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Old 11-21-2007, 02:16 AM   #1
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Beyond Grave Peril by Random_Shinobi - R - Dresden Files

Title: Beyond Grave Peril
Author: Random_Shinobi
Rating: R
Genre: Fantasy/Crossover
DLP Category: Alternates
Pairing: Unknown
Chapters: 10
Words: 58,734
Updated: August 6, 2010
Published: March 23, 2008
Status: Abandoned

Summary: An accident sends Harry Potter into another world and soon his talents are needed more than ever before. The question is not whether he can win, but can he survive? [HP/Dresden Files crossover]

Link: http://www.ficwad.com/story/82414
Link: http://www.fanfiction.net/s/4149894/...nd-Grave-Peril

Only one chapter so far, but it's very well written and full of action. Give it a whirl and see what you think. As for me, I'll give it a 5/5


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Old 11-21-2007, 05:39 AM   #2
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Too little for me to accurately rate it yet. The first battle scene was pretty well done, but a single battle scene alone does not a story make. Unless it's a one shot.

Anyways, I'll wait until the second chapter at least before I rate this.
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Old 11-21-2007, 01:23 PM   #3
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I am torn on this. But before I give an opinion of the story I must add this

STOP WITH THE BLOODY CROSSOVERS AND WRITE ONE FANDOM DAMN IT!

That said, this is iffy.

Dialog is ... Cliche at times and..... mechanical:

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“Curse you!” screeched the shadow piercingly, each high-pitched word loaded with seething anger and fury. “I will make you regret this!”

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Oh well, Harry thought morosely as he scratched the back of his head, messing his black, already unruly hair. At least he is a bit more dead than just a few moments ago.

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“You pathetic half-blood filth just killed my wife and son,” snarled Malfoy through his clenched, sparklingly white teeth, hatred oozing from every barely understandable word. ”The Dark Lord's orders be damned, I will kill you myself! Avada Ke-”


And one last Issue I have:

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"Bloody hell," said Harry slowly as he lowered his wand, speaking to no-one in particular. Good going there, Voldemort, the young wizard thought semi-amusedly. What kind of person makes his wards to react to an ordinary Blasting Curse, but not to an Unforgivable?
What does he expect the wards to do? O HAY! SUM1 USED UNFORGIVABLES!

As I understand it from canon, as well, there are no real wards that detect solitary spells, else the ministry would be using them.

As I said, iffy at best, But we'll wait and see for future chapters. One alone isnt enough to rate it, but its sliding to a 2 or 3 as it is.
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Old 11-21-2007, 02:26 PM   #4
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People usually do crossovers when one fandom alone isn't interesting enough. Harry Potter or Dresden Files, I can't tell in this case.
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Old 11-21-2007, 02:31 PM   #5
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What's wrong with crossovers, may I ask? If you don't like them, don't read them. And for the record, I must say that this is my first crossover ever.

About the dialogue, well, there was no dialogue – only two very short monologues. And considering the state of the speakers it comes as no surprise that they didn't say anything witty. Besides, as English is not my native language my writing will always lack some fluency. It cannot be helped except by writing more...

I find it amusing that you complain about wards that have absolutely no relevancy to the storyline. It may not be strictly canon but canon is not always same as good – think about H/G.
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Old 11-21-2007, 02:46 PM   #6
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I certainly don't have a problem with crossovers. Shezza's Denarian series has inspired a healthy appetite for HP/DF crossovers in me, at least.

I was just afraid it was a Harry Potter / Naruto crossover, looking at your penname. Glad to find it wasn't. Those crossovers are invariably uninteresting.

It is pretty well-written, but there were some awkward wording. "The world kept spinning interestingly around him" and minor mistakes(s) such as in "piercing pain into his brains".

Hope you update soon.
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Old 11-22-2007, 08:36 PM   #7
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What's wrong with crossovers, may I ask? If you don't like them, don't read them. And for the record, I must say that this is my first crossover ever.
Its not you, personally. I dislike crossovers on principle.

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I find it amusing that you complain about wards that have absolutely no relevancy to the storyline.
Fascinating, really. But, in fan fiction, I have this thing about limits and what not. Everything has to have a check and balance system. And while canon may leave a lot to be lacking, it did set at least a basic set of limits for certain aspects of magic.

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It may not be strictly canon but canon is not always same as good – think about H/G.
A point, but changing certain aspects of canon has always irked me. Werewolves, vampires, the way magic works.

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People usually do crossovers when one fandom alone isn't interesting enough. Harry Potter or Dresden Files, I can't tell in this case.
In this case, HP. >_>

And thats not true most of the time. Most people I know of that do it, do it because they like two fandoms and think they'd be awesome together and what not.
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Old 11-23-2007, 02:21 PM   #8
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W-w-w-was that a rhetorical question?

Well, that makes more sense. Another reason if some sharp person notices some subtle connection between the fandoms.
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Old 11-26-2007, 12:07 AM   #9
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Though I prefer Shezza's Dresden Files cross since I found it this one is a pretty decent read.
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Old 11-29-2007, 01:29 PM   #10
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its decent enough for now.

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Old 11-29-2007, 02:34 PM   #11
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It's way too early to rate this story, why rate a fic that only has one chapter?
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Old 12-16-2007, 10:56 PM   #12
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Heh, it IS too early to rate, but it is excellent so far, I'll definitely be keeping up with this one.
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Old 12-17-2007, 11:32 PM   #13
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STOP WITH THE BLOODY CROSSOVERS AND WRITE ONE FANDOM DAMN IT!
Ignore him. He's just not awesome enough to write crossovers...
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Wh-what? Did you just say what I think you said?

You did. You fucking did. Wow.

You have no idea of how good of a writer Vash is, do you?
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Wh-what? Did you just say what I think you said?

You did. You fucking did. Wow.

You have no idea of how good of a writer Vash is, do you?
I've read most of his stuff. Its decent, but there's no reason to be all on his dick about it. Really, he's kinda formulaic.
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That dick you refer to has been in places you could only have nightmares about.
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This little fight over the wonderment of Vash's dick and how it pertains to Samuel Black is cute and all, but let's get back to the story, shall we?

I, personally, enjoyed this story a lot. Unlike Vash, who's opinion is his own, I enjoy crossovers more then I enjoy a single universe. This is usually because single-universe genres become pretty textbook. On topic, though, I enjoyed the small bits of characterization and your battle scenes were pretty good. Even so, stuff was a little choppy and your character dialogue seems very .. comic book.
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Anyone found a FF.net link? As ficwad has a bad habit of going to the shits quite often though haven't seen it do it for a few weeks.
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That dick you refer to has been in places you could only have nightmares about.
Only if you have nightmares about little girls.
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Only if you have nightmares about little girls.
And farm animals.
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