when he gets to hogwarts.
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Old 01-06-2006, 01:27 AM   #9
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nothing so far... unless you count crouch and his wife... but harry'll have a minor crush on someone during his travels... possibly a ravenclaw or slytherin when he gets to hogwarts.
Well, here's rooting for a Slytherin. And I can't believe I forgot to say this in the other post, but great start. I'm looking forward to more.
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Old 01-06-2006, 05:18 AM   #10
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Good show Lutris. =)

And *points and gasps* look! It's SlytherinDamian back from the dead (or wherever non-posting DLPer's go when not posting for long periods of time.)
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Old 01-06-2006, 05:50 AM   #11
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Heh. I wondered where he got too. Ravenclaw is teh girl type for Harry! Rofl.
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Old 01-06-2006, 09:48 AM   #12
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It's SlytherinDamian back from the dead (or wherever non-posting DLPer's go when not posting for long periods of time.)

Its a terrible place that is always cold with no light. :shivers:

I pray none of you ever go there. At night it gets lonely and freezing there. So cold...so cold....so cold...
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Old 01-07-2006, 05:59 AM   #13
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Good show Lutris. =)

And *points and gasps* look! It's SlytherinDamian back from the dead (or wherever non-posting DLPer's go when not posting for long periods of time.)
I got tired of disagreeing with people for awhile. Plus I dumped my broadband for a good long time, so I'm still stuck on dial-up through my Dreamcast.
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Old 01-10-2006, 10:39 AM   #14
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Updated folks.

Hope you like it.
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BRILLIANT!! I wasn't sure how Barty Jr. would come into play, but you incorporated him in brilliantly. How's Dumbledore going to react? Why isn't he FIGHTING to get Harry?

Lastly, JK says that Veritaserum is DEPENDENT on the element of surprise in its use. She said that a person can take an antidote before hand, block its effects with Occlumency, transfigure it into something else before it enters their throat, or magically constrict their larynx (voice-box) to say different words.

She said that they used it on Barty as he had just been stunned by dumbledore.


Just FYI. Anyway, UPDATE SOON!!!
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Old 01-10-2006, 12:13 PM   #16
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Good chapter. I see you hurried along with the oppening part, which could be both good and bad. I see how it's lacking more confrontation between Barty & Dumbledore, as well Dumbledore's attempt to dispute the guardianship. On the other hand, this SHOULD be Harry-centric story, so speading things up a bit could be a logical thing to do.

Whatever it is, I'm eager to see how you manage Harry / Junior interaction as well Crouch travels around the world. Keep it up...
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Excellent start very original. Can't wait to see how you write the barty jr./Harry interaction. Nice it will be if they grow close like brothers.
Are you palnning on having sirius escape in 3rd yr?
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How's Barty Jr. gonna feel about Harry? I mean Harry brought about the Fall of the Dark Lord!! Barty is probably going to be pretty resentful of him, and while unable to hurt him, will probably be much like Snape (I imagine).

Maybe Barty Jr. will try to get back at his father by slowly corrupting Harry (or trying to?) but Sr. is already training him, so I don't know.

Or maybe not. WHatever you decide KEEP WRITING you are now one of my favorite AUTHORS, so...um... UPDATE SOON!
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Maybe Barty Jr. will try to get back at his father by slowly corrupting Harry (or trying to?) but Sr. is already training him, so I don't know.
I like that idea. Jr gets jealous because Harry is taking center stage, and decides to get revenge by giving him lessons of his own and turning Harry slowly away from Sr's view. If only...
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That'd be good. Jnr teaching him the Dark Arts... but he's under the Imperius most of time isnt he? Meh.
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